The July 4th Affair.
Fireworks for the weekend47 total reviews
Comment from Kevin McNeany
'Life is good. Still, on July 4th, I wonder what happened to Staci'...wow! I am left wondering as well! What a pacy and fascinating write! It's a brilliant piece of work not a genre I normally read but I was drawn to it straight away and you certainly delivered. Well done. Kindest regards and look forward to reading more of your work. Kevin :)
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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'Life is good. Still, on July 4th, I wonder what happened to Staci'...wow! I am left wondering as well! What a pacy and fascinating write! It's a brilliant piece of work not a genre I normally read but I was drawn to it straight away and you certainly delivered. Well done. Kindest regards and look forward to reading more of your work. Kevin :)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Kevin, Thank you for the kind review. There is a similar story in my portfolio entitled "Femme Fatale" you might enjoy. Terry.
Comment from Susan Newell
Terry,
I like this format and I have a feeling that there are a lot of these stories about brief encounters and lingering questions and "what ifs." I also enjoyed the details of the story. It is all very believable and the characters could be pulled from all of our circles of acquaintances. Some language notes follow.
Sue
a blimp on a radar -- LOL (The Goodyear?) ==> blip
Yuppies were young upward mobile people ==> upwardly
I do wonder what happened to Larry? -- either use a period, because it's a statement, or make it a question by putting a comma after wonder and cap What. (At least that's how I would do it. Styles may vary.)
My aunt's husband said, 'Larry's idea of planning was to put both hands in his pockets only to declare damn, I am out of money!' He was right. -- Why not "uncle," and why not double quotation marks?
When I met Staci on July 2nd, I don't remember if I ran out of money. -- I would reverse these two clauses. It sounds like you are in the past. By starting with "when" I'm expecting you to say "I didn't."
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Terry,
I like this format and I have a feeling that there are a lot of these stories about brief encounters and lingering questions and "what ifs." I also enjoyed the details of the story. It is all very believable and the characters could be pulled from all of our circles of acquaintances. Some language notes follow.
Sue
a blimp on a radar -- LOL (The Goodyear?) ==> blip
Yuppies were young upward mobile people ==> upwardly
I do wonder what happened to Larry? -- either use a period, because it's a statement, or make it a question by putting a comma after wonder and cap What. (At least that's how I would do it. Styles may vary.)
My aunt's husband said, 'Larry's idea of planning was to put both hands in his pockets only to declare damn, I am out of money!' He was right. -- Why not "uncle," and why not double quotation marks?
When I met Staci on July 2nd, I don't remember if I ran out of money. -- I would reverse these two clauses. It sounds like you are in the past. By starting with "when" I'm expecting you to say "I didn't."
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Sue, Thank you for reading and the edits. That is the last of the fiction for me for a while I think. It is back to the familiar ground of nonfiction. Terry.
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You are welcome, Terry. Please don't quit on fiction. Start with something true, then embellish it into a different story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story about a great weekend that proved to be unforgettable thirty years later. It's strange she thought Larry would go nowhere and she picked the wrong man.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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This is a good story about a great weekend that proved to be unforgettable thirty years later. It's strange she thought Larry would go nowhere and she picked the wrong man.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Carol, thank for reading, she did pick the wrong man, but she probably would have messed him up. Terry.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Terry,
Just wondering who's thinking of whom on this July the fourth?
Is Scott thinking of you(or who the protagonist name was?) Or is he still thinking of Kim..., or is he still married and living with the woman with the kids?
Hmmm, or is Larry still thinking about your meeting of the four of July, no, I guess he's thinking of Staci with the fit body... and I'm wondering who Larry ended up marrying?
But what I do know for sure... you engaged me in a great little read where there a few people thinking about, or of each other this fourth of July... some happy, some not so happy, or maybe just not satisfied with their patch of green grass.
Thanks Terry, I enjoyed the read... the wicked webs we weave!:)
With our thoughts we create...
a web of connection.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Hi Terry,
Just wondering who's thinking of whom on this July the fourth?
