The Field of Dreams
Just as he always dreamed, these fields will be all his40 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The only naani I knew was a Jewish grandmother on the street where we lived, sharing her smoked herring to the kids in the heat of summer before heading off to camp. Seems you qualify for reckoning.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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The only naani I knew was a Jewish grandmother on the street where we lived, sharing her smoked herring to the kids in the heat of summer before heading off to camp. Seems you qualify for reckoning.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Hahaha! Yes, that is pretty much what my recollection of the word up until yesterday, so I just figured if the story was heart felt, syllables and lines were good, I would probably be ok. I thank you my friend for your kind review and comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo and presentation.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-He sounds like a remarkable person.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like the question that opens the poem.
-It draws attention to the issue.
-Very good concluding lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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-Very nice photo and presentation.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-He sounds like a remarkable person.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like the question that opens the poem.
-It draws attention to the issue.
-Very good concluding lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much Pam, yet I changed a few things as I had never written a naani before. You are always so kind and I thank you so very much my friend for the lovely review and comments.
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You are welcome. It is much better, and really brings out the emotion of pride in being a farmer and in Grandpa, too!!!!!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'The Field of Dreams', is short, succinct and deftly descriptive, This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck in the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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'The Field of Dreams', is short, succinct and deftly descriptive, This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck in the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you my duchess, as you are so kind. This is my first time trying a naani, so glad to hear it was fine. Thanks for your kind review and lovely words.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This little boy is so cute. It would not take much for him to get lost in these plants. It is amazing how much humanity is in this child from infancy. He is a special child. And I wish him well. What a precious child. He is only four. Imagine what the world would be like with more of him. God Bless him. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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This little boy is so cute. It would not take much for him to get lost in these plants. It is amazing how much humanity is in this child from infancy. He is a special child. And I wish him well. What a precious child. He is only four. Imagine what the world would be like with more of him. God Bless him. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Carolyn for the lovely review and kind words you had for the poem. It truly is great that now he is 12 and after years helping his grandpa, he will be taking the fields over with some assistance from his grandfather. He never lost that love for it, and now a days that is really amazing. Thanks again my friend for your kind words.
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You are welcome. Give him a hug for me and tell him, I am proud of him.
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I think you are one of the sweetest people in the world my friend!
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine write and we are never alone in the world when we are surrounded by nature and all it has to offer us, a magical write and I could identify with your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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A fine write and we are never alone in the world when we are surrounded by nature and all it has to offer us, a magical write and I could identify with your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Dolly, for the lovely review and kind words you had for the poem. It truly is great that now our boy is 12 and after years helping his grandpa, he will be taking the fields over with some assistance from his grandfather. He never lost that love for it, and now a days that is really amazing. Thanks again my friend for your kind words. And we are truly surrounded by nothing but beautiful nature. So many blessings!
Comment from Raul1
This is an interesting naani poem. I have enjoyed reading it. It is well written. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Nice work! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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This is an interesting naani poem. I have enjoyed reading it. It is well written. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Nice work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Raul, I thank you very much, as it may seem a little deep but as that young boy always loved farming, he is almost old enough to farm it himself
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery
Author. Your presentation is great, too--I like the
color scheme, the picture, the formatting of the
lines, and the message.
am I all alone?
a field until the world ends?
no ~ the sun, rain,
and the farmer are your friends
I believe you are saying everything on Earth has worth
because God made it all and each has a purpose. The
field seems to be wondering, but is told it isn't alone
and does have friends. Of course, the young boy is alone
in the filed and may be wondering the same thing, so the
same words apply to him--his mind, heart, and soul could
be a field. Both are part of God's world
and are never alone.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery
Author. Your presentation is great, too--I like the
color scheme, the picture, the formatting of the
lines, and the message.
am I all alone?
a field until the world ends?
no ~ the sun, rain,
and the farmer are your friends
I believe you are saying everything on Earth has worth
because God made it all and each has a purpose. The
field seems to be wondering, but is told it isn't alone
and does have friends. Of course, the young boy is alone
in the filed and may be wondering the same thing, so the
same words apply to him--his mind, heart, and soul could
be a field. Both are part of God's world
and are never alone.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Jan! Actually that boy has wanted to be a farmer since four years old and now at 11 is almost ready to be running it. So l figured since he has been inspecting that field since childhood, he certainly portrays the farmer part. Thanks for your lovely comments Jan!
