On an Evening Stroll
Lovers Dreams43 total reviews
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this verse very much!
It tells a complete story.
From the elation of a new love, to the shiny newness wearing off and ending with the fond memories that will last a lifetime.
The rhymes work well without force and create a metre that is smooth as silk.
It's funny how our mind starts with one muse and then shifts to another. I love it whee that happens, it means we're alive and in the moment!!!
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this verse very much!
It tells a complete story.
From the elation of a new love, to the shiny newness wearing off and ending with the fond memories that will last a lifetime.
The rhymes work well without force and create a metre that is smooth as silk.
It's funny how our mind starts with one muse and then shifts to another. I love it whee that happens, it means we're alive and in the moment!!!
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you KL for your kind review and encouraging comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful even if melancholic as it's really a slice of life you have given us in this poem. While at the "sunset" of our lives, we can wish to protect the young couple from all life's hardships but it's in the working through the problems that they will grow.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Beautiful even if melancholic as it's really a slice of life you have given us in this poem. While at the "sunset" of our lives, we can wish to protect the young couple from all life's hardships but it's in the working through the problems that they will grow.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging comments. We do want to protect our children from life's hardship but you're right, it's the working through the problems that they will grow.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gloria ....
I love everything about your poem. Starting with the artwork that is most fetching to me, and then the finely metred and rhymed journey through emotions, as changes in life always bring.
So true we must all learn our way through our choices, and in the end most often it works out fine.
A little envy for youth and wonderful times gone forever is perfectly human.
I enjoyed reading this very much. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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I love everything about your poem. Starting with the artwork that is most fetching to me, and then the finely metred and rhymed journey through emotions, as changes in life always bring.
So true we must all learn our way through our choices, and in the end most often it works out fine.
A little envy for youth and wonderful times gone forever is perfectly human.
I enjoyed reading this very much. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you Gloria for your kind review, encouraging comments and special stars.
I too envy the youth and their life's journey ahead of them and yet, I really don't want to do it all again. (smile)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You certainly have opened a can of whoop... melancholy I mean. Always nice to read works of yours. Congrats to the grandson. Challenges in life are meant to strengthen one another when married. Genetically we differ, so it would be sound advice to be aware, not all will be a bed of roses, and by the way whoever said that more than likely never slept on such a bed.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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You certainly have opened a can of whoop... melancholy I mean. Always nice to read works of yours. Congrats to the grandson. Challenges in life are meant to strengthen one another when married. Genetically we differ, so it would be sound advice to be aware, not all will be a bed of roses, and by the way whoever said that more than likely never slept on such a bed.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you Tom for your fun review and encouraging comments. Challenges and adversities do strengthen us. Sometimes I could do with that bed of roses until like you I realize, whoever said that never slept on such a bed. (smile)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nicely done, Janet. You have made me think about the last sixty plus years that my wife and I have been together. Thank God that the good times far outweigh the bad.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Very nicely done, Janet. You have made me think about the last sixty plus years that my wife and I have been together. Thank God that the good times far outweigh the bad.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you Paul for your kind review and encouraging comments. Like you, I'm thankful that the good times far outweigh the bad.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from rspoet
Hello Janet,
Well, where ever it came from, you should visit there often.
This is a marvelous poem with excellent rhymes and meter,
and a wonderful theme.
I agree, let them dream, for dreams oft do come true.
I love that last line too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hello Janet,
Well, where ever it came from, you should visit there often.
This is a marvelous poem with excellent rhymes and meter,
and a wonderful theme.
I agree, let them dream, for dreams oft do come true.
I love that last line too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you Robert for your kind review, encouraging comments and special stars. I'm glad you liked that last line. I was really feeling in need of some comfort when I finished this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A powerful commentary on watching young lovers on a beach and reflecting on the past with all its heartaches and disappointments and wanting to give them advice as they are just starting their love affair.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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A powerful commentary on watching young lovers on a beach and reflecting on the past with all its heartaches and disappointments and wanting to give them advice as they are just starting their love affair.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thank you Jake for the thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from LovnPeace
It's good to remember and melancholy is nice. Janet to you and yours, too. It sounds like it is happy memories. Wishing your grandson all happiness. Blessings Dear Janet to you and yours. Barbara
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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It's good to remember and melancholy is nice. Janet to you and yours, too. It sounds like it is happy memories. Wishing your grandson all happiness. Blessings Dear Janet to you and yours. Barbara
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thank you Barbara for the thoughtful and encouraging review. And yes, mostly they are happy memories.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Janet,
quite a journey... the beauty you paint with words. Beginnings, the dreams lovers share. But oh how life changes as reality kicks in?
This story went from so beautiful and promising to woe within a heartbeat.
Reading you notes made it more apparent to certain wording of 'them' and 'their' within your composition.
And yes, melancholy it was, but it was a beautiful read all the same.
Loved the verse with the playful use of tomfoolery and mischief... reflecting back to a time when you experienced the feeling and joy of such an emotion.
I enjoyed reading your poem Janet, well done.
With our thoughts we create...
time's echo.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hi Janet,
quite a journey... the beauty you paint with words. Beginnings, the dreams lovers share. But oh how life changes as reality kicks in?
This story went from so beautiful and promising to woe within a heartbeat.
Reading you notes made it more apparent to certain wording of 'them' and 'their' within your composition.
And yes, melancholy it was, but it was a beautiful read all the same.
Loved the verse with the playful use of tomfoolery and mischief... reflecting back to a time when you experienced the feeling and joy of such an emotion.
I enjoyed reading your poem Janet, well done.
With our thoughts we create...
time's echo.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
Thank you Jumbo for this lovely review and for appreciating my mischief and tomfoolery line. I wasn't sure it would work , but it seem to fit.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Regina Elliott
A really heartfelt and touching
poem. Most of us take trips
down the lane of memories,
and recall both the good and
not so good. I also gaze at
couples that walk down the
street. Some are younger,
some older. I'm 65, my
husband died 2 years ago at
59. It was a sudden and
unexpected death. Life can
throw us some fast and
hard pitches. This is a lovely
poem. Thank you for penning
it. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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A really heartfelt and touching
poem. Most of us take trips
down the lane of memories,
and recall both the good and
not so good. I also gaze at
couples that walk down the
street. Some are younger,
some older. I'm 65, my
husband died 2 years ago at
59. It was a sudden and
unexpected death. Life can
throw us some fast and
hard pitches. This is a lovely
poem. Thank you for penning
it. Blessings ~
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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I am so sorry for your loss Regina. I would be lost with my husband. He is 82 but in excellent health. Still, tomorrow is promised to know one.
Thank you for this lovely review.
Blessings
Janet
