Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from rspoet
Hello JLR,
I think you picked the perfect form for your nostalgic poem
in the double refrain kyrielle.
Excellent choice of rhymes and smooth meter has the poem flowing
with the joy of the children enjoying recess and anticipating summer.
Wonderful picture that enhances the feeling.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Hello JLR,
I think you picked the perfect form for your nostalgic poem
in the double refrain kyrielle.
Excellent choice of rhymes and smooth meter has the poem flowing
with the joy of the children enjoying recess and anticipating summer.
Wonderful picture that enhances the feeling.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Robert, thanks so much! I am humbled by your six-stars!
Comment from Lilly Flowers
What a wonderful poem - it reminds me of a more innocent time when children were concerned about things like waiting for the school bell to sound. I also like that image you chose - somehow it reminded me of a Norman Rockwell painting. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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What a wonderful poem - it reminds me of a more innocent time when children were concerned about things like waiting for the school bell to sound. I also like that image you chose - somehow it reminded me of a Norman Rockwell painting. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Lilly, yes I think many of can recall these bygone times perhaps with some misty eyes to boot!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I could not wait for recess. It gave us a break. In high school, after recess, it was time to go home. I like the picture. The boys looked as if they were enjoying their recess. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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I could not wait for recess. It gave us a break. In high school, after recess, it was time to go home. I like the picture. The boys looked as if they were enjoying their recess. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Smiles, big smiles back! 🤗🤗🤗
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Smiles to you.
Comment from dragonpoet
JLR,
You did a good job in mixing the two club posts.
Something I like to do. You code good refrains for the kyrielle.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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JLR,
You did a good job in mixing the two club posts.
Something I like to do. You code good refrains for the kyrielle.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Joan, I did enjoy the Double Kreille challenge and thought this would be a great time to reuse it.
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Your welcome, JLR.
Joan
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the club. You used very good descriptive words and the art work you chose is very nice and goes well with your words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the club. You used very good descriptive words and the art work you chose is very nice and goes well with your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Teri you are so kind! Thank you for these six-stars.
Comment from leather
I am giving you five stars because I am out of the six-star awards. However, I feel this is a very touching poem and illustration combination. I wish children today could look and feel so carefree
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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I am giving you five stars because I am out of the six-star awards. However, I feel this is a very touching poem and illustration combination. I wish children today could look and feel so carefree
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Leather, thank you for these fine comments.
Comment from DeboraDyess
Hi!
love yur poem and the poetry form that you chose for the club entry. It pains a beautiful picture of the gentle beginning of summer break. I like the kids playing, cavorting, and then wildflowers included in the mix, cavorting, as well. Beautifully done!
I have no suggestions or corrections to offer.
Blessings and thanks for an exceptional read!
Deb
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hi!
love yur poem and the poetry form that you chose for the club entry. It pains a beautiful picture of the gentle beginning of summer break. I like the kids playing, cavorting, and then wildflowers included in the mix, cavorting, as well. Beautifully done!
I have no suggestions or corrections to offer.
Blessings and thanks for an exceptional read!
Deb
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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I am honored to have been given one of your six-star reviews. Thank you, Deb.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I enjoyed this. It was cleverly written and paints a vivid picture of the last day of school - at least the way it used to be! The picture was well chosen to enhance the words of the poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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I enjoyed this. It was cleverly written and paints a vivid picture of the last day of school - at least the way it used to be! The picture was well chosen to enhance the words of the poem.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Verna, thank you! Yes those very good ol school days in many ways.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
There were longer recesses as the last days wound down. The reader will be drawn in to reminisce about their last days each year, some teachers more generous than others. I like the use of personification with the clouds. This enhances the setting. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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There were longer recesses as the last days wound down. The reader will be drawn in to reminisce about their last days each year, some teachers more generous than others. I like the use of personification with the clouds. This enhances the setting. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Liz thank you!
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***Smile***
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***smile***
Comment from nomi338
This picture remind us of how simple and trouble free the children were back in the day. I very seriously doubt that any of those children felt threatened by the thought of some madman invading and shooting up their school in an effort to erase or appease his own personal demons. I apologize for hijacking your pleasant poem, but the memory is too fresh for me to not think about it.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This picture remind us of how simple and trouble free the children were back in the day. I very seriously doubt that any of those children felt threatened by the thought of some madman invading and shooting up their school in an effort to erase or appease his own personal demons. I apologize for hijacking your pleasant poem, but the memory is too fresh for me to not think about it.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Nomi, How can we not continue to feel the ache in the pit of gut! Such tragic loss for the parents and horrific lifelong memories for the surviving children who suffered witnessing these events.
I am so ready for weapons melted down and serious efforts toward mental healthcare and social reformation within the broken families to be our over-riding focus.
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Some heartless men who value money above human suffering see only how they can feed the emptiness within themselves by gorging themselves of pleasures that are never going to be enough. These monsters are in control for now, until they are brought down, we will continue to suffer.
