Colors
My Bipolar Head50 total reviews
Comment from Alyssa Wilson
I think the use of colors to describe the way your disorder effects you is brilliant. Very nice job on this piece and congratulations on the success you've had with it!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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I think the use of colors to describe the way your disorder effects you is brilliant. Very nice job on this piece and congratulations on the success you've had with it!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you so very much!
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I do enjoy the musical melodies that reverberate through my from the patterned words. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I do enjoy the musical melodies that reverberate through my from the patterned words. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading and for the nice review!
Comment from John Ciarmello
I've read many on FS with the same disorder, but none have explained it in its entirety as you have in this piece. The use of color is descriptive of itself, and then adding the turmoil of your words finishes the senses. Well done. Best JohnC.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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I've read many on FS with the same disorder, but none have explained it in its entirety as you have in this piece. The use of color is descriptive of itself, and then adding the turmoil of your words finishes the senses. Well done. Best JohnC.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you John. I?m glad you enjoyed the poem and thank you for the review!
Comment from Frank Malley
"Colors" by Ramona Agin is a free verse poem in which the narrator describes her experience of consciousness in terms of colors. The colors are pretty and familiar to her until black invades the palette, and the black is a destructive force within her consciousness and she describes her struggle with blackness.
This is more a prose commentary lined like verse than a poem. It seems that people think just changing the form on the page of a written piece changes what it is; maybe that's true, but my sense of poetry, while it can include prose poems, doesn't consider lining and spacing enough of a transformation to make something a poem.
"Colors" contains some descriptions of colors that could be considered as poetry, but they far more resemble prose such as would be sent to a friend in a note.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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"Colors" by Ramona Agin is a free verse poem in which the narrator describes her experience of consciousness in terms of colors. The colors are pretty and familiar to her until black invades the palette, and the black is a destructive force within her consciousness and she describes her struggle with blackness.
This is more a prose commentary lined like verse than a poem. It seems that people think just changing the form on the page of a written piece changes what it is; maybe that's true, but my sense of poetry, while it can include prose poems, doesn't consider lining and spacing enough of a transformation to make something a poem.
"Colors" contains some descriptions of colors that could be considered as poetry, but they far more resemble prose such as would be sent to a friend in a note.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your feedback
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Ramona a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good and interesting one. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Hello Ramona a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good and interesting one. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the review and the well wishes!
Comment from Wendy G
Such a very honest, open and authentic post, very raw, and written straight from the heart. Excellent for the Free Verse contest. The tangled colours and threads are an excellent way to express the reality of your Bipolar disorder. Best wishes for the contest, and for your future writing. It may well help to just pour it all out in words, whether you post or not.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Such a very honest, open and authentic post, very raw, and written straight from the heart. Excellent for the Free Verse contest. The tangled colours and threads are an excellent way to express the reality of your Bipolar disorder. Best wishes for the contest, and for your future writing. It may well help to just pour it all out in words, whether you post or not.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Wendy, thank you. I?m glad you understand and liked it.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Ramona,
I guess most of us have had that 'black stuff' creeping in at some point or another... and there are a myriad of reasons and conditions that, if left unchecked to roam as it wants can have some horrifying effects on the human condition.
I could think of nothing better for you to do than write. Write poetry, write prose, write even when you brain feels jumbled and out of whack. For tomorrow is another day, and in my experience... every changes, and change is just another breath away.
The next day, the next week, hell, the next month, you go back see what the magic of jumbled has created... it may have unleashed a masterpiece? Who knows, it doesn't matter, it's not even the point... it just allows focus.
My point being, we all have our ups and downs, yours may be in extremes, and seem off kilter. I believe it's those adversities and the levels of which allow a much profound personal growth in the wanting to accept what life has handed out to you... the good, the bad and yes, the ugly.
That's who we are, just different degrees of. One of my little mantras is... 'resistance is futile'... more so, go with the flow. Rule one... be kind to yourself, the most important. Love yourself for being persistent in your suffering... for pain and suffering are inevitable... misery is optional.
Keep going, keep trying, keep persisting... keep on keeping on.
My heart bleeds for your pain of state, but my heart also opens up wide to the possibilities of what you can achieve under extreme adversity, and for that I send you my love and healing.
No one can compare their ailments to another, never... we can only live in the connectedness of it, the sympathy of it and the empathy wrapped up in knowing what you explained beautifully within this poem.
To be positive and to take every situation as a positive in a half-full cup attitude is the only way I go forward.
Embrace the colour and go forth and conquer... all the very best in the contest Ramona, it was a pleasure to read this candid write, very brave.
To give into the difficult time is to do a great injustice to yourself... be kind to yourself... always!
