Quite an Experience
Yes, it was ...14 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Egads! I don't understand this fad of paying to be frightened! Apparently, it's big business (although I've never heard of a prison situation)--
Those locked-room adventures? I hyperventilate thinking about them!
Based in part on real life?
Please, tell me you didn't participate!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Egads! I don't understand this fad of paying to be frightened! Apparently, it's big business (although I've never heard of a prison situation)--
Those locked-room adventures? I hyperventilate thinking about them!
Based in part on real life?
Please, tell me you didn't participate!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Lol. Yes, we did, and that's pretty much how it was! We must be nuts!
It suited the contest topic perfectly.
Wendy
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Oh my. Let's just say the Carousel is a bit too racy for me. I'm SO bad at these things! I'm the first to offer to sit it out and take photos!
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Quite an Experience, had me going all the way through to the reveal at the very last sentence. A unique experience, I am sure.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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This story, Quite an Experience, had me going all the way through to the reveal at the very last sentence. A unique experience, I am sure.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Thank you Bill. Glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from jessizero
This was chilling and entertaining at the same time. You did a great job with the prompt and followed through well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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This was chilling and entertaining at the same time. You did a great job with the prompt and followed through well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I appreciate it, and your good wishes.
Comment from BethShelby
I've heard of people actually paying for the experience that must truly being a nightmare for those who knew they would be locked her for however long their sentence. You made it sound so real I wonder it this is really fiction. It is a well written flash.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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I've heard of people actually paying for the experience that must truly being a nightmare for those who knew they would be locked her for however long their sentence. You made it sound so real I wonder it this is really fiction. It is a well written flash.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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It is based on a real event, but is fiction. Thank you very much Beth. I appreciate the six stars greatly.
Comment from WLHall
Finally, a story that incorporated the starting sentence. A few others I read didn't. After writing the required sentence, many in this contest just started writing a completely off topic story. Anyway, your sentence flowed naturally into a relevant story. And a very amazing one. You set up mystery of what was going on. Very creative. Good flow.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Finally, a story that incorporated the starting sentence. A few others I read didn't. After writing the required sentence, many in this contest just started writing a completely off topic story. Anyway, your sentence flowed naturally into a relevant story. And a very amazing one. You set up mystery of what was going on. Very creative. Good flow.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your words (especially as I felt the same about some of the other entries).
Comment from royowen
I love the conclusion. One of the real reasons for these short forms, is to bring out that finishing touch, the thrill of the expectation and revelation bringing a good story to a spectacular end here, heh heh, beautifully written...to show what it's like to be seperate from the world. Good luck, blessings Roy blessing
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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I love the conclusion. One of the real reasons for these short forms, is to bring out that finishing touch, the thrill of the expectation and revelation bringing a good story to a spectacular end here, heh heh, beautifully written...to show what it's like to be seperate from the world. Good luck, blessings Roy blessing
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you Roy. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I get it! One of those college experiments that you paid to experience. But why did you do it?
It is hard to understand why someone, anyone would pay to be locked up when thousands no millions are locked away by no choice of their own. I suppose that is for us to figure out.
You leave us hanging with a twist surprise ending and nothing left to do but review it.
I guess the jokes on us, isn't it?
Thanks for the thrill of the adventure we hope not to take!
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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I get it! One of those college experiments that you paid to experience. But why did you do it?
It is hard to understand why someone, anyone would pay to be locked up when thousands no millions are locked away by no choice of their own. I suppose that is for us to figure out.
You leave us hanging with a twist surprise ending and nothing left to do but review it.
I guess the jokes on us, isn't it?
Thanks for the thrill of the adventure we hope not to take!
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you Jesse for reviewing. Yes, it is the experience not everyone wants!
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is a wonderfully atmospheric piece of writing, gently implying what might be going on. There's no real sense of threat, but certainly an air of mystery. I enjoyed the ending reveal that this was an arranged experience. I work for the Prison Service here in the UK, and I know a couple of our former prisons do similar themed experiences.
Mike
Spag Notes:
[Ultra-picky] 'a couple of leaning basketball hoops, and some faded peeling paint marking the courts.' - I think this would be stronger without the 'and' because we've already had one earlier in the sentence.
'As twilight arrived we returned to our room' - I'd be inclined to a comma after 'arrived'
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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This is a wonderfully atmospheric piece of writing, gently implying what might be going on. There's no real sense of threat, but certainly an air of mystery. I enjoyed the ending reveal that this was an arranged experience. I work for the Prison Service here in the UK, and I know a couple of our former prisons do similar themed experiences.
Mike
Spag Notes:
[Ultra-picky] 'a couple of leaning basketball hoops, and some faded peeling paint marking the courts.' - I think this would be stronger without the 'and' because we've already had one earlier in the sentence.
'As twilight arrived we returned to our room' - I'd be inclined to a comma after 'arrived'
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Mike, for your super review and suggestions, which I think are great, and I have adopted them both.
Comment from lyenochka
You provided great details and descriptions. I was expecting some twist at the end to reveal what was off at the end. But instead of something "horror," it was a most logical reason. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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You provided great details and descriptions. I was expecting some twist at the end to reveal what was off at the end. But instead of something "horror," it was a most logical reason. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much! Great review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
you did a good job with this story you've created here. the reader knows where it's going to a degree but the voice in the telling is quite compelling and it unfolds well.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Hi there,
you did a good job with this story you've created here. the reader knows where it's going to a degree but the voice in the telling is quite compelling and it unfolds well.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your review.
