Sharing the Gift of Sunshine
Overcoming gloom.13 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Waiting for the sun to shine is a long wait in England and the forecast is cloud for a whole week! I adore the sentiments here Lisa, and the 'mope', 'cope', 'hope' end rhymes. Keeping a positive outlook is paramount for living well, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
Waiting for the sun to shine is a long wait in England and the forecast is cloud for a whole week! I adore the sentiments here Lisa, and the 'mope', 'cope', 'hope' end rhymes. Keeping a positive outlook is paramount for living well, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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We are in winter here, but we are actually having lovely sunny days! very confusing - at this rate the blossoms will be coming out early.... and then it will snow!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Lisa,
Your poem gives hope to those who despair. I think the sunshine in another's eyes you speak of tells people to keep searching for happiness and loyalty through friends.
Friends are so important. I remember my college buddies and how kind and funny they were. I have found nice friends on fanstory too.
Good luck with this one, Lisa.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
Lisa,
Your poem gives hope to those who despair. I think the sunshine in another's eyes you speak of tells people to keep searching for happiness and loyalty through friends.
Friends are so important. I remember my college buddies and how kind and funny they were. I have found nice friends on fanstory too.
Good luck with this one, Lisa.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Friendships are gold. I don't have many close friends, but I sure value those I do have.
Comment from lyenochka
I like your poetic form. Do you have a name for it? It requires words with lots of rhymes! The first stanza describes a problem (gloom). The second one the solution (love). And the final couplet summarizes the solution!
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
I like your poetic form. Do you have a name for it? It requires words with lots of rhymes! The first stanza describes a problem (gloom). The second one the solution (love). And the final couplet summarizes the solution!
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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No, it doesn't have a name. The first stanza just came out like that so I thought it would be a good idea to make the 2nd stanza have a similar approach.
(I seem to be engaged with patterns at the moment and it is to the forefront of my mind - I've been running art workshops for kids about 'Patterns and Puzzles'.)
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Cool! Name it! Two Septets and a couplet. Your the Name-meister so I think you should give it a name and we can all try it. 💖
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I tried just now, but it made my brain hurt!
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Okay, I tried and it made my brain hurt, too. I was thinking of the sevens and the couplet ending like a sonnet. How about Heptonnet ?
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That sounds ok - how would the rhyme scheme be described? The line syllable count is flexible.
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I would call the septet rhyming as:
aaabbba
cccdddc
and the couplet as:
ee
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Isn't that too many letters for a septet?
Would it be abaccca and dd?
Then there's the complication that the 2nd line in the first stanza rhymes with the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza.
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Oh! I missed that second line completely!
Yes! But your second stanza doesn't repeat the first stanza rhymes except one so: abaccca dbdeeed ff
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Got it. I wonder if anyone else would be bothered to try it. It always looks daunting to me when the 'recipe' is laid out like that. My poems evolve organically, then i see if there is a structure i can play with
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I'd give it a try. Actually, if you compare it to some of Dolly's forms, this is not that hard at all. Hers requires specific internal rhymes in very specific places. Other forms are like that.