Is Scott thinking of you(or who the protagonist name was?) Or is he still thinking of Kim..., or is he still married and living with the woman with the kids?
Hmmm, or is Larry still thinking about your meeting of the four of July, no, I guess he's thinking of Staci with the fit body... and I'm wondering who Larry ended up marrying?
But what I do know for sure... you engaged me in a great little read where there a few people thinking about, or of each other this fourth of July... some happy, some not so happy, or maybe just not satisfied with their patch of green grass.
Thanks Terry, I enjoyed the read... the wicked webs we weave!:)
With our thoughts we create...
a web of connection.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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James, thank you for reading, you ask some good questions. Terry.
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My Pleasure Terry.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Great job with this, Terry. I became a bit lost, thinking the next section would be Scott's story, but it turned into Larry's story. I got back into it fairly quickly, though. Not sure if that was intentional or not. Regardless it all worked fine and was entertaining.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Great job with this, Terry. I became a bit lost, thinking the next section would be Scott's story, but it turned into Larry's story. I got back into it fairly quickly, though. Not sure if that was intentional or not. Regardless it all worked fine and was entertaining.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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John, interesting. Thank you for reading. Terry.
Comment from amahra
Good story-telling. I liked that you wrote the story from two different perspectives. But Scott is not the only butt-hole; though Larry moved on all right, he still could have contacted Staci. Kim, however, is the only one I think should get run over by a bus...just kidding. LOL!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Good story-telling. I liked that you wrote the story from two different perspectives. But Scott is not the only butt-hole; though Larry moved on all right, he still could have contacted Staci. Kim, however, is the only one I think should get run over by a bus...just kidding. LOL!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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LOL, That is a great review, thank you! Terry.
Comment from Ulla
Yeah, as so many stories goes this is it. The go their separate ways but have never really forgotten about each other. You describe this so very well in this story, Terry. Bittersweet as it in is. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Yeah, as so many stories goes this is it. The go their separate ways but have never really forgotten about each other. You describe this so very well in this story, Terry. Bittersweet as it in is. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Ulla, thank you very much! Terry.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a well-written slice-of-life story describing events in the life of Staci, Larry, Kim, and Scott. Combined, the reader has a pretty consistent view of at least some circumstances in each persons life over a 30 year period. This story is easy to read, and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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This is a well-written slice-of-life story describing events in the life of Staci, Larry, Kim, and Scott. Combined, the reader has a pretty consistent view of at least some circumstances in each persons life over a 30 year period. This story is easy to read, and enjoyable.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading, I am delighted you found it enjoyable. Terry.
Comment from judiverse
Oh, the might-have-beens. Staci thought Scott was the one for her, but he turned out to be a faithless loser. She has had a good life, nevertheless, but still thinks of Larry, especially on July 4th. Larry has done all right for himself, too. Sounds like he has had a successful marriage and business. Still, he thinks of Staci. Excellent presentation from the different points of view. Shows people can get on with their lives, despite the choices they made when younger. Great story. judi
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Oh, the might-have-beens. Staci thought Scott was the one for her, but he turned out to be a faithless loser. She has had a good life, nevertheless, but still thinks of Larry, especially on July 4th. Larry has done all right for himself, too. Sounds like he has had a successful marriage and business. Still, he thinks of Staci. Excellent presentation from the different points of view. Shows people can get on with their lives, despite the choices they made when younger. Great story. judi
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Judi, thank you for reading, you have understood the story, just as I intended. Terry.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's life now isn't it. My brother-in-law wanted to marry my best friend but her father was a banker and "Bob was not good enough for her. She married another and it ended in divorce. My brother-in -law became a millionaire and had a very successful life. Well done, Terry. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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That's life now isn't it. My brother-in-law wanted to marry my best friend but her father was a banker and "Bob was not good enough for her. She married another and it ended in divorce. My brother-in -law became a millionaire and had a very successful life. Well done, Terry. Nancy:)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Nancy, Thank you very much, that is a great story you have about your brother-in-law. Terry.
