Jessica's Story
A story about my granddaughter.39 total reviews
Comment from Michaela Moore
What a sweet and loving story about a special relationship. My favorite part is the walk and talk after your husband died, so precious and rings so true. I bet it was difficult having to tell her it was best for her to live at her home. What a blessing and a beautiful way to use writing to tell about you two.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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What a sweet and loving story about a special relationship. My favorite part is the walk and talk after your husband died, so precious and rings so true. I bet it was difficult having to tell her it was best for her to live at her home. What a blessing and a beautiful way to use writing to tell about you two.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you Michaela for your kind words. Spending time with Jessica helped me heal. I appreciate your support.
Comment from MissMerri
I loved so many things about this story. First of all, it was posted with a beautiful portrait of a darling little girl, and was completely free of typos or spag which makes the reading experience so much more enjoyable. Secondly, the story is sweet and full of love with a generous splash of wisdom thrown in. Thirdly, the story is told with great skill and charm. I could find no way to make it better. You may have my last six of the week. This story deserves it. MM
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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I loved so many things about this story. First of all, it was posted with a beautiful portrait of a darling little girl, and was completely free of typos or spag which makes the reading experience so much more enjoyable. Secondly, the story is sweet and full of love with a generous splash of wisdom thrown in. Thirdly, the story is told with great skill and charm. I could find no way to make it better. You may have my last six of the week. This story deserves it. MM
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much MissMerri, I appreciate your kind words. It is wonderful to belong to a writing group with great help and support. Sarah
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sarah,
firstly, congratulations on your very first post on FS!
As I read, I notice some spacing issues... over spacing between words here and there. Also a line that has dropped to the next line...
On my next visit to Maryland, Jessica asked if... then it drops down to the next line, of course... we could get our tennis shoes 'on' and take a walk. ... it should be the same line.
In the same paragraph "How do you go to heaven if you get buried in the ground?" And. (capital letter) "How deep is the hole?" Or " How do you go to heaven if you get buried in the ground? And, how deep is the hole?"
Now that out of the way. What a sweet story, I loved reading this, it kept me in the entire way. The love connection is just beautiful, and bring memories flooding in of my closeness to my Grandmother.
It's a beautiful write, just needs to be tidied up a tad... and only a editing typo, but the story, beautiful!
With our thoughts we create...
bonded connection.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Hi Sarah,
firstly, congratulations on your very first post on FS!
As I read, I notice some spacing issues... over spacing between words here and there. Also a line that has dropped to the next line...
On my next visit to Maryland, Jessica asked if... then it drops down to the next line, of course... we could get our tennis shoes 'on' and take a walk. ... it should be the same line.
In the same paragraph "How do you go to heaven if you get buried in the ground?" And. (capital letter) "How deep is the hole?" Or " How do you go to heaven if you get buried in the ground? And, how deep is the hole?"
Now that out of the way. What a sweet story, I loved reading this, it kept me in the entire way. The love connection is just beautiful, and bring memories flooding in of my closeness to my Grandmother.
It's a beautiful write, just needs to be tidied up a tad... and only a editing typo, but the story, beautiful!
With our thoughts we create...
bonded connection.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you James for your kind words. I appreciate your help and support! I am a novice writer and I enjoy earning. Sarah
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Sarah. What a heartwarming story you have written for your first post. The slightest cry sounded like "Hello Grandma!" to you is such a fine way of expressing your love.
Yes keeping one's peace is best in many situations and this one of those.
Very, very well done. Welcome to FanStory. I think you will very much enjoy your time here. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Hi Sarah. What a heartwarming story you have written for your first post. The slightest cry sounded like "Hello Grandma!" to you is such a fine way of expressing your love.
Yes keeping one's peace is best in many situations and this one of those.
