Whispers of Dawn
Spanish Quintilla poetic form45 total reviews
Comment from estory
Nice job within this classic pastoral romantic convention and classic rhymed stanza format. I think you did a great job orchestrating the meter and rhyme scheme, and you had some wonderful colorful images of sunrises and sunsets and flora and fauna that captured this idyllic scene. It really reminds me of classic romantic poets like Landor and Bryant, maybe even Shelley, and how they created these classic scenes of the paradise they called Arcadie. That classic Greek philosophical vision of paradise. estory
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Nice job within this classic pastoral romantic convention and classic rhymed stanza format. I think you did a great job orchestrating the meter and rhyme scheme, and you had some wonderful colorful images of sunrises and sunsets and flora and fauna that captured this idyllic scene. It really reminds me of classic romantic poets like Landor and Bryant, maybe even Shelley, and how they created these classic scenes of the paradise they called Arcadie. That classic Greek philosophical vision of paradise. estory
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your lovely and insightful comments! So appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
How do you do it?? This is so beautiful. Your word choices are always so exceptional. I love your thumbnail shaped moon and your pale wisps of fog flung to the breeze. And those are just my two favorites.
I checked your meter. It is perfect. Your rhymes are smooth and creative. You took me through a day and made me feel each lovely part.
This is movingly beautiful and a winner for sure.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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How do you do it?? This is so beautiful. Your word choices are always so exceptional. I love your thumbnail shaped moon and your pale wisps of fog flung to the breeze. And those are just my two favorites.
I checked your meter. It is perfect. Your rhymes are smooth and creative. You took me through a day and made me feel each lovely part.
This is movingly beautiful and a winner for sure.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Hi Debbie. I had fun with the challenges of writing a Quintilla. These poetry classes always stir me up. LOL. I am really happy that you liked it... I always value your opinion so much. Hugs, dear friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sugar Ray,
a truly delightful lyrical and visual romp within nature's song.
A beautiful flowing poem that can only allow the reader to feel and be with one in nature.
There is some truly wonderful imagery at play throughout this poem.
Very well presented and composed... all the very best in this contest... beautiful.
With our thoughts we create...
a perfect picture.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Hi Sugar Ray,
a truly delightful lyrical and visual romp within nature's song.
A beautiful flowing poem that can only allow the reader to feel and be with one in nature.
There is some truly wonderful imagery at play throughout this poem.
Very well presented and composed... all the very best in this contest... beautiful.
With our thoughts we create...
a perfect picture.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your lovely and insightful comments, James! So appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from l.raven
HI Melissa, I have never heard of this form...but it seems
my sweet friend...you followed the counts perfectly...
it reminds when we were kids...my parents took us to a
camp ground...it was right next to the water...when we would wake up in the morning...it looked much like your poem sounded...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and loveeee this picture...so beautifully written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
hope are you doing Melissa...I hope you are doing well...
and staying safe...God Bless...love xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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HI Melissa, I have never heard of this form...but it seems
my sweet friend...you followed the counts perfectly...
it reminds when we were kids...my parents took us to a
camp ground...it was right next to the water...when we would wake up in the morning...it looked much like your poem sounded...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and loveeee this picture...so beautifully written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
hope are you doing Melissa...I hope you are doing well...
and staying safe...God Bless...love xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your lovely and insightful comments, Linda! I am delighted you liked it and it brought back memories of your childhood. So appreciated.
Melissa
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always welcome my sweet friend...love xxoo
Comment from amahra
First, let me say, I loved the colorful nature artwork. And though I like every line of your poem, a few caught my eye for their metaphoric tone.
Whispers of mist upon the lake
And as deep twilight sings the blues
with dusky, fading lullabies. [I particularly loved these lines.]
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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First, let me say, I loved the colorful nature artwork. And though I like every line of your poem, a few caught my eye for their metaphoric tone.
Whispers of mist upon the lake
And as deep twilight sings the blues
with dusky, fading lullabies. [I particularly loved these lines.]
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review. So appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
I truly do enjoy this form, and you have done a terrific job of it. Each sequence in the passage of a day painted with brilliant imagery brings us to a fulfilling conclusion, as all things return to "fading lullabies."
Superb metre and rhymes and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I truly do enjoy this form, and you have done a terrific job of it. Each sequence in the passage of a day painted with brilliant imagery brings us to a fulfilling conclusion, as all things return to "fading lullabies."
Superb metre and rhymes and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hi Gloria. Thank you!!!! You have made my day with your encouragement and your take on this Spanish Quintilla. I am glad to have been made aware of it... now, we are studying Medieval Alliteration. The task is one of the hardest I have tackled... right up there with the Terza Rima and Pushkin sonnet... perhaps harder. I will post it soon. Thanks again.
Comment from dmt1967
This paints a very nice picture in my minds eye of a tranquil place where the birds are chirping and the bees are buzzing. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This paints a very nice picture in my minds eye of a tranquil place where the birds are chirping and the bees are buzzing. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hey there. Thank you for your lovely comments.
melissa
Comment from LisaMay
This is gorgeous! The flow and rhyming seem natural and effortless. I loved reading it, feeling the tranquility through the sensory images and observations of colour and creatures.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This is gorgeous! The flow and rhyming seem natural and effortless. I loved reading it, feeling the tranquility through the sensory images and observations of colour and creatures.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hello there Lisa. I am so delighted you liked this Spanish Quintilla. It was a fun form to learn in class. Who knew it existed???? :0)
Melissa
Comment from Heather Burroughs
Beautiful poem and the artwork goes perfectly with it. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck with your entry. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Beautiful poem and the artwork goes perfectly with it. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck with your entry. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much Heather.
Melissa
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully descriptive poem. I like that the text is centered on the visual. I like that the font is large and may be easily read. I like that your rhyme scheme is consistently done throughout the piece. if I have one suggestion, I would make the font a color other than black. Perhaps one of the colors from the visual. The visual fits well with the poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This is a beautifully descriptive poem. I like that the text is centered on the visual. I like that the font is large and may be easily read. I like that your rhyme scheme is consistently done throughout the piece. if I have one suggestion, I would make the font a color other than black. Perhaps one of the colors from the visual. The visual fits well with the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hello Sandra. Thank you for your lovely review and comment. So happy you enjoyed reading it. :)
Melissa
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You are welcome.
