Sinclair Pickens-Smythe
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I do like this story line. I do feel you could do more showing and not telling. You're telling us the story, show us. It will help get your reviewers more involved.
The next day, she stomped unannounced into Littleman's office, (The following day...)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I do like this story line. I do feel you could do more showing and not telling. You're telling us the story, show us. It will help get your reviewers more involved.
The next day, she stomped unannounced into Littleman's office, (The following day...)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the advice. I will try to do that. I'll make the correction.
Comment from aryr
This was a fantastic continuation chapter, damommy. Poor old Sinclair Pickens-Smythe had definitely made his plan and his escape. I really had to chuckle how Arabella was coping, she was not. Meanwhile, the butler- Mr. Buggles and Mrs. Kimble were definitely eating high on the hog, as they say. LOL, if Arabella thought that by hiring Mr. O'Malley was going to do the trick, she definitely had another thought coming. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This was a fantastic continuation chapter, damommy. Poor old Sinclair Pickens-Smythe had definitely made his plan and his escape. I really had to chuckle how Arabella was coping, she was not. Meanwhile, the butler- Mr. Buggles and Mrs. Kimble were definitely eating high on the hog, as they say. LOL, if Arabella thought that by hiring Mr. O'Malley was going to do the trick, she definitely had another thought coming. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for this great review!
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Most welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from royowen
With the self absorbed attitude of Arabella, I wouldn't be surprised if O'Malley would do just that, he might even allow Sinclair to keep running, after all hasn't he suffered enough? And clever enough to do a profitable escape, where did this come from Yvonne? Well done, good storytelling, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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With the self absorbed attitude of Arabella, I wouldn't be surprised if O'Malley would do just that, he might even allow Sinclair to keep running, after all hasn't he suffered enough? And clever enough to do a profitable escape, where did this come from Yvonne? Well done, good storytelling, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I don't know where it came from. Years ago, I was kidding about names, and said my cat's name was Charlie Pickens-Smythe, hyphenated spelled with a y and an e on the end. I'm the first to admit I'm a very poor prose writer, but I'm giving it a try. Thank you so much for giving me a good review.
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I thought you did well, more than myself Yvonne, my typing is too inefficient.
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Bless your heart. Thank you.
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A pleasure Yvonne
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This chapter lets the reader learn a lot about Arabella's character, and I look forwards to learning to what lengths Sinclair had gone to to escape from her clutches. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This chapter lets the reader learn a lot about Arabella's character, and I look forwards to learning to what lengths Sinclair had gone to to escape from her clutches. Kate xx
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing my attempt at story telling. I truly appreciate it.
