Father's Daze
a 5-7-513 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I'm guessing she's having a baby? That marriage proposal could come soon enough. Thanks for the smiles and congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I'm guessing she's having a baby? That marriage proposal could come soon enough. Thanks for the smiles and congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Helen.
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
Thank you for this very fun short-form poem and the fabulous illustration you chose. Which came first? the image or the poem? They are such a perfect match. Definitely "just for fun." I like your use of the word "uttered." Finding the special word is what makes this poem shine.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you for this very fun short-form poem and the fabulous illustration you chose. Which came first? the image or the poem? They are such a perfect match. Definitely "just for fun." I like your use of the word "uttered." Finding the special word is what makes this poem shine.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, K
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This 5-7-5 really did tickle my funny bone. An original subject, well-expressed, and the picture that accompanied the words was perfect. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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This 5-7-5 really did tickle my funny bone. An original subject, well-expressed, and the picture that accompanied the words was perfect. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Kate
Comment from jaded831
A surprise indeed. A baby can be a blessing, unless, you don't want children. Then it could feel like a horror movie unfolding. But some things we just need to accept and go with the flow. Fun entry, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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A surprise indeed. A baby can be a blessing, unless, you don't want children. Then it could feel like a horror movie unfolding. But some things we just need to accept and go with the flow. Fun entry, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Jade
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hahaha! This is awesome! Since there is no way I can describe how funny this is to me, let me say that this just has to be a winner! The look on your characters 's face is priceless and the words are even better!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Hahaha! This is awesome! Since there is no way I can describe how funny this is to me, let me say that this just has to be a winner! The look on your characters 's face is priceless and the words are even better!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Debi
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I wasn't sure if the last line meant pregnancy or heart attack!
Either one made me smile. The artwork is great and compliments the
words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I wasn't sure if the last line meant pregnancy or heart attack!
Either one made me smile. The artwork is great and compliments the
words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Harmony
Comment from Janet Foor
LOL! This is a delightful 5/7/5 poem snd it looks like you definitely had fun with this one. Great play of words.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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LOL! This is a delightful 5/7/5 poem snd it looks like you definitely had fun with this one. Great play of words.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Janet
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a great picture. The man looks like he just heard that message. You picked a great picture for your story. I enjoyed reading this poem. It made me laugh. This would be one heck of a way to get a marriage proposal. Quick and sweet. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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This is a great picture. The man looks like he just heard that message. You picked a great picture for your story. I enjoyed reading this poem. It made me laugh. This would be one heck of a way to get a marriage proposal. Quick and sweet. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Carolyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha infidel:) she is having a baby:) congrats dad! I had fun reading your three liner:"Marriage proposal
uttered in the lovers' bed:
"You're having a what?!"
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Ha, ha, ha infidel:) she is having a baby:) congrats dad! I had fun reading your three liner:"Marriage proposal
uttered in the lovers' bed:
"You're having a what?!"
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Iza
Comment from Pantygynt
Does this situation, once so awkward, still require the solution of marriage. Does an affirmative answer to the question guarantee honesty in a woman until death us do part? I think we've moved on from those days. Go back to sleep.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Does this situation, once so awkward, still require the solution of marriage. Does an affirmative answer to the question guarantee honesty in a woman until death us do part? I think we've moved on from those days. Go back to sleep.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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The goal was humor, Jim. Social commentary is beyond me. : )
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And it did bring a smile to my sleepy features.
