Eyes Bright With Promise
We pledged our future.14 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is truly a very heart felt poem you have penned about the one you loved from your heart. I am so sorry this happened to you. I hope and pray things get better for you! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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This is truly a very heart felt poem you have penned about the one you loved from your heart. I am so sorry this happened to you. I hope and pray things get better for you! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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It happened ages ago and I'm fine now... still single but happy enough. I dredged up old feelings for the contest, as a contrast to what the other entries will probably be - sugar sweet.
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting poem. I would recommend a few things for consistency sake. But, I know where emotions are involved, things just are what the yare.
As years kept on passing
my love for him grew,
but he had been wanting
a challenge or two.
-This first part contradicts here:
Take note of my tale
you smug wives out there.
Take care of your man,
place his glass by his chair,
to a young bitch {on} heat.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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This is an interesting poem. I would recommend a few things for consistency sake. But, I know where emotions are involved, things just are what the yare.
As years kept on passing
my love for him grew,
but he had been wanting
a challenge or two.
-This first part contradicts here:
Take note of my tale
you smug wives out there.
Take care of your man,
place his glass by his chair,
to a young bitch {on} heat.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review comments.
How is that inconsistent? We never know completely what is in other's minds - on the surface all might appear OK.
From the Internet:
''If you own a bitch (female dog) then provided she has not been spayed she will come into season on a fairly regular basis through her life. This is commonly known as 'being on heat' and is something that owners of all dogs need to be aware of.''
This was from a UK website and it is also what we'd say in Australia and NZ; maybe it is US usage to say 'in heat'.
Comment from Christine Geyer
Well I enjoyed reading your poem until the end when it got a little lewd. The beginning spoke of sadness and heartbreak but then rapidly turned to bitter scorn. Overall the poem was good. You expressed your emotions well. Were it me I would change the ending . It does not befit your skill and made me score this lower than I would have
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Well I enjoyed reading your poem until the end when it got a little lewd. The beginning spoke of sadness and heartbreak but then rapidly turned to bitter scorn. Overall the poem was good. You expressed your emotions well. Were it me I would change the ending . It does not befit your skill and made me score this lower than I would have
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Prude. It's real life. It's what happened. I'm sure many others will tell me off as well though. And others will laugh. It takes all sorts and I am sick of predictable saccharine poems.
Comment from royowen
I don't mind you being bitter, but don't let your bitterness rule your life, not all men are like that, attraction and temptation are one thing, and fidelity are another. There was something written this morning that I read with some great advice in it, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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I don't mind you being bitter, but don't let your bitterness rule your life, not all men are like that, attraction and temptation are one thing, and fidelity are another. There was something written this morning that I read with some great advice in it, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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It doesn't rule my life, I let it go, just resurrected it for this contest as a variation to all the others that are probably going to be saccharine.
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It was just a commentary, not a condemnation,
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I didn't take it as a condemnation.
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That is good,
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:))
