Chasing Gnomes
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Chasing Gnomes Ch.5 - Harried"Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 1
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Mike. Three Harries! imagine that. That could confuse a lot of people including the reader reading this.
Your imagination is wonderful, and I so enjoy the story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Hi Mike. Three Harries! imagine that. That could confuse a lot of people including the reader reading this.
Your imagination is wonderful, and I so enjoy the story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Ulla :-). Don't worry, they're not long term additions! So glad you're still enjoying this madcap tale!
Mike
Comment from amahra
I love your writing; it is extremely sophisticated due to your great choice of words.
"Terence, ya bastard!" shouted Harry, head-butting a solid thigh with merry enthusiasm. "Och, bugger. Yer built like a brick [shite-house!"]
[Was there a play on words when you wrote, 'shite-house' or did you mean shit-house?]
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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I love your writing; it is extremely sophisticated due to your great choice of words.
"Terence, ya bastard!" shouted Harry, head-butting a solid thigh with merry enthusiasm. "Och, bugger. Yer built like a brick [shite-house!"]
[Was there a play on words when you wrote, 'shite-house' or did you mean shit-house?]
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the lovely compliment :-). The 'shite' spelling and pronunciation is an accent thing - my questionably attempt at a Scottish dialect.
Mike
Comment from Cindy Warren
This should get interesting. They have scary people behind them and scarier people ahead of them. I can't imagine their borrowed wagon will be fast enough to get them out of trouble.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This should get interesting. They have scary people behind them and scarier people ahead of them. I can't imagine their borrowed wagon will be fast enough to get them out of trouble.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hehe, thanks Cindy :-). There be trouble ahead!
Mike
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have a very amusing turn of imagination and pen (likely computer). There are way too many Harry's. Rozlyn's promise to return the wagon to its owners seems very much like wishful thinking.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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You have a very amusing turn of imagination and pen (likely computer). There are way too many Harry's. Rozlyn's promise to return the wagon to its owners seems very much like wishful thinking.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Carol :-). Yes, I worry that wagon might be in for some tough times!
Mike
Comment from dmt1967
This is another good chapter and very funny. I got confused with all the Harry's lol but I guess that was supposed to happen. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is another good chapter and very funny. I got confused with all the Harry's lol but I guess that was supposed to happen. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you :-). Originally, the Harrys were also given surname after their fathers, so they were all called Harry Harrison, but that got a bit too much!
Mike
Comment from Tyletta Staton
This was really fun. I nearly shot grape juice from nose in several places, and the text was a lot of fun to read aloud. The names were great, and if it didn't have some of the more adult imagery, I bet even my younger kids would enjoy it. Good job!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This was really fun. I nearly shot grape juice from nose in several places, and the text was a lot of fun to read aloud. The names were great, and if it didn't have some of the more adult imagery, I bet even my younger kids would enjoy it. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much :-). I love writing these stories. These are actually the slightly tamer versions of my original drafts - I can't resist being a bit naughty, lol. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that will be confusing to have three Harrys. (I think with names you don't change the 'y' to 'ies.') I wondered who commandeered the wagon. And does Lindon's trance make that awful stench? Fun characters and you got me rooting for the team.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Well, that will be confusing to have three Harrys. (I think with names you don't change the 'y' to 'ies.') I wondered who commandeered the wagon. And does Lindon's trance make that awful stench? Fun characters and you got me rooting for the team.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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It's more than Lindon's muscles relax when he goes into the trance, and gasses escape :-). Many thanks for the catch on Harry! So glad you're enjoying it :-).
Mike
Comment from royowen
I like the fact that Lindon has the ability to translate himself with a disconcerted odour that the others find extremely uncomfortable, and need nose plugs to counter the smell. The company has inherited a couple of stowaways in their midst, they need t change direction, because Linden's spying is successful, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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I like the fact that Lindon has the ability to translate himself with a disconcerted odour that the others find extremely uncomfortable, and need nose plugs to counter the smell. The company has inherited a couple of stowaways in their midst, they need t change direction, because Linden's spying is successful, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Roy :-)
Mike
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Most welcome
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The description of the reactions to the disgusting smell was fantastic, even though the actual reasons for it remained mysterious. The other thing I liked was the demonstration of loyalty between drarves - reminded me of the sayng honour among thieves. Excellent chapter. Kate xx
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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The description of the reactions to the disgusting smell was fantastic, even though the actual reasons for it remained mysterious. The other thing I liked was the demonstration of loyalty between drarves - reminded me of the sayng honour among thieves. Excellent chapter. Kate xx
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Kate :-). I'm really glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG! This is hilariously funny, disgusting and brilliant! I will make sure I never read this before I eat. Now we have a full crew, a wagon, and an army following, a nice gentle start! Some of your similes are amazing, how do you come up with so many? It would take a month of Sundays to come up with just half what you have here. I'm loving this story! Let's have the next part ASAP. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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OMG! This is hilariously funny, disgusting and brilliant! I will make sure I never read this before I eat. Now we have a full crew, a wagon, and an army following, a nice gentle start! Some of your similes are amazing, how do you come up with so many? It would take a month of Sundays to come up with just half what you have here. I'm loving this story! Let's have the next part ASAP. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Sandra :-). I have a rule I try to follow with the similes - they have to work on at least two levels. So it can't just be loopier than a slinky - it has to be loopier than a slinky on a rollercoaster, etc. Sometimes they just won't come out, so when I'm in the right frame of mind, I try to make the most of it!
Mike
