Miriam
Medieval Alliterative Verse ~ FS Poetry class23 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Melissa,
I like the way you capture the essence of fantasy and medieval times in this great work.
The ending is fantastic, as you lull the readers with a fantasy ambience, then jolt them back into reality.
Good luck with this and all your writing,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Melissa,
I like the way you capture the essence of fantasy and medieval times in this great work.
The ending is fantastic, as you lull the readers with a fantasy ambience, then jolt them back into reality.
Good luck with this and all your writing,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you dear Cindy for the lovely review!
Melissa
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You?re welcome, Melissa.
Comment from dragonpoet
All the allitteration adds more of a whimisical quality to the poem with its topic of living in fantasy and dreams. The last stanza reminds us that 'real' life needs to be lived too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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All the allitteration adds more of a whimisical quality to the poem with its topic of living in fantasy and dreams. The last stanza reminds us that 'real' life needs to be lived too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Hello Joan. Thank you, sweet friend.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful jolt back to reality, yes we may dream and try to reach those dreams but reality must play a part, this form is truly intriguing and looks quite difficult though your workflows excellently and with a great message, very well presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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What a wonderful jolt back to reality, yes we may dream and try to reach those dreams but reality must play a part, this form is truly intriguing and looks quite difficult though your workflows excellently and with a great message, very well presented****kahpot
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your lovely review Kim. Sorry for the late reply. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A beautiful poem about beautiful Miriam written in a whimsical delightful manner. Excellent alliteration.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Awesome presentation and imagery. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Miriam
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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A beautiful poem about beautiful Miriam written in a whimsical delightful manner. Excellent alliteration.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Awesome presentation and imagery. Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Miriam
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your lovely review Gypsy. Sorry for the late reply. :)
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully penned and aptly illustrated with medieval artwork. The alliteration and meter are very unique and you have obviously mastered this difficult form. Outstanding!
Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your writing day,
Sal xoxo's
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Beautifully penned and aptly illustrated with medieval artwork. The alliteration and meter are very unique and you have obviously mastered this difficult form. Outstanding!
Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your writing day,
Sal xoxo's
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your lovely review Sally. Sorry for the late reply. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
A most interesting poetic form. By the sounds of it, this poetry class is most productive.
Miriam sounds magical, but also down to earth as brought to life with excellent alliteration.
Very nice indeed. Looking forward to the next poetic form, and many thanks for sharing. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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A most interesting poetic form. By the sounds of it, this poetry class is most productive.
Miriam sounds magical, but also down to earth as brought to life with excellent alliteration.
Very nice indeed. Looking forward to the next poetic form, and many thanks for sharing. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your lovely review Gloria. Sorry for the late reply. :)
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Oh Melissa, what a wonderful poem. I just enjoyed reading it you look learn so much in the classes here on the site. I take it one is taking place right now? All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Oh Melissa, what a wonderful poem. I just enjoyed reading it you look learn so much in the classes here on the site. I take it one is taking place right now? All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Hello Ulla. Thank you.... yes, we are having class at this time. We are beginning our study on Latvian Dainas which are very interesting and challenging. Our preliminary study stated that the four line poems reflect snapshots of emotions or moments of life. similar to haiku... I hope I can learn how to write them. Thanks again Ulla!!
Melissa
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I'm sure you can. You're such a talented writer. I'm looking forward to read them. Is Jim running the class again?
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Hey Ulla... yes, Jim is teaching it. I always love attending the classes. It helps me quite a bit to have the challenges to address.
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I think I know that. Lol, :)))
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love the meter. Always have. Great alliteration in your story as well. Beautiful picture. I stumble on line six. It could be me but I think it is the meter. I read it again to be sure and it was me, not your meter. I love alliteration.. This is exceptional. Warrants a six star rating> Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I love the meter. Always have. Great alliteration in your story as well. Beautiful picture. I stumble on line six. It could be me but I think it is the meter. I read it again to be sure and it was me, not your meter. I love alliteration.. This is exceptional. Warrants a six star rating> Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Hello Nancy. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments on this tough one. I stumbled all the way as I was writing it ;). I am going to check out line six to see what you are talking about. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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No! When I read it again it was me not the meter. Good job!
Comment from Pantygynt
This poem has produced an instant response from plenty of members. This review will bring the the current total to 15 and earn you the recognition it deserves.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This poem has produced an instant response from plenty of members. This review will bring the the current total to 15 and earn you the recognition it deserves.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your lovely review, Jim.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiments here as we search for something magical and find that reality has killed our inspiration. Love the metre and rhymes Melissa, but this line is out of place and seems out of metre to me? What do you think?
"But, as a baying wolf burnished the air with"
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I adore the sentiments here as we search for something magical and find that reality has killed our inspiration. Love the metre and rhymes Melissa, but this line is out of place and seems out of metre to me? What do you think?
"But, as a baying wolf burnished the air with"
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Hi there Dolly. Thanks for the great comments. Let's see about that line that is supposed to be in dactyl meter... BUT, as the BAYing wolf BURnished the AIR with. With medieval verse, the line ending can be open ended... Catalectic... as Jim says. Is this what you meant?
Melissa
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When reading your verse, this line just stuck out to me, although I can see that it is in metre Melissa, it just didn?t sound write, but I bow to your expertise here, love Dolly x
