Haiku (robins hesitate)
summer haiku4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your haiku, June. I can feel the moment. I can see the hesitation. For a bird, nothing good comes with whiskers.
Did you mean for there to be an extra space after the first line. That works with the word hesitates so it is fine either way.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I like your haiku, June. I can feel the moment. I can see the hesitation. For a bird, nothing good comes with whiskers.
Did you mean for there to be an extra space after the first line. That works with the word hesitates so it is fine either way.
Nice job.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I'm glad you could relate to this one on shadows with whiskers. lol My cats stalk the robins - through our windows - I don't let them out. But they do make their presence known. Thanks for the heads up on the spacing. My arthritic fingers did it again!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I'm not surprised that the robin's hesitated if there was a cat skulking around near their feeder. Nicely done with this haiku June I like the
Shadow with whispers
very descriptive. Cheers Valda
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I'm not surprised that the robin's hesitated if there was a cat skulking around near their feeder. Nicely done with this haiku June I like the
Shadow with whispers
very descriptive. Cheers Valda
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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My cats are always keeping their eyes on the birds - through the window. Casting shadows?
Comment from leather
I read this and thought, 'if I were a bird, I too would hesitate to approach a new bird feeder if it were a shadow with whiskers.' I was thinking literally; then it dawned on me that the reference was probably to a cat-shaped feeder? Still not sure which way to go with this one, but you chose a very nice illustration to pair with your poem.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I read this and thought, 'if I were a bird, I too would hesitate to approach a new bird feeder if it were a shadow with whiskers.' I was thinking literally; then it dawned on me that the reference was probably to a cat-shaped feeder? Still not sure which way to go with this one, but you chose a very nice illustration to pair with your poem.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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haha - I was referring to my cats who have discouraged the robins from trying our new feeder. We finally moved it to another area of the house. Hopefully our whiskered friends won't find it. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Robins Hesitate, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, notes the vigilance of the caution conscious bird as the threat of the local tabby cat is suspected.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This haiku, Robins Hesitate, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, notes the vigilance of the caution conscious bird as the threat of the local tabby cat is suspected.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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haha - I was referring to my cats who have discouraged the robins from trying our new feeder. We finally moved it to another area of the house. Hopefully our whiskered friends won't find it. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
