Flaming Sunset
5/6/4/7/6/10 = 38 ~ Manyoshu7 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hello Gypsy
This is spectacular! I love everything snout it.
Favorite line...
sunset bleeds over unyielding moors.
The ending if very moving once I figured it out
I'm behind in my.club work so forgive me. My bad eyesight keeps slowing me down.
Much enjoyed!
It was so rich in imagery I saw the whole thing in my head
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Hello Gypsy
This is spectacular! I love everything snout it.
Favorite line...
sunset bleeds over unyielding moors.
The ending if very moving once I figured it out
I'm behind in my.club work so forgive me. My bad eyesight keeps slowing me down.
Much enjoyed!
It was so rich in imagery I saw the whole thing in my head
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Don't worry about it, post when you like.
Thank you very much for your exceptional six star review. I appreciate your time and kind feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from aryr
I really liked this Manyoshu Poem because it showed a definite pattern until the last line, Gypsy. The picture of the sunset in the distance, the water and the boat all seemed to bring it together. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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I really liked this Manyoshu Poem because it showed a definite pattern until the last line, Gypsy. The picture of the sunset in the distance, the water and the boat all seemed to bring it together. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Aryr, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason. " -- Novalis
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from karenina
Fantastic! I love your font variations, and special thanks for showing us the same poem in "normal" font--
You're a master with words and always a notch above in presentation, which is why I am such a huge fan!
A wonderful example of your creative genius!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Fantastic! I love your font variations, and special thanks for showing us the same poem in "normal" font--
You're a master with words and always a notch above in presentation, which is why I am such a huge fan!
A wonderful example of your creative genius!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much, karenina, I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars! Hugs and kisses.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." --Atticus
The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid.Atticus
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I nominate myself to be president of your fan club!
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LoL... I love it! You're most than welcomed. :)
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem - Excellent presentation picture - very nice - the story matches the picture perfectly - I can imagine the boat rocking back and forth - and the I notice that it seems to be trendy now with writers to try and be creative with fonts and colors to express- in this case I can visualize the movement of the boat - not sure the different colors lend anything to the poem or the presentation - honestly - not to criticize the work or the poem - my take - I found it difficult to read and feel that it takes away rather than adds - probably fun - but your poetry is more important to me than the artwork and should be the focus. I know not long ago I too was going nuts with capital letters and bold type etc to dress up my work, and my teacher gently pointed out this very same thing to me. She was right. Hug.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I like your poem - Excellent presentation picture - very nice - the story matches the picture perfectly - I can imagine the boat rocking back and forth - and the I notice that it seems to be trendy now with writers to try and be creative with fonts and colors to express- in this case I can visualize the movement of the boat - not sure the different colors lend anything to the poem or the presentation - honestly - not to criticize the work or the poem - my take - I found it difficult to read and feel that it takes away rather than adds - probably fun - but your poetry is more important to me than the artwork and should be the focus. I know not long ago I too was going nuts with capital letters and bold type etc to dress up my work, and my teacher gently pointed out this very same thing to me. She was right. Hug.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I didn't use capital letters but I understand the wavy sizes may be hard to read, so far you are the only one that brought it up. I can add a simple font below for folks who can't read it. Thanks
AP, thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
"We are all wanderers on this earth. Our hearts are full of wonder, and our souls are deep with dreams." -Gypsy Proverbs
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Well Old might have something to do with it too.
One of the reasons I am so drawn to Haiku. The discipline it requires...it seems so simple...but in reality it is far from it as I am finding out...it is SO incredible the deeper you get, as you know and I am finding out. I tried to write two poems a day...no way...don't know how you do it? I wrote a 666666 today - took all day lol.
I like your Gypsy Proverbs! So true. hug. AP
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Well rats, I just sent this in a lighting storm and somehow it didn?t make it through! Try again- Thanks ! simple is good but not necessary if I?m the only one - no worries- just old I guess! Hey I wrote a 666666 today! Not 2 one - don?t know how you do 2 a day. Called Drop dead? Anyway- hope you had a good holiday weekend with your family- take care my friend AP
Comment from lyenochka
A very artistic presentation with the boat part giving us the rocking sensation visually! I wonder if the "radio" playing at home is free from the blues of sadness or the blues of the sea.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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A very artistic presentation with the boat part giving us the rocking sensation visually! I wonder if the "radio" playing at home is free from the blues of sadness or the blues of the sea.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Helen, thank you very much for your review. I added the radio for the phrase...more than the blues. I'll take a look.
"We are all wanderers on this earth. Our hearts are full of wonder, and our souls are deep with dreams." -Gypsy Proverbs
Comment from John Ciarmello
I love the visual effect of this poem and your talented and well-written content. You always amaze me with your imagination and poetic beauty word wise and otherwise.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I love the visual effect of this poem and your talented and well-written content. You always amaze me with your imagination and poetic beauty word wise and otherwise.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for the kind words and excellent review. I appreciate that you took time to read my poem.
Gypsy
"The poet waits to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
Comment from Bruce Gibbons
I have rated the stars at 6 because I like the effort that went into the graphics. Also I liked the sadness I felt as the sunsets over an empty boat that is gently rocking to the lull of the waves. I feel this action and relate to the inability to have a friendly shore to land upon. It is a good poem and I liked it immensely.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I have rated the stars at 6 because I like the effort that went into the graphics. Also I liked the sadness I felt as the sunsets over an empty boat that is gently rocking to the lull of the waves. I feel this action and relate to the inability to have a friendly shore to land upon. It is a good poem and I liked it immensely.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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You have a good interpretation of my poem. The beauty about Japanese poetry is that is left up to the reader to interpret it. What I was imagining was a fisherman coming home at night with no fish caught. Maybe going to bed without supper.
Thank you very much for the kind words and exceptional six stars review. I appreciate that you took time to read my poem.
Gypsy
"The poet waits to paint the unsaid." -Atticus
