The July 4th Affair.
Fireworks for the weekend47 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This tale, Staci's Story, is well done and gives the rundown on Staci's life with her husband and business, as well as the post-married days. Just as in real life, those we meet live out their lives as well. The cool ships that pass in the night will always hold a place in memory. Nice.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This tale, Staci's Story, is well done and gives the rundown on Staci's life with her husband and business, as well as the post-married days. Just as in real life, those we meet live out their lives as well. The cool ships that pass in the night will always hold a place in memory. Nice.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Bill, thank you for the read! About those ships passing in the night, all I can say is, Yep!
Comment from TDLRasmar
I enjoyed your story. This is my first review in a very long time, and I felt comfortable giving you this rating. I did enjoy the way you broke it into two stories with two point of views. It was a nice twist. I only wished you would have had more to Larry's Story. Right now it seems lopsided toward Staci.
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I enjoyed your story. This is my first review in a very long time, and I felt comfortable giving you this rating. I did enjoy the way you broke it into two stories with two point of views. It was a nice twist. I only wished you would have had more to Larry's Story. Right now it seems lopsided toward Staci.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
Comment from Scott Rhodie
A few grammar points. Para 3 - line 1 - hot, Para 6 - line 2 - young, Para 8 - line 3 - say? Para 12 - line 2 - physiology. Para 16 - line 1 - said (no comma) Para 17 - line 1 - July 2nd. Para 18 - line 1 - beautiful, . Excellent story well told, and a good interwoven path. Well done.
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A few grammar points. Para 3 - line 1 - hot, Para 6 - line 2 - young, Para 8 - line 3 - say? Para 12 - line 2 - physiology. Para 16 - line 1 - said (no comma) Para 17 - line 1 - July 2nd. Para 18 - line 1 - beautiful, . Excellent story well told, and a good interwoven path. Well done.
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author, I like your combined stories. I like the way you write about a slam dunk! Then in the next line you write'"her name was Kim." Those 4 words are an excellent foreshadowing of the next paragraph. I knew she was the other woman right away.
Great work, Terry.
I liked this story very much.
Blessings,
Good luck!
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Author, I like your combined stories. I like the way you write about a slam dunk! Then in the next line you write'"her name was Kim." Those 4 words are an excellent foreshadowing of the next paragraph. I knew she was the other woman right away.
Great work, Terry.
I liked this story very much.
Blessings,
Good luck!
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Cindy, thank you for your kind review! I love your picture. Terry.
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Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written story with a good plot. The text is large and may be easily read. There are several shorter stories embedded in the one longer story. That is fine as long as the reader can clearly discern who is the speaker. That was the case here. Instead of writing in 3rd person ~Larry's idea of planning was (Since it's under Larry's story) wouldn't ~my, be better than Larry?
I enjoyed your story.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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This is a well-written story with a good plot. The text is large and may be easily read. There are several shorter stories embedded in the one longer story. That is fine as long as the reader can clearly discern who is the speaker. That was the case here. Instead of writing in 3rd person ~Larry's idea of planning was (Since it's under Larry's story) wouldn't ~my, be better than Larry?
I enjoyed your story.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Sandra, thank you for your kind review! I used the third person for that quote because Larry was saying what his uncle said about him. By the way, I was the Uncle, LOL. Terry.
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Now that's funny. LOL
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LOL, they say write what you know!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent. I really enjoyed reading about that long weekend and how both ended up thinking about each other when that date came round. The only one who ended up losing out was Scott. And serves him right. Well done, a very enjoyable story. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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That was excellent. I really enjoyed reading about that long weekend and how both ended up thinking about each other when that date came round. The only one who ended up losing out was Scott. And serves him right. Well done, a very enjoyable story. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Sandra, Thank you for your very kind review. Terry.
Comment from evilynne
this is a great story about a brief encounter and the fact that life takes us in different directions. It is well written, interesting reading. Evi
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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this is a great story about a brief encounter and the fact that life takes us in different directions. It is well written, interesting reading. Evi
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Evi, Thank you for the six stars!!! And your kind words in your review! Terry.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Don't we all have a 'Staci' to wonder about? Whatever happened to...fill in the blanks. We all have been there and done that. It is just a matter of moving on and settling down which we finally do later in life.
Thanks for the memories, my friend!
Jesse
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Don't we all have a 'Staci' to wonder about? Whatever happened to...fill in the blanks. We all have been there and done that. It is just a matter of moving on and settling down which we finally do later in life.
Thanks for the memories, my friend!
Jesse
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Jesse, you are welcome! And thank you for the read and review. Terry.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Terry,
This is a fine idea for a tale - two sides of the same coin.
You have deftly and swiftly created the characters (I think you lean more towards Staci than Larry) and the detail writes itself around some of your very light touches. For example, Kim being 23 and Staci 35: no further direction is required.
As I say, a very clever way to present the tale.
Thank you for the read. I enjoyed this and I wish you well with your continued writing.
Cheers
phill
PS: I think perhaps 'Wichita' rather than 'Witchita', but I'm from out of town (wrong continent, wrong hemisphere), so you might be right!
I'm not too sure you need a question mark after Staci's' last line "I do wonder what happened to Larry" as it is a statement really, and not a question...small points overall.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Hello Terry,
This is a fine idea for a tale - two sides of the same coin.
You have deftly and swiftly created the characters (I think you lean more towards Staci than Larry) and the detail writes itself around some of your very light touches. For example, Kim being 23 and Staci 35: no further direction is required.
As I say, a very clever way to present the tale.
Thank you for the read. I enjoyed this and I wish you well with your continued writing.
Cheers
phill
PS: I think perhaps 'Wichita' rather than 'Witchita', but I'm from out of town (wrong continent, wrong hemisphere), so you might be right!
I'm not too sure you need a question mark after Staci's' last line "I do wonder what happened to Larry" as it is a statement really, and not a question...small points overall.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Phill, thank you for your wonderful review and the two edits, right you are on both counts, I will get them changed. Terry.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
The story makes me wonder about the relationships, as if they are real people, that makes it good work on your part.
True love, or a substitute - little did he know that there 'is' no substitute.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Well written.
The story makes me wonder about the relationships, as if they are real people, that makes it good work on your part.
True love, or a substitute - little did he know that there 'is' no substitute.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Wayne, very insightful on your part, thank you for reading and the review! Terry.
