In Conclusion
the last stanza starts with In conclusion7 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Shakespeare had a great ability to understand human nature much the same as Charles Dickens years later. Both writers spoke of humanity with great knowledge and we read about the heartache and despair, the love and all the emotions about grief and death, you summed up life here with its good and bad and we all hope to find contentment, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Shakespeare had a great ability to understand human nature much the same as Charles Dickens years later. Both writers spoke of humanity with great knowledge and we read about the heartache and despair, the love and all the emotions about grief and death, you summed up life here with its good and bad and we all hope to find contentment, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thanks Dolly. Glad you understand my twist of English from someone with a Pole heredity.😇👀🙈
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Thanks Dolly. Glad you understand my twist of English from someone with a Pole heredity.😇👀🙈
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, the "clown in you" didn't do it for me as much as ending with that sixth stanza -- however -- there's certainly not a thing wrong with what you wrote. It's just my own taste (the romantic in me - *grin*).
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Well, the "clown in you" didn't do it for me as much as ending with that sixth stanza -- however -- there's certainly not a thing wrong with what you wrote. It's just my own taste (the romantic in me - *grin*).
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks for letting me know. I appreciate the time taken to read what was wrote. Have a grand day.
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Thank you, and you're welcome. :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
Interesting piece, but somehow for me it is neither fish nor fowl i.e. neither an entertaining foray through the relationships of Shakespeare's characters nor quite a searching examination of your own experiences of romance.
You could well have expanded the Shakespearean theme - Bassanio and Portia (love is a lottery), Hamlet and Ophelia (love ignored), Othello and Desdemona (love slain by jealousy) and so on.
The phrase 'some of them I am assured' in stanza 2 does not make sense to me...
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Interesting piece, but somehow for me it is neither fish nor fowl i.e. neither an entertaining foray through the relationships of Shakespeare's characters nor quite a searching examination of your own experiences of romance.
You could well have expanded the Shakespearean theme - Bassanio and Portia (love is a lottery), Hamlet and Ophelia (love ignored), Othello and Desdemona (love slain by jealousy) and so on.
The phrase 'some of them I am assured' in stanza 2 does not make sense to me...
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Read the end of stanza two with the first line of line three to see if that is more clear,please
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Yep, my mistake, but aren't those full stops at the end of these two lines:
and some of them.
I am assured.
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Poetic license
I write for fun and cross fingers some will smile.
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Nah! I'm a teacher. faulty punctuation just makes your writing hard to understand!
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Grammarly thnks well of it, and my dearest encourager of all times was Ms parker who invited me back twice a year to spin my writings to teens in her h.s. class with never a word that didn't lift my feeling special.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. I like that the font is centered on the graphic and is in large easy to read font. I probably would have stopped at stanza six because basically the rest of the stanzas give examples to explain the message already given. However, as many of us self-editing isn't an easy exercise to master. The visual fits well at Stanza 6 and 12.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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This is a good poem. I like that the font is centered on the graphic and is in large easy to read font. I probably would have stopped at stanza six because basically the rest of the stanzas give examples to explain the message already given. However, as many of us self-editing isn't an easy exercise to master. The visual fits well at Stanza 6 and 12.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I replied to this earlier but it won't go away so I am trying again. Maybe I need to save reply singularly instead of emmasse.?
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Yes, you need to save each one separately.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Hey, you're asking the wrong person what's better or not in poetry. A poet I am not and never will be. The poem sounds fine to me just as you have written it, but what do I know? (kidding) Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Hey, you're asking the wrong person what's better or not in poetry. A poet I am not and never will be. The poem sounds fine to me just as you have written it, but what do I know? (kidding) Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I have a lot of fun processing a never-ending engaging mind. Mine is like a tilt-a-whirl, spinning like earth in space, never knowing what thoughts of a kajillion is going to fall into space. Love it.
Comment from leather
This was a very well-written piece of poetry and maintained the yin/yang aspect throughout all12 stanzas. It was similar to the glass half empty or half whole saying.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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This was a very well-written piece of poetry and maintained the yin/yang aspect throughout all12 stanzas. It was similar to the glass half empty or half whole saying.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Looking through your portfolio our minds may be two like. Where or how is it you find your subjects? Rock painting, dandelions, hair? Interesting.Thanks for reading me.
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You're welcome.
As a general rule, I try to avoid the most common subjects such as Love (lost or found), religion, babies, or depression.
Then I might free-associate or look around myself for things.
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Looking through your portfolio our minds may be two like. Where or how is it you find your subjects? Rock painting, dandelions, hair? Interesting.Thanks for reading me.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice poem for the contest. You embed nice images and details into the poem that add substance and embellish the meaning of the poem. Two lines in particular caught my attention:
Scarred memories
or memorable memoirs?
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Nice poem for the contest. You embed nice images and details into the poem that add substance and embellish the meaning of the poem. Two lines in particular caught my attention:
Scarred memories
or memorable memoirs?
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Appreciate your stopping by to read me. Hope you return again and more
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Appreciate your stopping by to read me. Hope you return again and more
