Surrounded by Wild Majesty
My happy place on the headland.13 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
What a sweet poem and, after reading it, as you said, "how can I be unhappy any more?" It's reverent and uplifting, filled with a healthy respect for the beauty of nature.
Your aa,bb,ccc rhyme scheme is interesting, and you use it well and consistently. My only question is why, in the last verse, you rhymed "eyes" with "eyes," and not another word. Might you, perhaps, want to say, "reverent sighs?"
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
What a sweet poem and, after reading it, as you said, "how can I be unhappy any more?" It's reverent and uplifting, filled with a healthy respect for the beauty of nature.
Your aa,bb,ccc rhyme scheme is interesting, and you use it well and consistently. My only question is why, in the last verse, you rhymed "eyes" with "eyes," and not another word. Might you, perhaps, want to say, "reverent sighs?"
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Oh, what a good catch. I didn't intend to repeat 'eyes' at all... I miss-put it again when I did in fact mean to write sighs - you know my mind!
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I actually did suspect that might be what you had in mind. There are some people who do think that using the same word does rhyme. (They don't realize that only works if you rhyme the preceding word, i.e., "light eyes" rhymes with "bright eyes.") I didn't get the impression you were one of them. Your other rhymes were too well chosen.
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No, I hope I never become 'one of them'.
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Ditto!
Comment from Raul1
I like how you placed your description of a happy place. I think I get the message that we all need to be happy. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
I like how you placed your description of a happy place. I think I get the message that we all need to be happy. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reviewing - I appreciate your comments.
Comment from jessizero
This sounds like a wonderful happy place to be. It sounded scary at first, but when you explained things, it sounded great. Thank you so much for sharing.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
This sounds like a wonderful happy place to be. It sounded scary at first, but when you explained things, it sounded great. Thank you so much for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Wild places can be dangerous, but they heighten emotion and respect.