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A Tribute to Bart Hersey

A special friendship

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Comment from Raul1
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Raul. I really enjoyed my visits with Bart.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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There's one sentence that feels forced to me - And he'd guarantee of a real perfect fit."

Otherwise, I love this friendship poem as I am a runner who has sometimes struggled to find the right shoe, and who lost a very special running friend a few years back.

Lovely tribute.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Pam. You are right. I'm going to leave out the word "of".
Comment from Lobber
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Hello my friend,
A great tribute to a wonderful man.
As you wisely point out:
)My good friend is gone now. I'll see him no more,
But I know that his spirit's still here.(
It is words like these that drive us all to remember with faith.
- Lob
p.s. - You might want to fix the )one( word in your notes.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Lob. I'll take a look at my notes.
Comment from Frank Malley
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"A Tribute to Bart Hersey" commemorates an artisan of the sort that's become rare nowadays: a shoe maker, a man who with his own resources, tools and skills makes a fine product. Most of the positive things that were part of cottage industries have been replaced by the prodigious outputs and lowered costs of mass production, but there is a way of life that has been sacrificed. This poem celebrates the life of a man whose work remained for him a source of connection and pride, beyond merely giving him an income. In the boom times of artisans and individual shops, there was a connection to customers and community that is now largely lost, and this is a great cost.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Frank. Bart was certainly a rare individual. He was a perfectionist when it came to building a shoe.
reply by Frank Malley on 29-Jun-2022
    The sociology we are moving into isn't as tidy as sci-fi makes it in movies; maybe it will be chaos that saves us from homogenization.
Comment from John Ciarmello
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Oh, Paul, this is such a soul-touching and beautiful piece. What a tribute to a spirited friendship. That is all a man needs is one genuine friend to complete the cycle of life. So beautiful my friend. It brought a tear.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, John. One of the true tests of a poem such as this is - does it bring a tear to the eye?
Comment from Aussie
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Paul, I wish I had a six, this is a great story/poem.
What started out as a new pair of shoes, it went on to be a lifelong friendship. Wonderful poem, most enjoyable and he will be waiting when you cross over. Blessings, K xx

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Aussie. Your comments are worth more than a six to me.
Comment from bob cullen
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A very nice tribute to a good friend. Loved the poem about this magic shoemaker. The rhythm and rhyme read and flowed nicely. A really enjoyable post.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Bob. I never thought of him that way, but you are right. He was a magic shoemaker.
Comment from Wendy G
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That is certainly a beautiful and meaningful friendship, expressed very well in your smooth well-rhymed and flowing verse. It should do well, and I send you best wishes for it.
Wendy

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, Wendy. My son has gone on vacation, so Sam is here with us. He says hi.
Comment from LisaMay
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As an ex-athlete myself I was drawn to your poem. Forming a friendship connection through personalised shoes makes for an unusual topic - you've given us a story in a poem about how your relationship developed and will linger still, those shoes bearing good memories.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks, LisaMay. I wear a pair of his shoes every day.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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This is a good story. You are a good story teller. It flies very well from the beginning to the end.

It is sad that he is gone. Yet I still remember him... that's good.

Thanks for Sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
    Thanks for the review. I'm sure I will se him on the other side.