Creation
It's a science...15 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an entire entertaining story and only used 250 words. Great job. It takes me about 80,000 to get a story out. LOL I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an entire entertaining story and only used 250 words. Great job. It takes me about 80,000 to get a story out. LOL I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Yep, for years I've been writing longer but it just doesn't really fly on the site anymore so I save that for elsewhere where I usualy actually earn money. lol
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May I ask where???
Comment from Fleedleflump
Perhaps I have a warped mind (and perhaps I had in mind the contest you just sponsored) but from the first sentence, I had an inkling what was going on, although not the omnipotent slant it then took. Love the 42 reference to a certain 'Guide' and the generally playful tone throughout.
It's great to read one of these that's actually coherent and not half a scene that someone can't be bothered to adapt to the tight format.
Only one question:
'There you go, Adum, meet is Evf.' - is the 'is' intentional?
Loved it!
Mike
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Perhaps I have a warped mind (and perhaps I had in mind the contest you just sponsored) but from the first sentence, I had an inkling what was going on, although not the omnipotent slant it then took. Love the 42 reference to a certain 'Guide' and the generally playful tone throughout.
It's great to read one of these that's actually coherent and not half a scene that someone can't be bothered to adapt to the tight format.
Only one question:
'There you go, Adum, meet is Evf.' - is the 'is' intentional?
Loved it!
Mike
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Nope, that 'is' is a complete mistake. Cheers mate! lol
Comment from Shirley McLain
So this is man being created in a Petri dish. I liked the story and it read well. I didn't see any mistakes to tell you about. You did a great job. Enjoy your day. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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So this is man being created in a Petri dish. I liked the story and it read well. I didn't see any mistakes to tell you about. You did a great job. Enjoy your day. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Many thanks. G
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Well, that was an interesting Sci-Fi read. Thank goodness, you had the title Creation. I realize you are working within a 250-word restriction, but the tale reads as if one is dropped down in the middle of a story that has already begun before the reader arrived. It's a bit difficult to discern what is being created-another alien, another Adam and Eve equivalent to what? It would help if something was explained (backstory) in the author's notes.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Well, that was an interesting Sci-Fi read. Thank goodness, you had the title Creation. I realize you are working within a 250-word restriction, but the tale reads as if one is dropped down in the middle of a story that has already begun before the reader arrived. It's a bit difficult to discern what is being created-another alien, another Adam and Eve equivalent to what? It would help if something was explained (backstory) in the author's notes.
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Nope, the whole story is there. I believe there is definitely enough information in the story to ascertain what is going on and a little reading between the lines is the point. Many thanks for reading and reviewing. GMG
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I agree critical thinking/inference is needed. I am all for that. However, a bit of info in the author's notes section would help too. You are welcome.
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No worries. :)
Comment from dmt1967
I liked the end of this story. I liked the play on words and the picture and I thought it was very well written and a new idea on an old story. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I liked the end of this story. I liked the play on words and the picture and I thought it was very well written and a new idea on an old story. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
