I Do Accept
MY shorter sonnet version52 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Another fine poem on a favourite theme. There is tenderness and regret, and yet hope is expressed for the future when you are both reunited in the next life.
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Another fine poem on a favourite theme. There is tenderness and regret, and yet hope is expressed for the future when you are both reunited in the next life.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"You were the sugar in my tea," is such a lovely sentiment and says so much about the relationship you had with your beloved wife.
As always, beautifully written and genuinely expressed. Your poetry sounds like a song when it rolls off the lips.
Take care and be well and happy.
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"You were the sugar in my tea," is such a lovely sentiment and says so much about the relationship you had with your beloved wife.
As always, beautifully written and genuinely expressed. Your poetry sounds like a song when it rolls off the lips.
Take care and be well and happy.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
Comment from kiwisteveh
Sweet love poem and tribute, seemingly based around the cherished words 'I do...'
Great rhyme and meter as you uncover tender memories of your wife, leading to thoughts of being reunited in Heaven.
Nice.
Steve
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Sweet love poem and tribute, seemingly based around the cherished words 'I do...'
Great rhyme and meter as you uncover tender memories of your wife, leading to thoughts of being reunited in Heaven.
Nice.
Steve
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This poem is so sad, are you okay? I am worried by the tone of your poem, especially your last lines: "You still remain within my heart-
Keep me in yours, till I depart.
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This poem is so sad, are you okay? I am worried by the tone of your poem, especially your last lines: "You still remain within my heart-
Keep me in yours, till I depart.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
Comment from Gloria ....
Forever and for always you will pay tribute and love your long-departed bride. What a fine sonnet in dedication to her, friend Jay.
Always a pleasure to read your fine poetry.
Gloria
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Forever and for always you will pay tribute and love your long-departed bride. What a fine sonnet in dedication to her, friend Jay.
Always a pleasure to read your fine poetry.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
Comment from Teri7
Jaybird, This is a very lovely and very sweet, heartfelt poem you have penned about your departed bride. You used very good descriptive words also. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
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Jaybird, This is a very lovely and very sweet, heartfelt poem you have penned about your departed bride. You used very good descriptive words also. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I believe everyone loves somebody, that somebody will always remain in one's heart. All the happy moments together will never be forgotten as you said in your poem " Fond memories I'll always keep, until I take my final sleep;.."
Thanks for sharing.
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I believe everyone loves somebody, that somebody will always remain in one's heart. All the happy moments together will never be forgotten as you said in your poem " Fond memories I'll always keep, until I take my final sleep;.."
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hi Jay bird!
Great job with this rhymed and metered poem
Sonnets are usually in iambic pentameter (10 syllables per line) but.8 is fine.
Everything is correct in both rhyme and meter except you have 7 syllables in your 1st line
That should be easily corrected by adding the word "and" between the words "long" and "time" so you get this...
long and time worn night.
Very lovely and heartfelt
Katiemae Dead
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Hi Jay bird!
Great job with this rhymed and metered poem
Sonnets are usually in iambic pentameter (10 syllables per line) but.8 is fine.
Everything is correct in both rhyme and meter except you have 7 syllables in your 1st line
That should be easily corrected by adding the word "and" between the words "long" and "time" so you get this...
long and time worn night.
Very lovely and heartfelt
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is delightful. You've created another beautiful tribute to the love of your life. "She was the sugar in your tea. It was true then, will always be." This line is so heartfelt I'm almost sure she could hear it. It's inspirational to know there is such a thing a undying love.
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This is delightful. You've created another beautiful tribute to the love of your life. "She was the sugar in your tea. It was true then, will always be." This line is so heartfelt I'm almost sure she could hear it. It's inspirational to know there is such a thing a undying love.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the line: "you were the sugar in my tea" and I know you mean every word here, your heart is revealed in this write and I loved every word, love Dolly x
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I love the line: "you were the sugar in my tea" and I know you mean every word here, your heart is revealed in this write and I loved every word, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
