Goliath's Hard Day
A senryu about David and Goliath30 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Good poem for the contest. I like the way you have translated the David and Goliath story into modern language and venacular. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Good poem for the contest. I like the way you have translated the David and Goliath story into modern language and venacular. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much. I hope to do more Bible poems or stories:)
I appreciate your time and thoughts!
Tina
Comment from Wendy G
Though relatively small in stature compared to the large and arrogant Goliath, David had God's might and strength. Goliath probably had no time to learn his lesson, but his country people should have learned it.
Well done. Clever last line.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Though relatively small in stature compared to the large and arrogant Goliath, David had God's might and strength. Goliath probably had no time to learn his lesson, but his country people should have learned it.
Well done. Clever last line.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Wendy! I value your input, seriously!
Tina
Comment from mermaids
I like your poem, it is uplifting. We can all be like David and overcome much. Excellent faith based poem in few words that says much and speaks to the reader.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I like your poem, it is uplifting. We can all be like David and overcome much. Excellent faith based poem in few words that says much and speaks to the reader.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Tina.
The picture plus your words pairs perfectly. Great
work with the syllable count per line. I like the play
on the word rocks in the last line.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Tina.
The picture plus your words pairs perfectly. Great
work with the syllable count per line. I like the play
on the word rocks in the last line.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jan. I appreciate the review!
Tina
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Thank you, Jan. I appreciate the review!
Tina
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Thank you, Jan. I appreciate the review!
Tina
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Thank you, Jan. I appreciate the review!
Tina
Comment from robyn corum
Tina,
What a fun poem! And sooooo stinking true. HA! That silly Goliath didn't stand a chance against David and his mighty faith. David knew from a very young age which things were important in life. He wasn't perfect, but he's a great example to us all. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Tina,
What a fun poem! And sooooo stinking true. HA! That silly Goliath didn't stand a chance against David and his mighty faith. David knew from a very young age which things were important in life. He wasn't perfect, but he's a great example to us all. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Robyn! Hey there! Thanks for the nice review for me but also for God!
Hugs!
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Robyn! Hey there! Thanks for the nice review for me but also for God!
Hugs!
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Robyn! Hey there! Thanks for the nice review for me but also for God!
Hugs!
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Robyn! Hey there! Thanks for the nice review for me but also for God!
Hugs!
Comment from jessizero
I loved, loved, loved this poem. "Faith in God rocks!" That's a great line. I can't say any more. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I loved, loved, loved this poem. "Faith in God rocks!" That's a great line. I can't say any more. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jessi! It means so much that you love the phrase. Our God is awesome!
Thanks again!!
Comment from royowen
The trouble with those allied to the wicked one, they tend to carry around that devilish arrogance which lets them down, so much so, Goliath lost his large head as a result, beautifully written Tina, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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The trouble with those allied to the wicked one, they tend to carry around that devilish arrogance which lets them down, so much so, Goliath lost his large head as a result, beautifully written Tina, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Roy. I always appreciate your comments. Yes, that arrogance, lifting ourselves up, can bring us down! It's God's job to exalt us:)
Thanks again!
Tina
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Thank you, Roy. I always appreciate your comments. Yes, that arrogance, lifting ourselves up, can bring us down! It's God's job to exalt us:)
Thanks again!
Tina
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Well done Tina
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Thank you, sir!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is fantastic - the way you turn the last line into something totally different from the rock in the sling that killed Goliath to faith in God being the rock that kills Goliath. This is very clever, and I think it's really hard to turn a short poem into anything terribly unique. You've done a great job here.
Good luck with the contest - great entry.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This is fantastic - the way you turn the last line into something totally different from the rock in the sling that killed Goliath to faith in God being the rock that kills Goliath. This is very clever, and I think it's really hard to turn a short poem into anything terribly unique. You've done a great job here.
Good luck with the contest - great entry.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Pam. It means a lot that you reviewed and gave me your insight!
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Thank you, Pam. It means a lot that you reviewed and gave me your insight!
Comment from harmony13
The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes.
The artwork is awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes.
The artwork is awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Harmony:) I'm glad you liked it.
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Thanks, Harmony:) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Clever play of words with the last line. I like it and your 3-line-poem. Your font is large and easily read. It's a matching color in the visual and being centered the text is more prominent. The visual fits perfectly. This poem is well-written and well-presented. This poem ROCKS!! lol
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Clever play of words with the last line. I like it and your 3-line-poem. Your font is large and easily read. It's a matching color in the visual and being centered the text is more prominent. The visual fits perfectly. This poem is well-written and well-presented. This poem ROCKS!! lol
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Haha ...When I started writing a few years ago, someone told me to make the font larger and readable, so I try to remember that. Aw, thanks for the virtual fist bump here! You rock!
Tina
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Haha ...When I started writing a few years ago, someone told me to make the font larger and readable, so I try to remember that. Aw, thanks for the virtual fist bump here! You rock!
Tina
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You are welcome.
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Your message came twice. What are you "rocking" where you are at??? LOL
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I am not sure why you got two identical reviews. I'm just rocking some lousy internet,lol!!
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Beats being in a rocking chair. LOL You know we are just being too silly! LOL
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Life is too serious. We , silly girls, are the smart ones!
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Exactly! We rock around the clock!
