Chasing Gnomes
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chasing Gnomes Ch.2 - Poop Chute"Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 1
18 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Love it! There was no good way out of there, so she had to do whatever she could. I think maybe both brothers are charming and psycho, so it wouldn't matter much which was which. I suspect they'll be having a little trouble hiring guards in the future, tho.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Love it! There was no good way out of there, so she had to do whatever she could. I think maybe both brothers are charming and psycho, so it wouldn't matter much which was which. I suspect they'll be having a little trouble hiring guards in the future, tho.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Cindy! Yeah, I think they're a troublesome twosome, those Bass brothers! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.
Mike
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice story. Nice fight. Poopy ending.
He'd been nodding away while I pondered exposition. - great sentence
"It's okay," I said. - Thank you for spelling out okay. It's frustrating to see OK either in dialogue, or narrative.
cheap vindaloo, - 'vindaloo'? a new one for me. Is it different from an expensive one?
about as much fun as a cactus dildo - now 'that', I can understand
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Nice story. Nice fight. Poopy ending.
He'd been nodding away while I pondered exposition. - great sentence
"It's okay," I said. - Thank you for spelling out okay. It's frustrating to see OK either in dialogue, or narrative.
cheap vindaloo, - 'vindaloo'? a new one for me. Is it different from an expensive one?
about as much fun as a cactus dildo - now 'that', I can understand
Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Wayne :-). Here in the UK, a vindaloo is a very hot curry, famous for catching out drunk guys who think they can handle it, and also for having a fast-acting effect on needing the toilet! I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
This is good fun. I love the charaterisations and the light touch of mayhem. We know who is who and wha tey atand for and how they think in a succinct and entertaining set of situation twists. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This is good fun. I love the charaterisations and the light touch of mayhem. We know who is who and wha tey atand for and how they think in a succinct and entertaining set of situation twists. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Nancy! I love my Rozlyn character and her ragtag group of adventures, soon to be introduced. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
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:-)
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mike, I will admit, that I'm not a great fan of fantasy writing, comedy or not. But you get away with it because it's well written. Now I'll see where this is going. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Hi Mike, I will admit, that I'm not a great fan of fantasy writing, comedy or not. But you get away with it because it's well written. Now I'll see where this is going. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you :-). It's more about the characters than the genre for me, but Fantasy gives me toom to be wacky when I want to!
Mike
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting piece of reading. I like the imaginative use of language. The two below particularly hit my fancy:
by methods various and nefarious
about as much fun as a cactus dildo.
The pace was good. The dialogue campy, but believable. The story stayed on point. The ending was novel, but somehow still shitty.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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An interesting piece of reading. I like the imaginative use of language. The two below particularly hit my fancy:
by methods various and nefarious
about as much fun as a cactus dildo.
The pace was good. The dialogue campy, but believable. The story stayed on point. The ending was novel, but somehow still shitty.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you! I'm glad I managed to raise a smile, and you enjoyed the read.
Mike
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You are welcome.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Wow, such action and a disgusting end to the chapter as well. You did an excellent job. I didn't find any errors to tell you about. I enjoyed the read. Have a good evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Wow, such action and a disgusting end to the chapter as well. You did an excellent job. I didn't find any errors to tell you about. I enjoyed the read. Have a good evening. Shirley
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Shirley :-). This has been lots of fun to write!
Mike
Comment from dmt1967
The merest hint of respect showed in his expression, but (there was nothing of friendliness there.) This sounds a bit clumsy, in my opinion. (nothing more.) to me sounds crispier.
Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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The merest hint of respect showed in his expression, but (there was nothing of friendliness there.) This sounds a bit clumsy, in my opinion. (nothing more.) to me sounds crispier.
Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you - I'm glad you enjoyed the read and will consider your suggestion :-).
Mike
Comment from Judy Lawless
Mike, you have such a great sense of wit! This is another very funny chapter. It's hard to feel badly for the bloodied guards who've been taken down by a woman. lol I think when you get enough followers you won't have to reach for the top of the listings with high pay. We will want to read on no matter what. Sorry I don't have any sixes.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Mike, you have such a great sense of wit! This is another very funny chapter. It's hard to feel badly for the bloodied guards who've been taken down by a woman. lol I think when you get enough followers you won't have to reach for the top of the listings with high pay. We will want to read on no matter what. Sorry I don't have any sixes.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Judy :-). I'm hoping to get to the point where I don't need to vie for the high promotion spots so I can just get on with writing and releasing! I just want to get a bit more engagement first :-). I'm truly thrilled to have you on board and following along.
Mike
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You?re most welcome, Mike. I can?t believe how high the payments are at the top now. A year ago $1.10 was in first spot. It?s a little dis outraging. I?m not writing as often as I was.
Comment from lyenochka
I feel like I'm watching a video game - like one that my granddaughter showed me, something like Zelda the Twilight Princess. Anyway - lots of good action and I was quite surprised at Rozlyn's fighting ability. Hope she survives the poop chute!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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I feel like I'm watching a video game - like one that my granddaughter showed me, something like Zelda the Twilight Princess. Anyway - lots of good action and I was quite surprised at Rozlyn's fighting ability. Hope she survives the poop chute!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you :-). Never played the Zelda games, but I am a sucker for a good fantasy RPG so some of my ideas are very likely inspired by experiences with games!
I'm really glad you enjoyed the read. And Roz? Yeah, she's a firecracker :-)
Mike
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Loved the second chapter even more than the first! I'm sure LJ was a hobbit in the last chapter, though, right? Maybe a copyright issue? This is lots of fun to read, and I can't wait for chapter 3!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Loved the second chapter even more than the first! I'm sure LJ was a hobbit in the last chapter, though, right? Maybe a copyright issue? This is lots of fun to read, and I can't wait for chapter 3!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Hehe, yes he was. I changed it mainly because the word Hobbit immediately conjure images of Elijah Wood, and he's definitely too big to be bouncing around in chest armour!
I needed a smaller being.
I'm so glad you liked it!
Mike
