Femme Fatale?
Life Happens!32 total reviews
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Very nice, Terry. You showed a very vulnerable side of yourself in this story. I like the different perspectives as well. I don't think she was a Femme Fatale, either. She sounds like a human woman who makes bad decisions and good decisions like any other person. You likely could say that for most people (maybe even Femme Fatales).
The story is well written, engaging and fun with a bit of pathos thrown in as well. Great job - thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Very nice, Terry. You showed a very vulnerable side of yourself in this story. I like the different perspectives as well. I don't think she was a Femme Fatale, either. She sounds like a human woman who makes bad decisions and good decisions like any other person. You likely could say that for most people (maybe even Femme Fatales).
The story is well written, engaging and fun with a bit of pathos thrown in as well. Great job - thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Donna, so Sam is a pen name! very cool. Thank you for reading and getting the story and also that I was trying to write something in a different way. Terry.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a brilliant idea, having two stories that ended up totally different to what we thought it would. The married man's marriage was bound to fail, neither really knew each other and when the wife went back to her family, you knew then it was over. The love affair lasted a bit longer, but as they grew in their seperate careers, so the affair ended. But they, at least, found what they were looking for in a marriage. Very well done. I enjoyed reading it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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That was a brilliant idea, having two stories that ended up totally different to what we thought it would. The married man's marriage was bound to fail, neither really knew each other and when the wife went back to her family, you knew then it was over. The love affair lasted a bit longer, but as they grew in their seperate careers, so the affair ended. But they, at least, found what they were looking for in a marriage. Very well done. I enjoyed reading it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Sandra, thank you for the review, I think you have nailed it. It was a different kind of write for me. Thanks, Terry.
Comment from LisaMay
We may think we know someone but we are all subject to different influences (work, friends, parents) that impact our behaviour. In your story, knitting both points of view in the relationship adds interest... it makes 2 stories that overlap then unravel.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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We may think we know someone but we are all subject to different influences (work, friends, parents) that impact our behaviour. In your story, knitting both points of view in the relationship adds interest... it makes 2 stories that overlap then unravel.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Lisa, thank you! This is a new form of writing for me. I appreciate your comments. Terry.
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting life story which you developed well with the different points of view. Sometimes things are not as they seem to an onlooker but when the character expresses his/ her own perspective and thoughts there is an increased depth of awareness. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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An interesting life story which you developed well with the different points of view. Sometimes things are not as they seem to an onlooker but when the character expresses his/ her own perspective and thoughts there is an increased depth of awareness. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Wendy, thank you, I was trying something different for me. Terry
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Wow Terry, is this all fiction? I've never read anything from you that wasn't pertaining to your life in general. Your writing as always is fabulous, but I hadn't looked to see if it was fiction, and it doesn't sound like you. So to be completely honest, I felt myself feeling strange as I read. I was picturing Zoe and praying that, well that this wasn't you, yet then there was the ending seemed like it could be your life. Dang it Terry, you are just too good of a writer so I was confused until I read that it was fiction. You are just too convincing and I guess that's what makes you such an incredible writer my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Wow Terry, is this all fiction? I've never read anything from you that wasn't pertaining to your life in general. Your writing as always is fabulous, but I hadn't looked to see if it was fiction, and it doesn't sound like you. So to be completely honest, I felt myself feeling strange as I read. I was picturing Zoe and praying that, well that this wasn't you, yet then there was the ending seemed like it could be your life. Dang it Terry, you are just too good of a writer so I was confused until I read that it was fiction. You are just too convincing and I guess that's what makes you such an incredible writer my friend.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Debi, LOL, I was trying to write something different. I had to use a few things I knew and somethings I didn't know. I am trying to one more like this that I will post next weekend. Thank you. Terry.
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I am forewarned and promise to read the fiction/non-fiction part, so I don't go into complete shock. hehe,
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LOL
Comment from lyenochka
There are a lot of familiar details which make me think this may not be all fiction after all. But what I liked most about the story is that despite the heartbreak, there is no ill will and no blame thrown.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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There are a lot of familiar details which make me think this may not be all fiction after all. But what I liked most about the story is that despite the heartbreak, there is no ill will and no blame thrown.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Helen, I was trying to write something different for me. I did use some of what I know and made up some things I did not know. I am going to do one more next week and I will how it goes from there. Thank you, Terry.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A story of failed relationships. One must think in the end was the resolution love or just tiring of the excitement and finally settling.
The story is written well. The flow is good. The pov changes keep us in touch with the characters. The images are clear. As with most human relations we are left with some unanswered questions. Nothing is neat and tidy.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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A story of failed relationships. One must think in the end was the resolution love or just tiring of the excitement and finally settling.
The story is written well. The flow is good. The pov changes keep us in touch with the characters. The images are clear. As with most human relations we are left with some unanswered questions. Nothing is neat and tidy.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much! This is a much different kind of writing for me, I did like trying a new form. Terry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your story, Terry. It was interesting
to read. I like the way you subtitled the His/Her story. You
characters are believable and relatable to many in real life.
Your words flow smoothly with great details. The ending is
perfect.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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You did a great job with your story, Terry. It was interesting
to read. I like the way you subtitled the His/Her story. You
characters are believable and relatable to many in real life.
Your words flow smoothly with great details. The ending is
perfect.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Jan, thank you! I know you have read other things I have written so you probably see this was a new path for me. I am experimenting and I will see where it goes. Terry.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Reading this short story reminded me a lot of my own life. We meet a lot of people in our youth - when we're single - when we're ready for a good time. Then we meet "the one", and everything falls into place.
This is a well-told story that could be about a lot of us. Well written and straightforward. Enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Reading this short story reminded me a lot of my own life. We meet a lot of people in our youth - when we're single - when we're ready for a good time. Then we meet "the one", and everything falls into place.
This is a well-told story that could be about a lot of us. Well written and straightforward. Enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Pam, Thank you! This was a new form of writing for me, and I thank you for the review and kind comments. Terry.
Comment from Jay Squires
Once you finish this mosaic of Terry Broxon, and we finish reading it, we'll know everything you want us to know about the author and I believe more than you knew about him before you began your tale.
HER STORY [Your use of topics and subtopics in your biographical pieces is every effective]
There's a lot to tell about you and your relationship with your first wife. I hope that's to come.
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Once you finish this mosaic of Terry Broxon, and we finish reading it, we'll know everything you want us to know about the author and I believe more than you knew about him before you began your tale.
HER STORY [Your use of topics and subtopics in your biographical pieces is every effective]
There's a lot to tell about you and your relationship with your first wife. I hope that's to come.
Jay
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Jay...lol, no you don't really want to hear that! Thanks for reading this was a departure for me. Terry.
