On an Evening Stroll
Lovers Dreams43 total reviews
Comment from Jennifer Keeley
This was interesting. I like how it was coming from the perspective of someone passing by on a stroll. It is a very realistic situation and the poem was in the moment-something that was just observed. I enjoyed how it brought back feelings for the onlooker and questioned the mind: should I tell them,etc. It reminded me of "no control" in this life, but live in the moment. Very creative and a nice read!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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This was interesting. I like how it was coming from the perspective of someone passing by on a stroll. It is a very realistic situation and the poem was in the moment-something that was just observed. I enjoyed how it brought back feelings for the onlooker and questioned the mind: should I tell them,etc. It reminded me of "no control" in this life, but live in the moment. Very creative and a nice read!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Jennifer for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A powerful, wistful, yet honest and truthful look at love. Before reality and life comes in, they deserves this moment to remember and cherish.
Best wishes
M6
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A powerful, wistful, yet honest and truthful look at love. Before reality and life comes in, they deserves this moment to remember and cherish.
Best wishes
M6
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Mary for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from leather
This poem remained on target from start to finish. The rhyming seemed effortless, and most people past middle age have seen this story play out in their own lives. I found the text a little distracting--it slowed me down trying to read the words despite all the fancy embellishments. Still, it is a stellar poem accompanied by a lovely image.
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This poem remained on target from start to finish. The rhyming seemed effortless, and most people past middle age have seen this story play out in their own lives. I found the text a little distracting--it slowed me down trying to read the words despite all the fancy embellishments. Still, it is a stellar poem accompanied by a lovely image.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the special stars. I agree, it was a little hard to read. I will probably avoid using the script fonts again.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
I've always had those moments being disappointed with the Lord that I had to go through some of the things Elaine and I have, but at least our kids have weathered what they needed to endure, but I realised it was the love in our lives that has endured all that. This is beautifully written, and a great testament to the goodness of God, and your ability to endure Janet, well done, blessings Roy
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I've always had those moments being disappointed with the Lord that I had to go through some of the things Elaine and I have, but at least our kids have weathered what they needed to endure, but I realised it was the love in our lives that has endured all that. This is beautifully written, and a great testament to the goodness of God, and your ability to endure Janet, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Roy for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the extra special stars. God's goodness will always prevail.
Blessings
Janet
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Well done Janet
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Janet.
-Thanks for the notes.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like how the verses seem to counter one another.
-You start with "youthful lovers" with their "youthful hopes and dreams."
-Then you follow it with wanting to warn them about pitfalls.
-That is followed by good realizations if you were to do those things.
-And as you indicated, it led to to the wishful concluding verse.
-Very well done. You have a way with capturing emotions.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation, Janet.
-Thanks for the notes.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like how the verses seem to counter one another.
-You start with "youthful lovers" with their "youthful hopes and dreams."
-Then you follow it with wanting to warn them about pitfalls.
-That is followed by good realizations if you were to do those things.
-And as you indicated, it led to to the wishful concluding verse.
-Very well done. You have a way with capturing emotions.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Pam for your thoughtful and encouraging review. My train of thought took me to these levels and the wistful and yet powerful emotions. Thank you for noticing them.
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome, Janet. You did a great job with the poem.
Comment from karenina
I recently went to a dear nephew's wedding. I was struck by the twinkle in their eye and wondered how they'd stand the test of time...
Love is such a journey! Never all sunshine and rainbows and rarely all storms--but one must get through all of that and learn to accept our partner may not always be on the same page...
It's nice to reminisce. We learn to appreciate those shiny golden days when all was new!
I can appreciate the melancholy. It's best, I think, to allow them their fantasy...
Reality washes over all of us soon enough!
A meaningful poem here, that whispered to the young woman I was once and the older (perhaps wiser? person I have become.
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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I recently went to a dear nephew's wedding. I was struck by the twinkle in their eye and wondered how they'd stand the test of time...
Love is such a journey! Never all sunshine and rainbows and rarely all storms--but one must get through all of that and learn to accept our partner may not always be on the same page...
It's nice to reminisce. We learn to appreciate those shiny golden days when all was new!
I can appreciate the melancholy. It's best, I think, to allow them their fantasy...
Reality washes over all of us soon enough!
A meaningful poem here, that whispered to the young woman I was once and the older (perhaps wiser? person I have become.
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Karenina for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Yes, I too hope as we get older that we become wiser and I hope that for them as well.
Blessings
Janet
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Indeed...
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love that mischief and tomfoolery bring offspring - great line:-)
What a sweet yet pensive poem of life and dreams and the heartache and treasure that comes to us all.
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I love that mischief and tomfoolery bring offspring - great line:-)
What a sweet yet pensive poem of life and dreams and the heartache and treasure that comes to us all.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Pam for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I loved that line but wasn't sure it would play well. Kind of "old time" expressions.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi Janet,
A beautiful recollection triggered by the sight of young love. Should you tell them of life turmoil or wait for them to realize their days? This is beautifully written, and I loved the read. Best, JohnC
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Hi Janet,
A beautiful recollection triggered by the sight of young love. Should you tell them of life turmoil or wait for them to realize their days? This is beautifully written, and I loved the read. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the extra special stars.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Deniz22
Sweetly melancholy and honest, the experienced wish the dreamers the best, but understand there will be tests. Lessons learned through failure and new starts make for a understanding heart, as you so clearly express in this thoughtful piece.
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Sweetly melancholy and honest, the experienced wish the dreamers the best, but understand there will be tests. Lessons learned through failure and new starts make for a understanding heart, as you so clearly express in this thoughtful piece.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you Dennis for your thoughtful and encouraging review and the special stars.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem expresses the thoughts of a mature person who has lived a life of many varied experiences. Do you try to teach what you've learned in an effort to spare hardships? No. Young people have no frame of reference, and no way of understanding things that have not happened. Your poem is realistic and thought provoking. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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This poem expresses the thoughts of a mature person who has lived a life of many varied experiences. Do you try to teach what you've learned in an effort to spare hardships? No. Young people have no frame of reference, and no way of understanding things that have not happened. Your poem is realistic and thought provoking. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
