What Comes Next?
If Life is But a Passing...16 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I enjoyed this short piece, although it confirmed the thought that has been crystallizing in my mind over the least few days. We react too late. In relation to your tale I mean that you should spend all your earthly life trying to improve, I think. Kate xx
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this short piece, although it confirmed the thought that has been crystallizing in my mind over the least few days. We react too late. In relation to your tale I mean that you should spend all your earthly life trying to improve, I think. Kate xx
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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In sports my coaches taught when you're done improving, you're done. Perhaps, that is how the Lord sees it too.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the ... Your view of the afterlife contest contest. ...
Nice presentation. Your words flow well in a very descriptive and clear way.
I find the afterlife premise is an interesting subject.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
"Adults are concerned about their demise but more ( sol ) because of..." *so
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Excellent entry for the ... Your view of the afterlife contest contest. ...
Nice presentation. Your words flow well in a very descriptive and clear way.
I find the afterlife premise is an interesting subject.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
"Adults are concerned about their demise but more ( sol ) because of..." *so
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I choke it our side is an acceptable synonym. I also find so overused. Really.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I found this refreshing and amusing. Refreshing because it does not have the expected heavenly scenes. It is a view of the present life and not so much the afterlife as this is still a question. I enjoyed the ending, riding on another's coattail to get to heaven, may not work, so better start improving now!
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I found this refreshing and amusing. Refreshing because it does not have the expected heavenly scenes. It is a view of the present life and not so much the afterlife as this is still a question. I enjoyed the ending, riding on another's coattail to get to heaven, may not work, so better start improving now!
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Now. But I have credits remain for the local
Club no. Tom
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I lean to the "embryonic breath" theory but definitely agree, a slap on the arse will get things going for sure.
Para 5, 1st sentence: (sol) should be (so)
Para 7, 1st sentence: Add space between ('there') and (after)
Para 7, 2nd sentence (CliffNotes) should be (Cliff Notes) or (CliffsNotes)
Para 7, 3rd sentence: CONSIDER (transcribed) rather than (transcripted) Transcribed sems to be the more accepted verb form of the adjective transcripted
Para 8, 4th sentence: Remove one space before (Then)
Para 9, 6th sentence: Remove enough spaces to bring the next sentence up to a continuous read with the rest of the paragraph.
The entire sixth paragraph is spot on. Been there, done that. and still doing, thank God.
A very healthy, "I really don't know" look at what is to come.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I lean to the "embryonic breath" theory but definitely agree, a slap on the arse will get things going for sure.
Para 5, 1st sentence: (sol) should be (so)
Para 7, 1st sentence: Add space between ('there') and (after)
Para 7, 2nd sentence (CliffNotes) should be (Cliff Notes) or (CliffsNotes)
Para 7, 3rd sentence: CONSIDER (transcribed) rather than (transcripted) Transcribed sems to be the more accepted verb form of the adjective transcripted
Para 8, 4th sentence: Remove one space before (Then)
Para 9, 6th sentence: Remove enough spaces to bring the next sentence up to a continuous read with the rest of the paragraph.
The entire sixth paragraph is spot on. Been there, done that. and still doing, thank God.
A very healthy, "I really don't know" look at what is to come.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Sol was fine, and I've been told three times, but was sure to cross my t and dot the i before I used it because SO I feel is overly used. A great review and all points save for the first have been corrected. Thank you.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The awesome picture pertains not to my review. However, it screams loud and clear, "What is out there beyond those clouds?"
-This posting begins with the age old question of when life begins. Is it at conception or is it at, as you so eloquently expressed, with a "slap on the arse"?
-The next question concerns how long earthly life lasts. You proposed typically not more than a century, which is not very long compared to eternity. In some cases, 100 years is way too long.
-Not sure "where time is unlimited," the definition of eternity, adds much to the statement it ends and could be considered for deletion.
-Next up you pondered which life period is most significant, the earthly or the eternal? That was left unanswered by this piece.
-The fear of death is questioned. Would agree that well could be based on the "time, place, and circumstances" surrounding the situation. I may also include the person's quality of life, or lack thereof.
-"London-like fog:" a good description.
-Good depiction of what many do consider from "Adults are" to "memories and accountabilities".
-Those "lost" languages may hold plenty of value, perhaps even long sought after answers.
-Gold streets and mansions. If you make it to Heaven why not enjoy all it offers?
-When you said "Our hope" take that to mean your?
Quite an interesting piece.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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The awesome picture pertains not to my review. However, it screams loud and clear, "What is out there beyond those clouds?"
-This posting begins with the age old question of when life begins. Is it at conception or is it at, as you so eloquently expressed, with a "slap on the arse"?
-The next question concerns how long earthly life lasts. You proposed typically not more than a century, which is not very long compared to eternity. In some cases, 100 years is way too long.
-Not sure "where time is unlimited," the definition of eternity, adds much to the statement it ends and could be considered for deletion.
-Next up you pondered which life period is most significant, the earthly or the eternal? That was left unanswered by this piece.
