Springtime Walk
An ekphrastic acrostic sonnet31 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Very well done! A rhymed acrostic is not easy to create, especially to make it flow smoothly, and with unforced rhyme as you have done here. Your theme is clear and meaningful as well. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Very well done! A rhymed acrostic is not easy to create, especially to make it flow smoothly, and with unforced rhyme as you have done here. Your theme is clear and meaningful as well. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Wendy, this acrostic almost wrote itself since the picture was so inspiring. I am so pleased you enjoyed my rhyme and felt the theme is clearly conveyed. Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Springtime Walk', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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'Springtime Walk', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, duchess, for your high praise of my acrostic and best wishes.
Rod, you certainly deserved it.
the Duchess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The ups and downs in life can take its toll on us and we must always remember that every second is worth it. A skilful write with well chosen words and perfect flow, a joy to read and this is my last six of the week, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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The ups and downs in life can take its toll on us and we must always remember that every second is worth it. A skilful write with well chosen words and perfect flow, a joy to read and this is my last six of the week, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Dolly, I so appreciate your marvelous praise of my acrostic and those six bright stars. Many thanks!
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You are most welcome x
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-done entry to a somewhat difficult prompt. It reads like a poem from an older, gentler time. I like that the font is large and easily seen.
I like that you used a colored font. The visual fits perfectly. It is an elegant presentation. If I had one suggestion, I would put more space between the first line and the bottom of the visual. You have a large space at the bottom of the poem. Balance it out for a sharper presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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This is a well-done entry to a somewhat difficult prompt. It reads like a poem from an older, gentler time. I like that the font is large and easily seen.
I like that you used a colored font. The visual fits perfectly. It is an elegant presentation. If I had one suggestion, I would put more space between the first line and the bottom of the visual. You have a large space at the bottom of the poem. Balance it out for a sharper presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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I am very flattered that you think this poem reads like one from an "older, gentler time." Many thanks for your praise and the suggestion. I did fix it so it is now more balanced on the page.
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It was meant as a compliment. You are welcome.
Comment from mermaids
You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your sonnet form. The reader wonders what this lady is thinking as she walks among the flowers. Your words fit the picture perfectly and as nature and feelings intertwine. I like the line "Grass tall enough to brush her hips". It makes the reader feel like she is there in the painting.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your sonnet form. The reader wonders what this lady is thinking as she walks among the flowers. Your words fit the picture perfectly and as nature and feelings intertwine. I like the line "Grass tall enough to brush her hips". It makes the reader feel like she is there in the painting.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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I am so pleased to hear you say my rhyming words flow and "add strength" to the poem. I, too, wondered what Elaine might be thinking as she wandered through that countryside. Many thanks for all the kudos.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done. You nailed the form and the image. I loved it. I especially like the last stanza
Whence came the grief that made her mope?
A pleasant jaunt has changed her mien.
Life can be cruel, cause agony.
Know, too, it awes surprise
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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nicely done. You nailed the form and the image. I loved it. I especially like the last stanza
Whence came the grief that made her mope?
A pleasant jaunt has changed her mien.
Life can be cruel, cause agony.
Know, too, it awes surprise
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your encouraging praise, Jake. I am especially pleased to know the last stanza struck a chord.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I don't see many sonnets written in tertrameter but you do it beautifully, and there are some gorgeous words herein.
Great reflection of the image - I very much enjoyed :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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I don't see many sonnets written in tertrameter but you do it beautifully, and there are some gorgeous words herein.
Great reflection of the image - I very much enjoyed :-)
Mike
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your high praise of my unconventional sonnet. I enjoyed writing this because the four beat meter came naturally.
Comment from royowen
This is a fantastic rhyming poem, there are many experiences in life, some are positive, some are not, but if we float over them, it adds to that rich tapestry of experience and nance. Beautifully written my friend, written with aplomb and skill, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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This is a fantastic rhyming poem, there are many experiences in life, some are positive, some are not, but if we float over them, it adds to that rich tapestry of experience and nance. Beautifully written my friend, written with aplomb and skill, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy, for this marvelous review. You sum up my message perfectly. And I truly appreciate your praise.
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Well done
Comment from John Ciarmello
What an enjoyable read. A contrast between grief and a beautiful return. Perhaps her man on the sailing vessel. Her running down the slope to greet him. Loved it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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What an enjoyable read. A contrast between grief and a beautiful return. Perhaps her man on the sailing vessel. Her running down the slope to greet him. Loved it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my sonnet, John. I like your interpretation that her man on a ship. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a lovely poem with graceful rhymes that don't seem forced. The picture is well described and makes the reader see the potential nature has to renew hope and end despair. Best of luck in the poetry contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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This is a lovely poem with graceful rhymes that don't seem forced. The picture is well described and makes the reader see the potential nature has to renew hope and end despair. Best of luck in the poetry contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Carol, I truly appreciate your praise of my rhymes and descriptions and many thanks for your best wishes.
