The lion
my father22 total reviews
Comment from leather
This is a touching commentary about a father and son who teamed up to support a love of reading. The illustration goes nicely with the writing. The parallels between 'OUR FATHER' and 'MY FATHER' work nicely. Several corrections are needed in word endings or tenses. In the sentence under the picture, the word "wanted" should be written as 'want'. Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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This is a touching commentary about a father and son who teamed up to support a love of reading. The illustration goes nicely with the writing. The parallels between 'OUR FATHER' and 'MY FATHER' work nicely. Several corrections are needed in word endings or tenses. In the sentence under the picture, the word "wanted" should be written as 'want'. Best wishes.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review
Comment from Pantygynt
I like the way this uses the well-known words of the Lord's Prayer out of context to make your point. Sometimes a father can be a very special person indeed as is the case here.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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I like the way this uses the well-known words of the Lord's Prayer out of context to make your point. Sometimes a father can be a very special person indeed as is the case here.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, and my dad really was a special person