With our thoughts we create...
masterpieces.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Hi Ramona,
I guess most of us have had that 'black stuff' creeping in at some point or another... and there are a myriad of reasons and conditions that, if left unchecked to roam as it wants can have some horrifying effects on the human condition.
I could think of nothing better for you to do than write. Write poetry, write prose, write even when you brain feels jumbled and out of whack. For tomorrow is another day, and in my experience... every changes, and change is just another breath away.
The next day, the next week, hell, the next month, you go back see what the magic of jumbled has created... it may have unleashed a masterpiece? Who knows, it doesn't matter, it's not even the point... it just allows focus.
My point being, we all have our ups and downs, yours may be in extremes, and seem off kilter. I believe it's those adversities and the levels of which allow a much profound personal growth in the wanting to accept what life has handed out to you... the good, the bad and yes, the ugly.
That's who we are, just different degrees of. One of my little mantras is... 'resistance is futile'... more so, go with the flow. Rule one... be kind to yourself, the most important. Love yourself for being persistent in your suffering... for pain and suffering are inevitable... misery is optional.
Keep going, keep trying, keep persisting... keep on keeping on.
My heart bleeds for your pain of state, but my heart also opens up wide to the possibilities of what you can achieve under extreme adversity, and for that I send you my love and healing.
No one can compare their ailments to another, never... we can only live in the connectedness of it, the sympathy of it and the empathy wrapped up in knowing what you explained beautifully within this poem.
To be positive and to take every situation as a positive in a half-full cup attitude is the only way I go forward.
Embrace the colour and go forth and conquer... all the very best in the contest Ramona, it was a pleasure to read this candid write, very brave.
To give into the difficult time is to do a great injustice to yourself... be kind to yourself... always!
With our thoughts we create...
masterpieces.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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James, you are so very kind and insightful. Your words hit home in a very special way. I will keep writing. I have found it to be very therapeutic on the good days and the bad. The "Colors" swirl but as you say they are a part of the Oceans tide of life, ebbing and flowing, dark and light. Thank you for you kind words and encouragement. Blessings.
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It was a pleasure to read and review your poem Ramona... now spread your wings and fly(((((((((((((((((.
Comment from Michael Cassar
There is beauty in colors. They are mood setters. An orange day is a bright day for me. Purple is a so and so day. Green, depending on its shade, tends to be hopeful. Blue was never my favorite, and your tedious black has been the symbol of some degree of elegance. But elegance has its own structure and sometimes boredom. So let colors ignite the good spirit and give not too much weight to unfinished business. We have all abandoned projects. And the world survived without them.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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There is beauty in colors. They are mood setters. An orange day is a bright day for me. Purple is a so and so day. Green, depending on its shade, tends to be hopeful. Blue was never my favorite, and your tedious black has been the symbol of some degree of elegance. But elegance has its own structure and sometimes boredom. So let colors ignite the good spirit and give not too much weight to unfinished business. We have all abandoned projects. And the world survived without them.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much for your review!
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Thanks so much for your review!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I appreciate your willingness to express yourself and your intimate feelings so openly.
You have done a great job with the prompt and this is a wonderful contest submission that I hope will do well.
You have used sensory details to connect the reader to your writing, and after all... this is the goal right?
I suffer from bipolar 1 and can relate to every word you have so carefully selected.
I hope you have a strong support system and treatment program.
Funny thing, once I started meds (15 yrs ago), I could no longer paint but I have discovered poetry and " word painting."
I feel lucky to have landed here on FS, a safe platform to expose as much of ourselves as we are comfortable.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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I appreciate your willingness to express yourself and your intimate feelings so openly.
You have done a great job with the prompt and this is a wonderful contest submission that I hope will do well.
You have used sensory details to connect the reader to your writing, and after all... this is the goal right?
I suffer from bipolar 1 and can relate to every word you have so carefully selected.
I hope you have a strong support system and treatment program.
Funny thing, once I started meds (15 yrs ago), I could no longer paint but I have discovered poetry and " word painting."
I feel lucky to have landed here on FS, a safe platform to expose as much of ourselves as we are comfortable.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much for your review and your understanding. Yes. Writing has become an outlet for me as well.
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Thanks so much for your review and your understanding. Yes. Writing has become an outlet for me as well.
Comment from Boogienights
I'm sorry you are going through this, it must be very hard on you. My son has schizophrenia and its a terrible battle against the voices in his head. I'm glad that you have shared this. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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I'm sorry you are going through this, it must be very hard on you. My son has schizophrenia and its a terrible battle against the voices in his head. I'm glad that you have shared this. :)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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I?m so sorry to hear about your son. Schizophrenia is a terrible disease to battle. Much harder to treat than bipolar disease. I feel for your son and you. It must be very hard. The medication alone as I understand it can make a person feel very bad. My heart goes out to the both of you. Bless you.
