senryu (as chilly winds blow)
Consequences of a relationship ending.12 total reviews
Comment from Fleedleflump
Humans have a tendency to do that, don't they? It seems rare but beautiful for two plants to share a root structure and thrive equally. Lovely poem :-)
Mike
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Humans have a tendency to do that, don't they? It seems rare but beautiful for two plants to share a root structure and thrive equally. Lovely poem :-)
Mike
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Too rare, unfortunately. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from royowen
I don't know about the ambiguous Word..."rooted" but I think it can be rerouted into a more satisfying and deeply planted in some new soil, beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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I don't know about the ambiguous Word..."rooted" but I think it can be rerouted into a more satisfying and deeply planted in some new soil, beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Your review prompted me to change the last line - some readers might find 'rooted' offensive. It now reads 'My life's been uprooted'.
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I think the first was fine, gave some ambiguity to it,
