I Begged My Many Demons
I'm a religious work in progress/one has to start somewhere26 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine rhymes and flow and the sentiment is a little scary as those demons control and there is a fight for control here, I think many will identify with these words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Fine rhymes and flow and the sentiment is a little scary as those demons control and there is a fight for control here, I think many will identify with these words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you Dolly, for the great review and stars.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Geez, John, maybe you should write poetry more than once or twice a year!
Then I looked into his eyes of grace and drove a sharpened sword - that's a pretty powerful line. And the last line gave me chills!
Seriously, this is as good as I've seen here and you should be very satisfied with your work.
I'm so sorry that I don't have a 6 to give you.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Geez, John, maybe you should write poetry more than once or twice a year!
Then I looked into his eyes of grace and drove a sharpened sword - that's a pretty powerful line. And the last line gave me chills!
Seriously, this is as good as I've seen here and you should be very satisfied with your work.
I'm so sorry that I don't have a 6 to give you.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Pam. Your review is inspiring, and I appreciate the honorable mention of the six stars. It means much coming from you. Thanks again.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I admit I had a bit of trouble following your poem, but then this isn't the first time for me as I am only an apprentice poet. My problem was once or twice trying to work out whether you were referring to Jesus' father or Satan. Things got a little muddled in my head there. If I'm not the only one, maybe you'll want to sneak a quick fix? Kate xx
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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I admit I had a bit of trouble following your poem, but then this isn't the first time for me as I am only an apprentice poet. My problem was once or twice trying to work out whether you were referring to Jesus' father or Satan. Things got a little muddled in my head there. If I'm not the only one, maybe you'll want to sneak a quick fix? Kate xx
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Kate. I will keep an eye on your reference. Thanks for pointing it out to me.
Comment from Wendy G
I think we are all a work in progress, certainly I am. needing refinement always. I choose to follow Jesus but Satan is very subtle and deceptive, and can disguise by making wrong seem good and attractive and right. We all need much discernment. Well-written, very thought-provoking.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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I think we are all a work in progress, certainly I am. needing refinement always. I choose to follow Jesus but Satan is very subtle and deceptive, and can disguise by making wrong seem good and attractive and right. We all need much discernment. Well-written, very thought-provoking.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a great review, Wendy. He is a bit sneaky!
Comment from karenina
None of us are as secure as we should be, or think we are, or might be along the way. This poem speaks to my own faith, which seems weak and pale when compared--yet God knows I'm a work in progress and satan (lower case ~ no respect!) will NOT have his way with me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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None of us are as secure as we should be, or think we are, or might be along the way. This poem speaks to my own faith, which seems weak and pale when compared--yet God knows I'm a work in progress and satan (lower case ~ no respect!) will NOT have his way with me!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading my only poem for the year, my friend. Oh, I did give the devil his due, didn't I? I will go in and whisk those capitals away pronto! Thank you, my friend
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Smile.
Somewhere I wrote a poem about that...
Lower case/no respect!
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It makes sense
Comment from Shirley McLain
Isn't it wonderful that no matter how far down we go God loves us unconditionally. Even if I occasionally fall down, I know I will never go as far down as I was before, because he's in my life. You did a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Isn't it wonderful that no matter how far down we go God loves us unconditionally. Even if I occasionally fall down, I know I will never go as far down as I was before, because he's in my life. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Shirley, for the wonderful review and comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
In church, I've heard several testimonies by people who fought the Lord for years, were under conviction for their sins but didn't want to give their favorite sins up!
Then--at long last--they let the Lord in. Your dramatically descriptive and expressive poem--especially the last stanza--has made me think of those testimonies. Very moving
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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In church, I've heard several testimonies by people who fought the Lord for years, were under conviction for their sins but didn't want to give their favorite sins up!
Then--at long last--they let the Lord in. Your dramatically descriptive and expressive poem--especially the last stanza--has made me think of those testimonies. Very moving
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Janice, for the great review and inspiring words.
Comment from lyenochka
I think you have depicted a journey of spiritual struggle well. There is much in the world's philosophies and the current societal cultures that can misrepresent the Lord. But your conclusion that the Lord delights in you is closer to what the Bible says.
quotation suggestion:
"God says,
'you are adored.'" (since it's a quote within the Angel's quote)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I think you have depicted a journey of spiritual struggle well. There is much in the world's philosophies and the current societal cultures that can misrepresent the Lord. But your conclusion that the Lord delights in you is closer to what the Bible says.
quotation suggestion:
"God says,
'you are adored.'" (since it's a quote within the Angel's quote)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Helen. I appreciate your comments and critique. I don't write much poetry unless I have something personal to convey. I enjoy the dabble. Thank you again. I'll make that change.
Comment from Carlos' girl
Nice work nice presentation. The calligraphy font lends itself to the topic.
Satan is a slippery slope. Just say " Satan get behind me!". Then proceed with confidence in God.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Nice work nice presentation. The calligraphy font lends itself to the topic.
Satan is a slippery slope. Just say " Satan get behind me!". Then proceed with confidence in God.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Nicely said, my friend! Thanks for the advice and the stars.
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Most welcome
As The Pretenders said in their song "Message of Love": We are all of us in the gutter; some of us are looking at the stars.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
The theme of this poem is authentic, honest, gut-wrenching, and ultimately hopeful. You weaved your way through the lost years to an encounter with an angel of the Lord. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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The theme of this poem is authentic, honest, gut-wrenching, and ultimately hopeful. You weaved your way through the lost years to an encounter with an angel of the Lord. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Tim! Of course, you are one of my aforementioned idles of this genre, and your words are always cherished, but that was my one attempt for the year. I'm going back to my stories, lol. Thank you for reading, my friend.
