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Comment from Brandon Clark
That was awesome! I think nearly every young guy had at least one teacher they lusted after, even if only momentarily. I really liked the dialogue and you going where most wouldn't go with the ending; makes it realistic!
Thanks for sharing your story!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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That was awesome! I think nearly every young guy had at least one teacher they lusted after, even if only momentarily. I really liked the dialogue and you going where most wouldn't go with the ending; makes it realistic!
Thanks for sharing your story!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Frank Malley
"Teacher's Pet" is a well written short short about sexual infatuation. The main male character's movement from bumbling freshman to a smooth lover man in four years is feasible, if improbable; the same goes for his former teacher's hot-to-trot interest in what had been a jail bait opp and a career ender until her admirer turned eighteen. The story weaves itself skillfully and includes hints that make its motivations clearer. This account is only really interested in sex, which sets the ceiling pretty low, and almost removes the possibility of surprise. But - attraction across the boundaries of law are always interesting to read, and if expanded can go almost anywhere.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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"Teacher's Pet" is a well written short short about sexual infatuation. The main male character's movement from bumbling freshman to a smooth lover man in four years is feasible, if improbable; the same goes for his former teacher's hot-to-trot interest in what had been a jail bait opp and a career ender until her admirer turned eighteen. The story weaves itself skillfully and includes hints that make its motivations clearer. This account is only really interested in sex, which sets the ceiling pretty low, and almost removes the possibility of surprise. But - attraction across the boundaries of law are always interesting to read, and if expanded can go almost anywhere.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from susand3022
Again??? Oh lor that's all I can think of to say! S*** Lancelot, you got me this time, I wasn't expecting the word 'again' at the end! Blew me away! And the stretch marks??? Does that mean the child downstairs isn't her husband's??? Am I reading too much into this??? Eeek!!!
Well done! Susan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Again??? Oh lor that's all I can think of to say! S*** Lancelot, you got me this time, I wasn't expecting the word 'again' at the end! Blew me away! And the stretch marks??? Does that mean the child downstairs isn't her husband's??? Am I reading too much into this??? Eeek!!!
Well done! Susan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Nope, you're reading it perfectly. That's exactly what you were supposed to wonder. Is the little girl from an affair? Who knows?
Thank you very much.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So, I'm left wondering about the word "again". I was under the impression that this was her first time with Alex, but she does mention that "lots of young boys have crushes on their teachers." My money is on the fact that teacher has made a habit of connecting with her students over the years.
Good thing her husband is preoccupied.
Nice write and congratulations on the win. This one was creative and I enjoyed that.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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So, I'm left wondering about the word "again". I was under the impression that this was her first time with Alex, but she does mention that "lots of young boys have crushes on their teachers." My money is on the fact that teacher has made a habit of connecting with her students over the years.
Good thing her husband is preoccupied.
Nice write and congratulations on the win. This one was creative and I enjoyed that.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Yes, she does say those things. That would be a safe bet. Maybe not habit, but this was definitely not her first time.
Thank you very much.
Comment from Spitfire
I don't know how I overlooked this when it was paying. It's a cool story. I can't blame Ms Walker. Appears her husband is more interested in football. I liked how you interspersed his shouting at the TV with her emotions in the shower.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I don't know how I overlooked this when it was paying. It's a cool story. I can't blame Ms Walker. Appears her husband is more interested in football. I liked how you interspersed his shouting at the TV with her emotions in the shower.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Lots of people skipped this one. The subject wasn't an easy one for FS.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Damn, Mr. L. it is obvious why this story won first place. You finally got an erotic piece to the winner's circle by being a bit more restrained presenting the erotic parts. The plot is well done and not rushed. It reads like a realistic encounter between a teacher and former student. The visual fit perfectly. Kudos for the deserved win. It is a great read.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Damn, Mr. L. it is obvious why this story won first place. You finally got an erotic piece to the winner's circle by being a bit more restrained presenting the erotic parts. The plot is well done and not rushed. It reads like a realistic encounter between a teacher and former student. The visual fit perfectly. Kudos for the deserved win. It is a great read.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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You are so right. I cut a lot out of this several times before the contest deadline. Then I was able to remove the warnings.
Thank you very much.
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You are welcome. With your writing chops if you did that more often you would be racking in the wins. I was telling a close friend about you last night and read one of your pieces to her. She just said DAMN and we both laughed. She too had to give you your props!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lancellot,
This is a well told story about a crush that didn't go away and may ruin three lives. I hope they don't see each other again for both their sakes and the family. Alex needs to move on and Mrs. Walker needs to go watch some football with her family.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
JOan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hi Lancellot,
This is a well told story about a crush that didn't go away and may ruin three lives. I hope they don't see each other again for both their sakes and the family. Alex needs to move on and Mrs. Walker needs to go watch some football with her family.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
JOan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
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You are most kindly welcome, Lancellot.
Joan
Comment from Contests
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a terrific piece of writing, where all the steamy action is underplayed and implied, yet comes across so clearly. Beautifully and extremely skillfully done. Kate xx
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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This is a terrific piece of writing, where all the steamy action is underplayed and implied, yet comes across so clearly. Beautifully and extremely skillfully done. Kate xx
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great story and I really loved it. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this one. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this great story. It was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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This is a great story and I really loved it. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this one. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this great story. It was a delight to read.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
