Sunflower Style
Bestow your smile on others.18 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Lisa,
I enjoyed your poem about sunflowers, and how we can be like them... beaming till we droop!
"Beam your beauty to others' lives"
You have some terrific lines in your poem, a pep talk...
"Be a sunflower, nod your head;
say Yes to love -- note what I said."
and,
"Reflect some rays of joy and care.
Look for love -- it's everywhere."
Your last two lines are so cute, made me laugh...
"(Or maybe this is a load of manure --
for a hopeless romantic, there's no cure.)"
Nice rhymes and meter throughout your poem! A true word engineer!
Well done. Well said.
Hugs,
Kimbob
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Hi Lisa,
I enjoyed your poem about sunflowers, and how we can be like them... beaming till we droop!
"Beam your beauty to others' lives"
You have some terrific lines in your poem, a pep talk...
"Be a sunflower, nod your head;
say Yes to love -- note what I said."
and,
"Reflect some rays of joy and care.
Look for love -- it's everywhere."
Your last two lines are so cute, made me laugh...
"(Or maybe this is a load of manure --
for a hopeless romantic, there's no cure.)"
Nice rhymes and meter throughout your poem! A true word engineer!
Well done. Well said.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem is so uplifting, cheerful, and inspirational that I find myself trying to think to someone to smile at or help. I will take the memory of your words with me when I go out tomorrow. This poem has a delightful message.
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This poem is so uplifting, cheerful, and inspirational that I find myself trying to think to someone to smile at or help. I will take the memory of your words with me when I go out tomorrow. This poem has a delightful message.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the way it flows off your tongue as you read it aloud. It is hopeful and inspiring to someone who is having a bad day or just reminding them to always be on the lookout for wonderful things.
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I love the way it flows off your tongue as you read it aloud. It is hopeful and inspiring to someone who is having a bad day or just reminding them to always be on the lookout for wonderful things.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are lovely, encouraging, good for the soul, descriptive
and creative. I smiled at the last line because the stanzas above
it are not always easy to do! The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments these words!
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The author's words are lovely, encouraging, good for the soul, descriptive
and creative. I smiled at the last line because the stanzas above
it are not always easy to do! The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments these words!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
Comment from Pantygynt
Since manure is bi-syllabic
sure to be stored in the attic
of cultured sayings philosophic
nothing ventured catastrophic
as would be the case with one
whether from the bull or stallion
by accident or by rapscallion
personification here
renders sunflower poem clear
and not at all a pile of dung
Don't mind me. Just playing word games.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Since manure is bi-syllabic
sure to be stored in the attic
of cultured sayings philosophic
nothing ventured catastrophic
as would be the case with one
whether from the bull or stallion
by accident or by rapscallion
personification here
renders sunflower poem clear
and not at all a pile of dung
Don't mind me. Just playing word games.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Writers know how to entertain themselves.
Glad you don't think my poem is a pile of bull or horse poo. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful poem, which almost brought me to tears. Just back from setting up and manning the Recovery Centre now (The evac centre is closed as of today, as we have organised temporary accommodation for all who needed it). Such a rush all day, exhausting. A grown man wept in despair, as did a couple of women. We distributed food and material goods to many dozens of families. But how will they manage? I'm trying to be a sunflower, as you so beautifully expressed it in your poem, so well written.
Wendy
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A beautiful poem, which almost brought me to tears. Just back from setting up and manning the Recovery Centre now (The evac centre is closed as of today, as we have organised temporary accommodation for all who needed it). Such a rush all day, exhausting. A grown man wept in despair, as did a couple of women. We distributed food and material goods to many dozens of families. But how will they manage? I'm trying to be a sunflower, as you so beautifully expressed it in your poem, so well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Loved the message! The sunflower does more than nod at the end. It almost shrivels up and really hangs her head. But I do like the call to look outward and seek to bless others.
Personally, I think you could remove the final couplet. While it's humorous, it detracts from the message. Just my thinking.
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Loved the message! The sunflower does more than nod at the end. It almost shrivels up and really hangs her head. But I do like the call to look outward and seek to bless others.
Personally, I think you could remove the final couplet. While it's humorous, it detracts from the message. Just my thinking.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2022
Comment from royowen
To be a romantic is a good thing, it makes for living a long, healthy life, it gives you dreams, and funnily enough they are not fantasies. It gets you up in the morning, you can face bad days bravely and well, and helps us survive the bully boys, so great post, optimism has helped me to keep going when I thought I was alone, beautifully written, blessings Roy, "without a vision my people perish"
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To be a romantic is a good thing, it makes for living a long, healthy life, it gives you dreams, and funnily enough they are not fantasies. It gets you up in the morning, you can face bad days bravely and well, and helps us survive the bully boys, so great post, optimism has helped me to keep going when I thought I was alone, beautifully written, blessings Roy, "without a vision my people perish"
Comment Written 10-Jul-2022
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, sure; draw me in with light, lovely images, words of wisdom and perfectly flowing, unforced rhyming patterns...then finish it off with a sucker punch right between the eyes. Classic LisaMay, for sure. Always memorable, always fun. Thanks for the smile.
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Oh, sure; draw me in with light, lovely images, words of wisdom and perfectly flowing, unforced rhyming patterns...then finish it off with a sucker punch right between the eyes. Classic LisaMay, for sure. Always memorable, always fun. Thanks for the smile.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2022
Comment from Michele Harber
From one hopeless romantic to another, I completely agree that love is everywhere. You just have to figure out which rocks to look under, and walls to look behind.
I like your sunflower metaphor. While sunflowers are not my favorite flower, they are large and bright and open, like they're inviting a person to sniff them or bee to pollinate them.
I like the optimistic and encouraging attitude that helping others helps them, and you as well. Who cares if you get something out of it too? The main thing is that we help each other - being open and inviting like a sunflower.
Nice rhyme choices, as always, and I love your last two lines.
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From one hopeless romantic to another, I completely agree that love is everywhere. You just have to figure out which rocks to look under, and walls to look behind.
I like your sunflower metaphor. While sunflowers are not my favorite flower, they are large and bright and open, like they're inviting a person to sniff them or bee to pollinate them.
I like the optimistic and encouraging attitude that helping others helps them, and you as well. Who cares if you get something out of it too? The main thing is that we help each other - being open and inviting like a sunflower.
Nice rhyme choices, as always, and I love your last two lines.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2022
