In The Depths
Written at age twelve10 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Boogienights. Its presentation was
great--I liked the color scheme, the image, the rhyme scheme,
and the story. You did a great job for a twelve-year-old. Your
words were well thought out and meaningful. It's amazing what
your young mind put together in this poem.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Boogienights. Its presentation was
great--I liked the color scheme, the image, the rhyme scheme,
and the story. You did a great job for a twelve-year-old. Your
words were well thought out and meaningful. It's amazing what
your young mind put together in this poem.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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I was a bit dramatic at that age, but oh, well! Thank you for this wonderful review. :)
Comment from Amy Boudreaux
I loved this. You wrote this when you were twelve? All I can say is wow! I'm impressed. This is beautiful and paints a beautiful picture in the mind. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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I loved this. You wrote this when you were twelve? All I can say is wow! I'm impressed. This is beautiful and paints a beautiful picture in the mind. Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful review, it's so nice of you to say. :)
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is pretty good for being some of your first writings. I love the rhyming in this poem, it is my favorite style of poetry. The artwork is beautiful and adds much to the poem. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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This is pretty good for being some of your first writings. I love the rhyming in this poem, it is my favorite style of poetry. The artwork is beautiful and adds much to the poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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It's my favorite style as well. Thank you for such a great review. :)
Comment from royowen
You were a good poet even at the outset of your awaking to the joys of writing, this is one of those easier forms, but the most affective with this ballad style poem, with abcb rhyming and a super theme, very affective, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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You were a good poet even at the outset of your awaking to the joys of writing, this is one of those easier forms, but the most affective with this ballad style poem, with abcb rhyming and a super theme, very affective, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this nice review, it's always great to hear from you. :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am amazing you wrote this at the age of 12, fine rhymes and a very grown up sentiment here of nature and emotions, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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I am amazing you wrote this at the age of 12, fine rhymes and a very grown up sentiment here of nature and emotions, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this great review. It's a bit dramatic, but then so was I at that age. :)
Comment from Sally Law
Virtual six, dear Sharon. A beautiful love poem and aptly illustrated. I can't imagine writing this at the young age of thirteen. My goodness, what a deep soul you have. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Virtual six, dear Sharon. A beautiful love poem and aptly illustrated. I can't imagine writing this at the young age of thirteen. My goodness, what a deep soul you have. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind words. I was a bit of a drama queen at that age, if truth be told. I was obsessed with star - crossed lovers and reading a lot of Edgar Allen Poe at the time. Thanks again for reading my poem. :)
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think this is brilliant, especially for such an early piece. It's like romance taken to a sinister extreme. I love that there's a sense of triumph to is, even though it's about making the ultimate sacrifice. Really well written.
Mike
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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I think this is brilliant, especially for such an early piece. It's like romance taken to a sinister extreme. I love that there's a sense of triumph to is, even though it's about making the ultimate sacrifice. Really well written.
Mike
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for such a nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Yikes, were you ever an amazing writer at twelve!! Your English teacher must have just loved having you in his/her class!! This is so vivid and (this is not a water reference here) deep! It made my heart race all the while I was reading it, because I just knew the narrator was going to join his love.
I'm so mad that I didn't save a sixth star for this!!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Yikes, were you ever an amazing writer at twelve!! Your English teacher must have just loved having you in his/her class!! This is so vivid and (this is not a water reference here) deep! It made my heart race all the while I was reading it, because I just knew the narrator was going to join his love.
I'm so mad that I didn't save a sixth star for this!!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful review and your kind words. English was my favorite subject in school! Thanks again. :)
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That's certainly no surprise!!
Comment from country ranch writer
7/13/2022 -------3:53am
losing some one takes its toll dome never recover taking there life to be with the one he loved oh so much.like the sirens of the ocean he take the final step into the briny deep never to be seen again.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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7/13/2022 -------3:53am
losing some one takes its toll dome never recover taking there life to be with the one he loved oh so much.like the sirens of the ocean he take the final step into the briny deep never to be seen again.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem. It's a bit dramatic, but then, so was I at that age. :)
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Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Wow! this is a good poem to me. It has a clear sad, longing message that you present well. You use personification effectively~ the sea sighs, the wind whispers. Basically, this is a good older writing.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Wow! this is a good poem to me. It has a clear sad, longing message that you present well. You use personification effectively~ the sea sighs, the wind whispers. Basically, this is a good older writing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this great review. :)
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You are welcome.
