Whispers of Dawn
Spanish Quintilla poetic form45 total reviews
Comment from karenina
What a melodic read! I went back and read it aloud, just to savor the rhyme and meter...
You've word painted images soft as a Monet!
Love your "dusky, fading lullabies."
The perfect culmination of a day awakened in ebullient dawn!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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What a melodic read! I went back and read it aloud, just to savor the rhyme and meter...
You've word painted images soft as a Monet!
Love your "dusky, fading lullabies."
The perfect culmination of a day awakened in ebullient dawn!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you Karenina. So delighted that you enjoyed this Spanish Quintilla. It has been fun to learn about this form in our class. Who knew??? :).
Melissa
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I hear all the classes are great! Just not in my budget, right now...
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this is lovely. Your word pictures and varied rhyme patterns are awesome. I like that the twilight sings and paints lilac skies -- beautiful imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Wow, this is lovely. Your word pictures and varied rhyme patterns are awesome. I like that the twilight sings and paints lilac skies -- beautiful imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hi Carol... You have made my day with your wonderful comments and review. Thank you!!
Melissa
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Were the differing rhyme patterns delineated in the instructions? That's a logic puzzle, trying to get 5 different patterns. Loved it!
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Carol... yes he presented us the five (only 5) pattern choices that we could use. You cannot end the stanza in a rhyming couplet nor use three rhymes in a row. Thanks so much!
M
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That's a lot to keep straight while writing. Well done!
Comment from Elviss
I loved how this poem embodies all the aspects of a great writing and those of an even greater poem. As I started reading, I was impressed by how the whispers mentioned in the title are later followed by words such as hush, echo and muted. The rhyming does a good job of showcasing the writer's penmanship.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I loved how this poem embodies all the aspects of a great writing and those of an even greater poem. As I started reading, I was impressed by how the whispers mentioned in the title are later followed by words such as hush, echo and muted. The rhyming does a good job of showcasing the writer's penmanship.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, Elviss... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
That's a lovely picture. Your rhyme works out great. I like your use of the Spanish Quintilla form. Your poem moves from morning to twilight, and you do a fine job of showing what can be seen as the day progresses. The use of color with pinkish white and lilac skies adds to the visual effect. Great word choices--crowns the canopies, for one. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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That's a lovely picture. Your rhyme works out great. I like your use of the Spanish Quintilla form. Your poem moves from morning to twilight, and you do a fine job of showing what can be seen as the day progresses. The use of color with pinkish white and lilac skies adds to the visual effect. Great word choices--crowns the canopies, for one. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, sweet Judi... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
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You're very welcome. Beautiful work. judi
Comment from nomi338
You paint an awesome picture of nature personified in all its splendor. Life does not occur in a vacuum, so much goes on in a forest, and other places where man's presence is not always evident. Just because we do not see, does not mean that beauty does not exist and take place. I love the scene your words portray so well.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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You paint an awesome picture of nature personified in all its splendor. Life does not occur in a vacuum, so much goes on in a forest, and other places where man's presence is not always evident. Just because we do not see, does not mean that beauty does not exist and take place. I love the scene your words portray so well.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, Nomi... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from LateBloomer
Suggarray77, beautiful descriptive writing. I can see it all. Your poem reads and flows well and has silky rhyming within. I especially liked:
Bright sunshine paints the tops of trees
and fills the air with rosy light.
(Good imagery)
Well-chosen photo. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Suggarray77, beautiful descriptive writing. I can see it all. Your poem reads and flows well and has silky rhyming within. I especially liked:
Bright sunshine paints the tops of trees
and fills the air with rosy light.
(Good imagery)
Well-chosen photo. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is a beautiful poem with many fine word images. A few of my favorites are: 'A silken hush precedes the dawn" and "A halo crowns the canopies" and "in softness painting lilac skies," . . . Beautiful!!! The illustration is lovely too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is a beautiful poem with many fine word images. A few of my favorites are: 'A silken hush precedes the dawn" and "A halo crowns the canopies" and "in softness painting lilac skies," . . . Beautiful!!! The illustration is lovely too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from Terry Broxson
I know nothing about a Spanish Quintilla, other than the fact, this is first one I have read. What a great poem it is. Good luck in the contest. I abosulty love the way the describe the changes in the day of this beautiful place. Outstanding imagery with sounds, color, visuals galor. Great job. Terry.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I know nothing about a Spanish Quintilla, other than the fact, this is first one I have read. What a great poem it is. Good luck in the contest. I abosulty love the way the describe the changes in the day of this beautiful place. Outstanding imagery with sounds, color, visuals galor. Great job. Terry.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, Terry... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This poem flows well among the sifts and sounds of the world from morning til evening. I like the different rhyme scheme.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Melissa,
This poem flows well among the sifts and sounds of the world from morning til evening. I like the different rhyme scheme.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, Joan... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome on all accounts, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Lobber
Hello again my friend,
As a musician, I can't help but being impressed how gracefully you weave the )sound and music( motif for the first, second and spectacular fifth stanza.
I would love to have your melodic tweak on the third and fourth stanzas, as well.
But perhaps, like Beethoven's Fifth, it's best to leave the best til last - where ) deep twilight sings the blues( along with )fading lullabies(. I really love your whispering poem.
Jerry
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hello again my friend,
As a musician, I can't help but being impressed how gracefully you weave the )sound and music( motif for the first, second and spectacular fifth stanza.
I would love to have your melodic tweak on the third and fourth stanzas, as well.
But perhaps, like Beethoven's Fifth, it's best to leave the best til last - where ) deep twilight sings the blues( along with )fading lullabies(. I really love your whispering poem.
Jerry
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, dear Jerry... I really appreciate your wonderful comments and encouragement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
