Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

I like your poem. It tells a lot about what love really is. Wild crazy love never seems to last. The steadily growing kind works best. I fear you do have a problem with your syllable count in the first stanza to be a sedoka poem.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

thanks I will go back and fix that

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi,
I enjoyed this simple yet effective use of the title within your Sedoka poem.

I appreciate the double hit to prolong the feeling and smiled at your conclusion:)

Just wondering, in your second line... Is it just chemistry? 6 syllables?

I enjoyed your craft and wish you all the very best in this prompt writing contest.

With our thoughts we create...
sanity within the mind.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

thanks for the review I will double check the count

reply by Jumbo J on 27-Jun-2022

My pleasure... and better to check than no qualify for the contest. All the best, have a great day.

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Good

This is an interesting poem with call and response. The language is clear. The flow is good. The poem stays on topic.

Suggestion:
The first verse does not fit the syllable count in the instructions. The second line is six syllables and the third line is only five.

Thanks for sharing. Good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

thanks I will fix that

reply by dellsworthpoet on 27-Jun-2022

You are welcome.