Love's Touch
Tyburn Entry6 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem has a romantic illustration over a description of what first love feels like. It uses music as a metaphor.
Good luck in the prompt contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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This poem has a romantic illustration over a description of what first love feels like. It uses music as a metaphor.
Good luck in the prompt contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, I can imagine the tingle feeling and then the squeal as love's touch embraces the body, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Excellent, I can imagine the tingle feeling and then the squeal as love's touch embraces the body, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your two syllable words are excellent choices for your tyburn poem, but I feel the connectivity between the two 9 syllable lines is rather tenuous. Kate xx
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Your two syllable words are excellent choices for your tyburn poem, but I feel the connectivity between the two 9 syllable lines is rather tenuous. Kate xx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
Comment from Fleedleflump
I'm sure, when I was in my twenties, and still single, I'd go out late at night in search of the tingle that made my dingle jingle, or is that the jingle than made my dingle tingle? Of course, if you mingle without care, your dingle gets the wrong tingle!
Mike
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I'm sure, when I was in my twenties, and still single, I'd go out late at night in search of the tingle that made my dingle jingle, or is that the jingle than made my dingle tingle? Of course, if you mingle without care, your dingle gets the wrong tingle!
Mike
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
Comment from Jack Trevino
I like this a lot - it makes me want to read it again and again! The word "dingle" does make me laugh, but to me, this poem was designed to be read aloud over and over. Great job with this style!
I think the only thing that stopped me from loving it is that it does read as a little silly to me, but because of the style/format of the prompt, it's hard for me to see how much of that is intentional or just as a result of the style, which makes it hard to know if I find it effective -- even as I know I really enjoy it. Thanks for sharing!
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I like this a lot - it makes me want to read it again and again! The word "dingle" does make me laugh, but to me, this poem was designed to be read aloud over and over. Great job with this style!
I think the only thing that stopped me from loving it is that it does read as a little silly to me, but because of the style/format of the prompt, it's hard for me to see how much of that is intentional or just as a result of the style, which makes it hard to know if I find it effective -- even as I know I really enjoy it. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
Comment from royowen
I was privileged to have had that very touch of God that started my journey into faith, I'll carry that memory into Heaven with me, and know the reality of the joy, a beautifully written tyburn my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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I was privileged to have had that very touch of God that started my journey into faith, I'll carry that memory into Heaven with me, and know the reality of the joy, a beautifully written tyburn my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
