To The One I Love
I will always love you.3 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Obviously the love is sincere and you express sweet sentiments here with these statements. However, something with a more poetic turn of phrase would have more impact, to take it above the ordinary.
I also find it perplexing why the font size varies so much. I find that distracting and for me it doesn't add to the presentation but leaves me wondering why.
(If you ask me to review something I will give my honest response.)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
Obviously the love is sincere and you express sweet sentiments here with these statements. However, something with a more poetic turn of phrase would have more impact, to take it above the ordinary.
I also find it perplexing why the font size varies so much. I find that distracting and for me it doesn't add to the presentation but leaves me wondering why.
(If you ask me to review something I will give my honest response.)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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The font varies so it will fit in each line.
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Why does it need to fit in each line? Are you looking at it on a tiny screen?
Most computer screens allow normal size for every line. I think the distraction of different font sizes messes with the poem.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Updated after error fixed and upgraded to five stars.
Not important: a couple of your lines appear to be in a smaller font. Did you intend them to be that way?
More important: line 2 only has six syllables when it should be seven.
Otherwise a pretty little poem written as atribute to a good friend.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
Updated after error fixed and upgraded to five stars.
Not important: a couple of your lines appear to be in a smaller font. Did you intend them to be that way?
More important: line 2 only has six syllables when it should be seven.
Otherwise a pretty little poem written as atribute to a good friend.
Steve
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Yes I meant it that way so each line would fit.
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I fixed it. Higher review.
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Did you read my story about Sly in the contest?
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Did you read the story I wrote about my cat?
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Hi. This was a blind contest so your name is not revealed. Thus I have no way of knowing how to get to your portfolio to read other stories.
In any case, urging other members to read your work is frowned on by the site. You have to promote it as best you can and then let the work speak for itself.
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Ok
Comment from Regina Elliott
What a pleasant and loving
poem. It's an oasis from
writing/reading sad and
tragic poems. Thank you for
penning this lovely poem. My
very best wishes for the
contest. Blessings
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
What a pleasant and loving
poem. It's an oasis from
writing/reading sad and
tragic poems. Thank you for
penning this lovely poem. My
very best wishes for the
contest. Blessings
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks!
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Did you read my story about Sly in the contest?
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Did you read the story I wrote about my cat?