The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Sheep Without a Shepherd"Adventures around & upon a hill
9 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The pace is good, the flow uninterrupted. The characters are well developed. The language fits the setting. The piece ends at a page-turner place.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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The pace is good, the flow uninterrupted. The characters are well developed. The language fits the setting. The piece ends at a page-turner place.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
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You are welcome.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I have read about some of the atrocities in stories about the various kings. Some of those guys were really nasty individuals and caused much pain and suffering for the poor and the monasteries. Your story is well executed.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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I have read about some of the atrocities in stories about the various kings. Some of those guys were really nasty individuals and caused much pain and suffering for the poor and the monasteries. Your story is well executed.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I love this phrase. Word play is one of my favorite figures of speech: "Your story is well executed." lol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Madeline could be in a lot of trouble if the brothers are forced out of the abbey as she must certainly be somewhere near it to change back to her time. Or is there some other secret? Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Madeline could be in a lot of trouble if the brothers are forced out of the abbey as she must certainly be somewhere near it to change back to her time. Or is there some other secret? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The history of that place is horrible. I'm glad we are in the 21st century as difficult as we feel it is, it is nothing compared with the 16th century.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have used some excellent imagery in this chapter, which contributes to the tension that permeates the whole piece. I enjoyed the read, thank you. Kate xx
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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You have used some excellent imagery in this chapter, which contributes to the tension that permeates the whole piece. I enjoyed the read, thank you. Kate xx
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I got very sad writing ch 37. The ending of that monastery was not pretty.
Comment from Judy Lawless
If the monastery is closing, I wonder what will become of the monks, including Samuel (Madeline). You hint that evil things are to come. This is well written and leaves us unsure whether we want to know more or not. Curiosity will win no doubt. :)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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If the monastery is closing, I wonder what will become of the monks, including Samuel (Madeline). You hint that evil things are to come. This is well written and leaves us unsure whether we want to know more or not. Curiosity will win no doubt. :)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The history of this place is appalling. I want to abbreviate some of the violent actions. I decided to appeal to readers imagination rather than do visuals. I was almost crying as I wrote ch. 37. It was so difficult to write. A slight***Spoiler*** for you -
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! What a shocking announcement! No wonder the abbot was hesitant to speak up and the schedules were all messed up. I remember hearing about the end of the monasteries during a period of England's history. Thanks for bringing this to life through this book!
I liked the humorous quip " heads, which incidentally, I hope we can keep," and the "cacophony" of facial expressions.
my attache' (if you use the Advanced Editor, there is a way to write the e-aigu using the character map that comes with it. Just FYI.)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Oh my! What a shocking announcement! No wonder the abbot was hesitant to speak up and the schedules were all messed up. I remember hearing about the end of the monasteries during a period of England's history. Thanks for bringing this to life through this book!
I liked the humorous quip " heads, which incidentally, I hope we can keep," and the "cacophony" of facial expressions.
my attache' (if you use the Advanced Editor, there is a way to write the e-aigu using the character map that comes with it. Just FYI.)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The history of this place is appalling. I want to abbreviate some of the violent actions. I decided to appeal to readers imagination rather than do visuals. I was almost crying as I wrote ch. 37. It was so difficult to write. A slight***Spoiler*** for you -
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Okay! I am warned! 💖
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lol As I said to Ali gallows laugh
Comment from jessizero
This is getting to a really dark place. I am still captivated and must know what happens next! Thank you for continuing to share this story, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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This is getting to a really dark place. I am still captivated and must know what happens next! Thank you for continuing to share this story, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The history of this place is appalling. I want to abbreviate some of the violent actions. I decided to appeal to readers imagination rather than do visuals. I was almost crying as I wrote ch. 37. It was so difficult to write. A slight***Spoiler*** for you
Comment from aryr
Wow, this continuation chapter was definitely short and sweet and to the point, Liz. Brother Samuel remained as quiet as possible during the tirade of Abbot Richard, which was difficult for her. With Abbot Richard's announcement, it was the end of the monastery, the end of their existence. What will become of them? Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Wow, this continuation chapter was definitely short and sweet and to the point, Liz. Brother Samuel remained as quiet as possible during the tirade of Abbot Richard, which was difficult for her. With Abbot Richard's announcement, it was the end of the monastery, the end of their existence. What will become of them? Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The history of this place is appalling. I want to abbreviate some of the violent actions. I decided to appeal to readers imagination rather than do visuals. I was almost crying as I wrote ch. 37. It was so difficult to write. A slight***Spoiler*** for you.
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Oh my, Ch. 37!!! And to think I made it through 36, now I have to concentrate on 37. You are so, so very welcome, Liz.
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Gallows laugh
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That was so cute, lol, Liz.
Comment from Jay Squires
You know, Liz, as I read this I was thinking that it's a shame that your novel takes place in a monastery where the monks are under vows of silence. Please take this in the manner I'm intending it when I say that your story is in real need of dialogue. That being out of the question, it becomes incumbent on you (if you agree with my gut feeling) to inject more in-the-moment descriptive activity. It's not enough to say that Brother Roger is beat up .... You need to describe its brutality in great detail. Not just a black eye. Then describe the other monks' revulsion to his injuries. I've read your other writings, Liz. I know your gifts. Also, you need go no furher than Abbot Richard's speech at the end of this chapter to find fine examples of this descriptive power. " Wooden bowls rock as he pounds the table, punctuating the power of the word 'putrid'."
I hope you see the validity in what I'm saying. If I'm off the mark, let me know. Let's dialogue over it.
Jay
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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You know, Liz, as I read this I was thinking that it's a shame that your novel takes place in a monastery where the monks are under vows of silence. Please take this in the manner I'm intending it when I say that your story is in real need of dialogue. That being out of the question, it becomes incumbent on you (if you agree with my gut feeling) to inject more in-the-moment descriptive activity. It's not enough to say that Brother Roger is beat up .... You need to describe its brutality in great detail. Not just a black eye. Then describe the other monks' revulsion to his injuries. I've read your other writings, Liz. I know your gifts. Also, you need go no furher than Abbot Richard's speech at the end of this chapter to find fine examples of this descriptive power. " Wooden bowls rock as he pounds the table, punctuating the power of the word 'putrid'."
I hope you see the validity in what I'm saying. If I'm off the mark, let me know. Let's dialogue over it.
Jay
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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I do understand. There will be mostly dialogue from now on. There are just a few more chapters before they return to themselves. I guess people are getting the visceral experience of having to be in silence continuously.
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Thank you, Liz. That was a difficult review to write. I'm relieved you took it so well. "Silence" is so hard to deal with. I knew you have the tools to handle any modification.
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I value your reviews and wisdom...thank you
The history of this place is appalling. I want to abbreviate some of the violent actions. I decided to appeal to readers imagination rather than do visuals. I was almost crying as I wrote ch. 37. It was so difficult to write. A slight***Spoiler*** for you
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I'll check it out when it publishes.
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