Gregg's Parents
Contest Entry6 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What makes for a "flash fiction story?" Fewer words? Done on the hurry? I'm challenged if there are parameters re: rhyme or prose or is it a short composition? Whatever. This surely is one.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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What makes for a "flash fiction story?" Fewer words? Done on the hurry? I'm challenged if there are parameters re: rhyme or prose or is it a short composition? Whatever. This surely is one.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
I think in this life the return of someone deceased would be of enormous help to those left behind, of course if this actually happened we wouldn't need faith to keep us to keep going, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I think in this life the return of someone deceased would be of enormous help to those left behind, of course if this actually happened we wouldn't need faith to keep us to keep going, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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Welcome
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A well-paced story. The images are clear. The dialogue stays on point. The ending is geared to make supernatural seem comforting. Being a wiseass I would have his parents come back to nag at him one last time as a deja vu thing.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A well-paced story. The images are clear. The dialogue stays on point. The ending is geared to make supernatural seem comforting. Being a wiseass I would have his parents come back to nag at him one last time as a deja vu thing.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Bridge
A well written story. An interesting idea. I had hoped for a little more action in the story though I know flash fiction is difficult to write because of the constraints. All the best to you in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A well written story. An interesting idea. I had hoped for a little more action in the story though I know flash fiction is difficult to write because of the constraints. All the best to you in the contest
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from leather
You chose a good picture to go along with your story. This piece could be greatly enhanced by way of careful proofing. Your story contains mixed tenses, missing letters, and confusing sentence structure. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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You chose a good picture to go along with your story. This piece could be greatly enhanced by way of careful proofing. Your story contains mixed tenses, missing letters, and confusing sentence structure. Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a supernatural exposition to Gregg that he needs to move on with his life after the demise of his parents.
The work highlights his sad disposition that necessitated his late parents to appear to him to ameliorate the situation.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with an existing synergy between the dead and the living.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a supernatural exposition to Gregg that he needs to move on with his life after the demise of his parents.
The work highlights his sad disposition that necessitated his late parents to appear to him to ameliorate the situation.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with an existing synergy between the dead and the living.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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Remain Blessed.
