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An Encanto fan fic, cause why not.

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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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The fantasy world you have created here seems complex and full of possibilities. Your younger people are worried and uncertain, which is probably as it should be as they become used to living in this quicksand of an environment. Look forward to learning more. Kate xx

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
    Thanks for taking the time to read it - I appreciate that :)
Comment from prettybluebirds
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This is an interesting story if it is a bit long. The paragraphs flow in a nice manner and the story is easy to read and follow. You will get more reviews if you keep the chapters a little shorter. Just a suggestion. It is a nice story.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
    I would make them shorter, but that tends make some things make way less sense? Or something like that. Thanks for the kind review I appreciate you taking the time to do so.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Here are a couple of errors that you might want to correct:"Just in time, F�©lix. Camilo was asleep on the sofa so can you take Antonio to our room; we can sort out their rooms tomorrow?"

F�©lix glanced at Dolores and then back to his wife, nodded and gently took his son.
"Good night, Dolores," he said.

"Good night, Pap�¡."
thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
    Yeah the sight is not a fan of accents and that is pesky - I will go look though - thanks for letting me know