-The fear of death is questioned. Would agree that well could be based on the "time, place, and circumstances" surrounding the situation. I may also include the person's quality of life, or lack thereof.
-"London-like fog:" a good description.
-Good depiction of what many do consider from "Adults are" to "memories and accountabilities".
-Those "lost" languages may hold plenty of value, perhaps even long sought after answers.
-Gold streets and mansions. If you make it to Heaven why not enjoy all it offers?
-When you said "Our hope" take that to mean your?
Quite an interesting piece.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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At the moment this life is more significant but what lays ahead. I appreciate the time you give in an in-depth review. Not many folks would for a measly two cent or whatever reward. The picture is an edited portion of a scene in the LDS welcome center, SLC, Utah which is the background for He who created what there is. I need to re-read my piece to answer or change what you suggest. Once more. Thank you. Sincerely. Tom
Comment from lancellot
A very interesting introspective look at life and the possible afterlife.
notes:
Adults are concerned about their demise but more {sol} because
-so
Adults are concerned about
-Most or Normally, adult are concerned about
is the gold standard in real estate, even in {heaven,}
- Heaven (name)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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A very interesting introspective look at life and the possible afterlife.
notes:
Adults are concerned about their demise but more {sol} because
-so
Adults are concerned about
-Most or Normally, adult are concerned about
is the gold standard in real estate, even in {heaven,}
- Heaven (name)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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yes sol is an acceptable substitute for so which I learned in writing this piece, and why not use it for so is overused continuously in speech and in the written word. Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from country ranch writer
7/23/2022-----6:25 pm
Well we will never live to tell the out come of our fate for they say ashes to ashes and dust to dust so where does it leave us?which one we're you meant to be?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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7/23/2022-----6:25 pm
Well we will never live to tell the out come of our fate for they say ashes to ashes and dust to dust so where does it leave us?which one we're you meant to be?
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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New and hopefully reborn with a mortal looking body without the human urges. idk. WE'll either see or be a distant memory.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh Tom, I loved this. It is so true, and as much as we can write fancy stories about the afterlife and how wonderful it will be in Heaven, compared to here, I have not a clue what to expect or what it will be like. And as far as riding on coattails to make it there, if that is possible, then my husband will surely be riding on mine. However, to be truthful, I am not always so sure of my own, as I wish I didn't fall to some temptations or make some mistakes over & over. I know I am a good person and have a good heart, but wish I was more confident that my love for Jesus, God and people was enough to get me there. This was a well written story about the truth of how fast this life travels from birth to the end. The photo is as perfect as the story and I only wish I had a six to give you my dear friend.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Oh Tom, I loved this. It is so true, and as much as we can write fancy stories about the afterlife and how wonderful it will be in Heaven, compared to here, I have not a clue what to expect or what it will be like. And as far as riding on coattails to make it there, if that is possible, then my husband will surely be riding on mine. However, to be truthful, I am not always so sure of my own, as I wish I didn't fall to some temptations or make some mistakes over & over. I know I am a good person and have a good heart, but wish I was more confident that my love for Jesus, God and people was enough to get me there. This was a well written story about the truth of how fast this life travels from birth to the end. The photo is as perfect as the story and I only wish I had a six to give you my dear friend.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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That's ok. Being called friend is an eleven. I know I am a good person and have a good heart also, but ... fraid it's not enuff to be exalted. Maybe, an annex just below His celestial penthouse where I may catch sight of the pair afterwards there.
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I pray that I live in the same penthouse as you, cause when you find very special people in your life, you don't want to ever lose them.
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aaah
Comment from strandregs
We're all going to hell
Said the hare to the fox
So go ahead and eat my tail.
What you believe is what you get.
Good bad
Money or a fige/ up yours.
You pretty much rolled into a blanket and threw it in the sea.
We love the sea.
See.
It's all in the eyes of the bee holder. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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We're all going to hell
Said the hare to the fox
So go ahead and eat my tail.
What you believe is what you get.
Good bad
Money or a fige/ up yours.
You pretty much rolled into a blanket and threw it in the sea.
We love the sea.
See.
It's all in the eyes of the bee holder. :-))Z.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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what is it you really think? :-?
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I think I saw a puticat
In half in quarters
Sorry couldn't help myself.
No matter how many self-help
Guides I read. :-))
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I think I don't know
So we have to go to believe.
What do I believe?
I love sci fi
I love fantasy.
I can't believe in God.
My father lost all his family
I lost him when he just started talking to me.
Was i pissed.:-))Z.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting view of the present life and the afterlife. Mansions don't mean much to me, either, although I like your idea of two and a half baths. Strange that someone thought gold would be a big deal. Maybe you shouldn't count on coattails, just in case. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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This is a very interesting view of the present life and the afterlife. Mansions don't mean much to me, either, although I like your idea of two and a half baths. Strange that someone thought gold would be a big deal. Maybe you shouldn't count on coattails, just in case. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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I do hope, a lot. Change very little from yesterday, and yet I have found I keep making one mistake constantly, of which I shall not share with anyone but my confessor. :-0
