Miriam
Medieval Alliterative Verse ~ FS Poetry class23 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
Loved the alliteration throughout. Thanks for the explanation about the final 'Bob and wheel,' reflecting on the theme of your poem. Good story, and a good warning in the baying of the wolf. Thanks for sharing what you're learning in class. Blessings.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Loved the alliteration throughout. Thanks for the explanation about the final 'Bob and wheel,' reflecting on the theme of your poem. Good story, and a good warning in the baying of the wolf. Thanks for sharing what you're learning in class. Blessings.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Carol. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
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Yes, I think iambic is so much easier, but you did well with the dactyl meter. Have a great week.
Comment from Raul1
I like this dactyl meter. It follows the rules of the meter. Well written. It is clear and concise. This Miriam character is interesting. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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I like this dactyl meter. It follows the rules of the meter. Well written. It is clear and concise. This Miriam character is interesting. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Raul. So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
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You're welcome!
Comment from lyenochka
The alliteration really stands out in every line! And I really liked how your five-lined poem at the end completely summarizes the main poem. Loved the mix of fantasy and reality.
But, its easily put to flight (it's) Seems to be the contraction of "it is"
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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The alliteration really stands out in every line! And I really liked how your five-lined poem at the end completely summarizes the main poem. Loved the mix of fantasy and reality.
But, its easily put to flight (it's) Seems to be the contraction of "it is"
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Helen. I fixed the typo ~ thanks. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice adherence to the Medieval format and alliterative emphasis. It sounds so foreign to my ear, an overload of alliteration, but you handled the structure well. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Nice adherence to the Medieval format and alliterative emphasis. It sounds so foreign to my ear, an overload of alliteration, but you handled the structure well. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Tim. I liked your open and honest thoughts on the alliteration. It can seem to be overkill on the continuous use of alliteration, but it was required. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
A fine example of your indicated form, Melissa. On my second time through, I picked up on the alliteration. The picture goes very well with the poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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A fine example of your indicated form, Melissa. On my second time through, I picked up on the alliteration. The picture goes very well with the poem.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Paul. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Dactylic is the most challenging meter for me. When done right it's very musical and appealing. Yours is done right. This is such a skillfully written,
creative piece--with alliteration that really enhances the overall effect and a strong message.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Dactylic is the most challenging meter for me. When done right it's very musical and appealing. Yours is done right. This is such a skillfully written,
creative piece--with alliteration that really enhances the overall effect and a strong message.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Janice. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Excellent use of alliteration, and it adds to the melodic effect of the lines. It's like reading a translation of a poem written in Middle English. Miriam is determined to find the hero she's dreamed about. When she hears the wolf, though, she decides to take refuge. Your last stanza is so true. We may have our fantasies, but reality has a way of taking over. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Excellent use of alliteration, and it adds to the melodic effect of the lines. It's like reading a translation of a poem written in Middle English. Miriam is determined to find the hero she's dreamed about. When she hears the wolf, though, she decides to take refuge. Your last stanza is so true. We may have our fantasies, but reality has a way of taking over. judi
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Judi. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. So much alliteration is a bit daunting :) I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
This is a hard one. A bit of a departure from the one we're used to Melissa, so I think you've done a good job with this one, you're a very good poet anyway. It's well suited to the tough stance of Nordic Mythology too. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This is a hard one. A bit of a departure from the one we're used to Melissa, so I think you've done a good job with this one, you're a very good poet anyway. It's well suited to the tough stance of Nordic Mythology too. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you Roy. So glad you liked this one. It was challenging and fun at the same time. I find that writing in dactyl meter is hard and it's no wonder I hardly ever use it. Thanks again.
Melissa
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I understand
Comment from Rachelle Allen
My goodness, but you are so extremely talented! You have created such a vivid image here and presented it with the lyricism of a song. And then, as if that in itself wasn't enough (though it absolutely was!), you even found an absolutely fabulous photo to accompany it! Outstanding job! I loved every word of this. xo
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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My goodness, but you are so extremely talented! You have created such a vivid image here and presented it with the lyricism of a song. And then, as if that in itself wasn't enough (though it absolutely was!), you even found an absolutely fabulous photo to accompany it! Outstanding job! I loved every word of this. xo
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Rachelle. I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a struggle to write in dactyl meter. :)
Melissa
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I'm wondering, Melissa: If you hadn't done a good job, would it have been considered terri(ble) dactyl. [That's a dinosaur joke...] (and It's quite terrible...but I guess it's worth what you paid for it...) xo
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Hahaha... too funny. Perhaps I should have used a stega- thesaurus it help me get it right. :( ugh... bad one. LOL
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Ohhh. You are so bad!! HAHAHAHA.
Comment from June Sargent
This was a lovely presentation with great artwork highlighting the storyline. I enjoyed this trek with Miriam in her flight of fantasy. We all need a bit of whimsy now and then to lighten the burdens of our reality.
Onward and over the obscurely lit pathways,
Miriam made her way ~ moonbeams led on.
Finding her favorite fantasy lingered,
she searched in the shadows for chivalry's song.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This was a lovely presentation with great artwork highlighting the storyline. I enjoyed this trek with Miriam in her flight of fantasy. We all need a bit of whimsy now and then to lighten the burdens of our reality.
Onward and over the obscurely lit pathways,
Miriam made her way ~ moonbeams led on.
Finding her favorite fantasy lingered,
she searched in the shadows for chivalry's song.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Hello June. Thank you for your lovely words. I am delighted that you liked it and showed me which part you liked the best. :). Hugs!!
Melissa
