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The sperm donor, Leslie's story

Part II of IV

26 total reviews 
Comment from Fleedleflump
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I love that I can relax and just read your stories - I'm not spending the whole time looking for spag.

This was an entertaining continuation - plausible dialogue and reactions. I like that you explore different thinking about how payouts might affect things. Well written indeed.

Mike

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
    Mike, thank you for your kind comments. I hope you enjoy the final two parts as well. Terry.
Comment from MissMerri
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Such a creative and fun idea you have here. The story is well written and easy to follow. The dialogue is consistently well done and authentic and serves to move the story forward. I enjoyed this very much and look forward to the next part.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
    Thank you for reading. Part III is Wednesday. Terry.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
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Whoa! This is extremely exciting! Even though I have to admit that I missed the first one, so after I read this over twice, I realized that this was not going to be the same as skipping the directions to put a hammock together and if all fails, read the directions type of thing. So I found the first one, read it and realized what Sam, dirty dealing Super Lawyer was up to. This story is fun, has an interesting twist and a intriguing plot. Heck, if I'd known someone may pay their offspring later on,I might have gotten a sperm donor too. JK! I am truly enjoying this thrilling story and excited for what is to come next. Thanks Terry for the amazing story! See you in part 3.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Debi, thank you for the review and the six stars!!! This something totally different for me, I have enjoyed it. The next part will be posted Wednesday. Terry
Comment from nomi338
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Near the end of the story I started to suspect that the lawyer was the actual donor. I totally agree that the money should be more evenly distributed as no one in the family other than the mother did anything to earn the money in the first place. I could certainly see how there would or might create animosity among the siblings who did not inherit any money, especially since there was such a large amount of money involved.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Thank you for reading. This is a new type of writing for me, it has been fun. The next part will post on Wednesday and the final on Sunday. Terry.
Comment from Susan Newell
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Terry,

Excellent continuation of the story. I will be curious to see how you handle Linda and Susan's cash donations. What? I thought Sam told Leslie he had never married. Did I misremember?

Sue

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Sue, it starts with Sam being alone after his wife of forty years died a couple of years back. LOL, I know it by heart at this point, thanks to you, no less. The next installment is Wednesday. Did you see in the notes of part one the shout-out to you? Terry.
reply by Susan Newell on 01-Aug-2022
    Yes, I did and I think I amended my review to acknowledge it. Thanks for the reminder about Sam.
Comment from karenina
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Alrighty then...

Now that I've gone back and read part I this all seems to be falling into place. Just what sort of place has my suspicious mind reeling...

Seems Leslie's husband has some serious (jealousy?) issues with Sam ~~ none so much that he wouldn't send Leslie back to renegotiate finances!

(I'm foreshadowing the kickback when/if it's revealed that Sam IS the perm donor!)

Leslie is a smart one. She questioned right away why Sam wouldn't have had to run that financial restructuring by "his client." Hmmm.

As in all good series, you've laid out many paths this can take!

As yet, unanswered: What are the odds each of Sam's girlfriends would have needed to utilize a sperm bank?

Another something behind door number three?

You're holding my interest and I'm quite curious to see how this all shakes out!

Onward, Terry! You've got the hang of this series thing!

Karenina


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Karenina, I love your review! Thank you. Hang on, go more to come. Terry.
reply by karenina on 01-Aug-2022
    Yay! It seems you have a way with ALL words! (smile)

    Karenina
Comment from Gunner Lil
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Great story. An easy read having a good pace and a very fine flow. Wonderful dialog. This reader enjoyed this work and wanted more.
Good luck and thank you.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, got two more coming, Wednesday and Sunday. Thanks for reading, Terry.
Comment from royowen
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It's an interesting dilemma to receive a large sum of money, for one child when you've got three, would be awkward, but Sam is a gracious man, but I guess that isn't the point, does money corrupt or not? Beautifully written Terry, you've pulled a goodie out of the bag, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Roy, thank you. We will see what happens to the next two Wednesday will be part III. This is very different for me, but I did have fun.Terry.
reply by royowen on 01-Aug-2022
    I can imagine, it?s a great theme, most imaginative
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I will accept the fact that this is a fiction story. Getting my head around it wasn't that easy, and to have an arbitration to divvy the gift was dangerous at best.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Tom, thanks for reading. We will see what happens. The next episode will post Wednesday. This is very different for me, but I have had fun. Thank you, Terry.
Comment from lyenochka
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I'm so glad you are continuing the story! It seems Leslie's husband is the real a-hole. I'm not sure why he's so hostile. Maybe he feels some inferiority complex. It was very nice of Sam to be so generous and flexible. I wonder who his wife is and if she knows about all decisions...

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Helen, thank you for reading. This is a very different effort on my part. We will see how it goes. You may not remember in part one, Sam was introduced as 76, alone, his wife of more than 40 years had died a couple of years back. The next part will be posted Wednesday.