Creation
It's a science...15 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Creation, gives the readers another slant on God's processes of peopling a "globe" with our slithering ancestors.
"...grinning from his lower mandible." There's a picture.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This story, Creation, gives the readers another slant on God's processes of peopling a "globe" with our slithering ancestors.
"...grinning from his lower mandible." There's a picture.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Many thanks for checking this one out, Bill. G
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your creativity here. My favorite part is your description of the creatures' features such as " long twig-like appendages" and the second head to grow in another two years - however long that might be in their world. And how can we ignore the 42 from Hitchhiker's Guide?
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Enjoyed your creativity here. My favorite part is your description of the creatures' features such as " long twig-like appendages" and the second head to grow in another two years - however long that might be in their world. And how can we ignore the 42 from Hitchhiker's Guide?
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I love Hitchhiker's Guide. lol Many thanks. G
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest, G. I loved the picture because it reminded me of the big bang theory, such an explosive creation. I have to admit that this short story was creative but very in depth in its meaning. Very well done and very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest, G. I loved the picture because it reminded me of the big bang theory, such an explosive creation. I have to admit that this short story was creative but very in depth in its meaning. Very well done and very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Much appreciated, my friend. G
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Most welcome, G.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Gareth, you've done it again. You've told the creation of the universe in merely 250 words. But you still leave us with a little twist, that makes us wonder what we really read. Good luck in the contest. Ulla,:)))
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Hi Gareth, you've done it again. You've told the creation of the universe in merely 250 words. But you still leave us with a little twist, that makes us wonder what we really read. Good luck in the contest. Ulla,:)))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Much appreciated, Ulla. G
Comment from Ric Myworld
We never know what's going on right before our very eyes. And it isn't even magic . . . well, maybe it is, sort of. Thanks for sharing, it's always a pleasure.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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We never know what's going on right before our very eyes. And it isn't even magic . . . well, maybe it is, sort of. Thanks for sharing, it's always a pleasure.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Many thanks, Ric. G
Comment from royowen
I always love creation reinvented. And you've done a superb job of this one G, these beings sound ant like, so, the next question is, why didn't they create Adum and Evf in their image? Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I always love creation reinvented. And you've done a superb job of this one G, these beings sound ant like, so, the next question is, why didn't they create Adum and Evf in their image? Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Probably because it didn't work so well in the past. lol
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Well done
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
I enjoyed this wonderful Sci-Fi short form fiction. The characters are perfect and the ending is superb. I found a couple of minor edit suggestions.
. "shook his larger head." I first thought that this simply meant that the father's head was larger than the son's. Then later, with new information, I thought it might mean that the "larger head" was the larger of his two heads. Which is it in your mind? Should it be clarified?
. "As he began to crew (screw) the panel back into place,"
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed this wonderful Sci-Fi short form fiction. The characters are perfect and the ending is superb. I found a couple of minor edit suggestions.
. "shook his larger head." I first thought that this simply meant that the father's head was larger than the son's. Then later, with new information, I thought it might mean that the "larger head" was the larger of his two heads. Which is it in your mind? Should it be clarified?
. "As he began to crew (screw) the panel back into place,"
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Many thanks as always. G
Comment from karenina
Very clever and interesting flash, here. An entire story neatly tucked into 250 words. Sci-fi is often over my head, but there is such a thread of humanity here, and the biblical nod, that I really immersed myself between your lines! "Adum and Evf." You got me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Very clever and interesting flash, here. An entire story neatly tucked into 250 words. Sci-fi is often over my head, but there is such a thread of humanity here, and the biblical nod, that I really immersed myself between your lines! "Adum and Evf." You got me!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I love sci-fi. Hard sci-fi which relies on a lot of technical stuff can be very demanding. I prefer the ideas approach. lol G
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Agreed!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, that is just what I'd expect from you! This is brilliant. And love the 42 from the 'galaxy' to the meaning of life, and everything else, but you've a slight twist in yours. So, we were made from 2 headed master beings still trying to get it right! The parting shot, 'be good' Lol, as if!! Well done, this is a great story about how our unique beginnings began with just the 250 words. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Lol, that is just what I'd expect from you! This is brilliant. And love the 42 from the 'galaxy' to the meaning of life, and everything else, but you've a slight twist in yours. So, we were made from 2 headed master beings still trying to get it right! The parting shot, 'be good' Lol, as if!! Well done, this is a great story about how our unique beginnings began with just the 250 words. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Many thanks Sandra. i just wrote it, not for the competition, and it came in at 247 so I squeezed in a few! lol
Comment from Jay Squires
Okay, now this could be the prototype for writing flash fiction, with the plot beginning very near the climax, and the bare nudge of a twist at the end, that, rather than dish out the meaning to the reader, points the direction for his finding it. Well done, my friend!
By the way ... I meant to ask before I closed this out, whether "crew" is a Welsh invention or did you mean "screw"?
Jay
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Okay, now this could be the prototype for writing flash fiction, with the plot beginning very near the climax, and the bare nudge of a twist at the end, that, rather than dish out the meaning to the reader, points the direction for his finding it. Well done, my friend!
By the way ... I meant to ask before I closed this out, whether "crew" is a Welsh invention or did you mean "screw"?
Jay
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Yeah, it was a typo! lol Many thanks as always, Jay. G
