What Really Matters
Your Health Is...6 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Your Body writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your ill and aging body poem, we can all relate. It's written in your own unique style. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Good luck in the contest.
Well done
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Excellent entry for the Your Body writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your ill and aging body poem, we can all relate. It's written in your own unique style. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand. Good luck in the contest.
Well done
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for this great review. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
Your poem and well written and full of truth and emotion. Well, done. I'm sorry that you live with such pain and mobility issues. Good luck in the contest. I suspect you'll do well.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Your poem and well written and full of truth and emotion. Well, done. I'm sorry that you live with such pain and mobility issues. Good luck in the contest. I suspect you'll do well.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you, it's very nice of you to say. :)
Comment from country ranch writer
6n30/2922----8:550 pm
We all can relate to your mom plight. The ole body keeps working against as the older we get.Bones creek and groan as we try not to fall down best wish for stating fit don't let anyone give you s***.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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6n30/2922----8:550 pm
We all can relate to your mom plight. The ole body keeps working against as the older we get.Bones creek and groan as we try not to fall down best wish for stating fit don't let anyone give you s***.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. :)
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Comment from Bridge
A very well written poem. I could empathise with the thoughts expressed. Very well described. I've come to realise health is wealth. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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A very well written poem. I could empathise with the thoughts expressed. Very well described. I've come to realise health is wealth. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you, we certainly agree on that. I'm glad you took the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Jack Trevino
This is something that has challenged me throughout my life as well, and I've found some measure of peace by trying to change what I value in a similar way as you did - health, and strength, and how it feels to live my life are the things I try to put more consideration to, rather than how my body looks and if I fit into conventional beauty standards. I don't want to be so damn uncomfortable just existing anymore! I'm so sorry about your challenges with arthritis, as well - that must be so hard. You seem like a wonderful person who has really reflected a lot on what matters to you now.
The line "Arthritic now, my body has betrayed me" was really powerful to me - the shift from the desire for the perfect body to self image struggles to knee problems to your body betraying you is really interesting to me, as well, because what I take from that is that while you've had these self-images challenges and you've fought with weight issues your whole life, the biggest betrayal from your body was not that you didn't live up to the (impossible) beauty standards set by models and fashion etc, but that you have more difficulty in using your body because of the arthritis. To me, this difference between the first stanza of unfulfilled wishes and the last stanza of just wanting to heal really speaks to your perspective shift over time.
Thank you for sharing this poem!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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This is something that has challenged me throughout my life as well, and I've found some measure of peace by trying to change what I value in a similar way as you did - health, and strength, and how it feels to live my life are the things I try to put more consideration to, rather than how my body looks and if I fit into conventional beauty standards. I don't want to be so damn uncomfortable just existing anymore! I'm so sorry about your challenges with arthritis, as well - that must be so hard. You seem like a wonderful person who has really reflected a lot on what matters to you now.
The line "Arthritic now, my body has betrayed me" was really powerful to me - the shift from the desire for the perfect body to self image struggles to knee problems to your body betraying you is really interesting to me, as well, because what I take from that is that while you've had these self-images challenges and you've fought with weight issues your whole life, the biggest betrayal from your body was not that you didn't live up to the (impossible) beauty standards set by models and fashion etc, but that you have more difficulty in using your body because of the arthritis. To me, this difference between the first stanza of unfulfilled wishes and the last stanza of just wanting to heal really speaks to your perspective shift over time.
Thank you for sharing this poem!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this insightful review. I'm so glad we are like minded about this...I hope you have a wonderful evening. :)
Comment from LisaMay
You have portrayed very personally and realistically how some people are trapped by the bodies not being how they'd like, either through appearance or health. When younger, we are conditioned into trying to measure up to others' opinions of how we should look. When older, we just want to feel okay and keep our mobility.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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You have portrayed very personally and realistically how some people are trapped by the bodies not being how they'd like, either through appearance or health. When younger, we are conditioned into trying to measure up to others' opinions of how we should look. When older, we just want to feel okay and keep our mobility.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem. I believe you have summed up everything I was trying to get across....I do appreciate it. :)
