Sharing A Moment
We should help when we can. (Freestyle, with rhyming)16 total reviews
Comment from Mama Baer
Bravo!! This is an adorable piece! I absolutely love your rhyme scheme, idea, photo, and entire presentation, LisaMay! I love the life lessons you share so honestly and fun.
-Shaunna
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Bravo!! This is an adorable piece! I absolutely love your rhyme scheme, idea, photo, and entire presentation, LisaMay! I love the life lessons you share so honestly and fun.
-Shaunna
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your lovely comments!
Comment from lyenochka
I found this moving and sweet. It reminded me of Robert the Bruce, the Scottish king and the spider. But he learned perseverance from his observation of the spider. Your narrator learned compassion and how by giving help to even the tiniest life, elevates one's own life!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I found this moving and sweet. It reminded me of Robert the Bruce, the Scottish king and the spider. But he learned perseverance from his observation of the spider. Your narrator learned compassion and how by giving help to even the tiniest life, elevates one's own life!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your super lovely review!
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very heartwarming poem, Lisa. Your writing is very good and even though you say it is FV, I can hear the rhyming cadences throughout. Well done on this meaningful verse.
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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This is a very heartwarming poem, Lisa. Your writing is very good and even though you say it is FV, I can hear the rhyming cadences throughout. Well done on this meaningful verse.
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your lovely review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiment here Lisa and I helped a spider gain his freedom today by encouraging it out of my house and into the open air. I avoided stepping on a bee in the clover too! I think we learn the lessons that all creatures deserve to live and they battle far harder than we do to survive, I loved your kind and humane words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I adore the sentiment here Lisa and I helped a spider gain his freedom today by encouraging it out of my house and into the open air. I avoided stepping on a bee in the clover too! I think we learn the lessons that all creatures deserve to live and they battle far harder than we do to survive, I loved your kind and humane words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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We've both done our good deeds for the day by helping the strugglers. I'm pleased you didn't stomp on the spider like most people would.
Comment from Pantygynt
I loved the way this found itself back at the beginning with a different conclusion as far as feelings were concerned. A clever little piece I thought.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I loved the way this found itself back at the beginning with a different conclusion as far as feelings were concerned. A clever little piece I thought.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your kind review, Jim.
Comment from Michael Cassar
Quiet moments akin to the beetle and you are invigorating in our old age, when our lives are dispensed of their hectic pace. We look at an action, otherwise insignificant, but suddenly it generates fascinating thoughts. I wonder, sometimes, why orchids come in so many shapes, forms, and colors. Why do spiders love to weave their threads around my plants? So enjoy the pleasures we are granted in our old age and continue announcing their beauties.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Quiet moments akin to the beetle and you are invigorating in our old age, when our lives are dispensed of their hectic pace. We look at an action, otherwise insignificant, but suddenly it generates fascinating thoughts. I wonder, sometimes, why orchids come in so many shapes, forms, and colors. Why do spiders love to weave their threads around my plants? So enjoy the pleasures we are granted in our old age and continue announcing their beauties.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I enjoy taking time to enjoy nature, and watch the small lives going about their business. It sounds like you are an observer and appreciator as well.
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Every day I spend hours nurturing nature's beauty. It serves a a spiritual connection.
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I agree. Me too.
Comment from royowen
I think obstacles are a normal part of life, if that were not the case, St. Paul would never have said, in all things I've learnt to be content, " whether in hunger or well fed, I've been in want and I've seen lack" Philippians 4:11-13, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I think obstacles are a normal part of life, if that were not the case, St. Paul would never have said, in all things I've learnt to be content, " whether in hunger or well fed, I've been in want and I've seen lack" Philippians 4:11-13, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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As we can expect obstacles it would be nice to think we could expect help as well from our fellow man.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very charming and sweet poem teaching that when helping others we also help ourselves. Even the small gesture of setting a bug in the right direction gives one a sense of accomplishment in giving a helping hand to nature. I think your last stanza sums it up perfectly.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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A very charming and sweet poem teaching that when helping others we also help ourselves. Even the small gesture of setting a bug in the right direction gives one a sense of accomplishment in giving a helping hand to nature. I think your last stanza sums it up perfectly.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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You've summed up my poem very well Mary.
Comment from Michele Harber
It says a lot about you that something as simple as helping a beetle make its way turned you from sad to glad. Your poem teaches an important lesson about the benefit of giving to both the giver and the recipient - and you did it in enjoyable rhyme. This is a refreshing and encouraging poem to read.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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It says a lot about you that something as simple as helping a beetle make its way turned you from sad to glad. Your poem teaches an important lesson about the benefit of giving to both the giver and the recipient - and you did it in enjoyable rhyme. This is a refreshing and encouraging poem to read.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks Michele. I notice all sorts of things when I'm sitting outside in my yard. Nature provides lessons everywhere.
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I wish I had a backyard. Of course, when you live in an apartment, and not a house, that's a little more difficult. At least my apartment complex has beautiful gardens, even if they're not private just to my family and me.
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You are therefore spared the hard work of looking after the garden. I became ashamed of my weeds yesterday and spent ages pulling some out. Plenty still left.
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Why were you ashamed of your weeds? We?re they not growing tall and proud, and encroaching on your garden, as any self-respecting weed should?
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Yes... it does seem wrong to rip out very healthy weeds.
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After all, they are doing as they?re supposed to. You can?t fault them for that. 😀
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a sweet one, LisaMay. It's almost like a fable in it's lesson. We can get so much encouragement watching animal behavior. The beetle is like the itsy bitsy spider who just kept climbing the water spout. No resentment. Just climb.
Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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What a sweet one, LisaMay. It's almost like a fable in it's lesson. We can get so much encouragement watching animal behavior. The beetle is like the itsy bitsy spider who just kept climbing the water spout. No resentment. Just climb.
Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Debbie. I often sit outside in my yard and notice nature's small goings-on around me.