Comment from Jay Squires
I don't have a clue what a naani poem is, and that's probably as well. Otherwise, I tend to go beyond the meat of the poem itself and get all entagled in the structure.
This is an interesting departure from the anthropocentric point of view (yes, I think I made it up) and instead, you want the reader to jump into the POV of the field. That would be lonely, wouldn't it "until the world ends."? But no, Mister field, as long as you have sun and rain and a cute little gap-toothed farmer at your side ... then the world is a special place.
Thank you, Mr/Miss/Ms Anonymous. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Jay Squires
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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I don't have a clue what a naani poem is, and that's probably as well. Otherwise, I tend to go beyond the meat of the poem itself and get all entagled in the structure.
This is an interesting departure from the anthropocentric point of view (yes, I think I made it up) and instead, you want the reader to jump into the POV of the field. That would be lonely, wouldn't it "until the world ends."? But no, Mister field, as long as you have sun and rain and a cute little gap-toothed farmer at your side ... then the world is a special place.
Thank you, Mr/Miss/Ms Anonymous. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Jay Squires
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you Jay, and I wouldn't have known the difference if you made up the word or not. Frankly I had no idea what a Nanni poem was and as long as it was an Indian type poem, it only seemed right to make it about the existence of how long fields will last, or all go to the developments or erosion could take them. The boy was in the picture to simply portray the farmer, as actually he is getting close to the age to run the land, as he has always taken an interest in farming. Anyway that's my philosophical version of it. Thank you my friend for the kind review.
Comment from Whitewave
A beautiful picture - such a delightful expression of love, hope, trust and childhood innocence. He appears to be alone, but he is part of the field, tended by the farmer; nurtured by the sun and rain, and for sure, he will one day be the farmer.
But, of course, there is the bigger field of infinite, universal energy - a mysterious field of divine oneness of which we are all a part, eternally.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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A beautiful picture - such a delightful expression of love, hope, trust and childhood innocence. He appears to be alone, but he is part of the field, tended by the farmer; nurtured by the sun and rain, and for sure, he will one day be the farmer.
But, of course, there is the bigger field of infinite, universal energy - a mysterious field of divine oneness of which we are all a part, eternally.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your awesome review and words.and as yes my grandson portrayed the farmer, the bigger story was of the lasting existence of the field. You are always so in tune to all! Thank you my friend
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A sweet entry. It's a clear and to the point message. I like that the font is large and easy to read. The graphic is cute and fits well with the text. If I may suggest two things, I would center the text to make it not so left side heavy. I would also make the font green like the field. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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A sweet entry. It's a clear and to the point message. I like that the font is large and easy to read. The graphic is cute and fits well with the text. If I may suggest two things, I would center the text to make it not so left side heavy. I would also make the font green like the field. Good luck in the contest.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you Sandra! I so appreciate your lovely review and kind words.
I love your suggestions and will try, but I always seem to have problems with changing back to basic editing because of those pesky AAAAAs that pop up. But I will try to do both while in advanced editing. Thank you my friend. I do appreciate your review and feedback.
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You are most welcome.
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I had a mess for a bit but I got one out of two, as I was able to get the font in the middle nut no green words.
Thanks my friend
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Good for you. I checked it out. All you must do to make the font green is go to the advanced editor. Highlight your enter poem, and find the font color symbol on the bar and select green. Do you like it better centered?
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I do, but switched to change the font and it was all over the place, so I think l may try one more time, as before it wouldn't let me change, but will try again. Thanks again Hon!
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You are welcome.