Very, very well done. Welcome to FanStory. I think you will very much enjoy your time here. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much Gloria for your kind words. I appreciate your help and support. I am happy to be in a group like this one. Sarah
Comment from royowen
I loved your story, and your right, grandchildren adds a dimension to love that's hard to describe to the uninitiated, but let them find out, it is a treasure that is a rare privilege, most beautifully written my friend, welcome, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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I loved your story, and your right, grandchildren adds a dimension to love that's hard to describe to the uninitiated, but let them find out, it is a treasure that is a rare privilege, most beautifully written my friend, welcome, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thanks Roy. I appreciate your kind words. I understand that you are Australian. My husband and I lived in Melbourne - Kew in the late 80s. We loved your country and would have retired there except our family was in the US. Again, thanks. Sarah Robin
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Good to meet you Sarah, we live in Adelaide, although I?ve been to Melbourne several times.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I enjoyed reading this lovely story about you granddaughter, Sarah. You don't say if the picture is an actual one of her, but she sounds beautiful. It's so nice you have been able to create such a bond with her, even if you see her so infrequently. Thanks for sharing. And congratulation for reaching a Milestone.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed reading this lovely story about you granddaughter, Sarah. You don't say if the picture is an actual one of her, but she sounds beautiful. It's so nice you have been able to create such a bond with her, even if you see her so infrequently. Thanks for sharing. And congratulation for reaching a Milestone.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you Judy for your kind words. This is not her actual picture, but very similar to the way she looked. I am so thrilled to be in your group with help and support for my writing. Sarah
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You are very welcome, Sarah. I'm glad to make a new connection.
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Hi Judy,I will look forward to reading some of your work also! Sarah
Comment from estory
You have a nice little post here that articulates that love that only a grandmother can have for a little girl. That special bond between you comes through loud and clear through these detailed scenes that illustrate so much of not only her personality, but yours, and your shared sensibility and sensitivity. That scene in which she seems a bit uncertain since the birth of her brother was very telling of the insecurity young children can feel when someone else crowds in on their space, and also of your reaction and how you reassured her. Nice piece. estory
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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You have a nice little post here that articulates that love that only a grandmother can have for a little girl. That special bond between you comes through loud and clear through these detailed scenes that illustrate so much of not only her personality, but yours, and your shared sensibility and sensitivity. That scene in which she seems a bit uncertain since the birth of her brother was very telling of the insecurity young children can feel when someone else crowds in on their space, and also of your reaction and how you reassured her. Nice piece. estory
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you estory for your kind words. I truiy appreciate your support. I look forward to reading some of your work Sarah
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a beautiful story, Sarah. You reminded me of when my lovely granddaughter had a baby brother. I lived in Spain at the time and came home to England to visit my new grandson. When I went into their lounge, my son was sitting with my grandson on his lap, looking so proud, but my granddaughter was looking at me, and the first thing I did was open my arms wide and asked her for a cuddle. The change in her was immediate. Love that girl so much. That was 15 years ago. They never forget. You did the right thing, it's so easy to get it wrong though. I'm sorry you lost your husband in the time. This was such a lovely, beautifully written story, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Welcome to Fanstory! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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What a beautiful story, Sarah. You reminded me of when my lovely granddaughter had a baby brother. I lived in Spain at the time and came home to England to visit my new grandson. When I went into their lounge, my son was sitting with my grandson on his lap, looking so proud, but my granddaughter was looking at me, and the first thing I did was open my arms wide and asked her for a cuddle. The change in her was immediate. Love that girl so much. That was 15 years ago. They never forget. You did the right thing, it's so easy to get it wrong though. I'm sorry you lost your husband in the time. This was such a lovely, beautifully written story, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Welcome to Fanstory! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you sandramitchell for your kind words. I appreciate your support. The time I spent with my grands helped me with the healing. Hugs, Sarah
Comment from Faith Williams
Congratulations on your first post! What a wonderful story! I could feel your love for your granddaughter shine through your words and how special the bond is between the two of you.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Congratulations on your first post! What a wonderful story! I could feel your love for your granddaughter shine through your words and how special the bond is between the two of you.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Faith for your kind words. I appreciate your support and look forward to reading some of your writing.
Comment from miajaffri
You have written a lovely story of the bond between you and your beautiful granddaughter, Jessica. As I read, that feeling of love came through more and more with each paragraph. Jessica had a way of saying the right words that could melt your heart. However, as a good grandma you stood firm with your answers that she would not live with you. I'm sure that pleased your son.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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You have written a lovely story of the bond between you and your beautiful granddaughter, Jessica. As I read, that feeling of love came through more and more with each paragraph. Jessica had a way of saying the right words that could melt your heart. However, as a good grandma you stood firm with your answers that she would not live with you. I'm sure that pleased your son.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you miajaffri for your kind words. It is nice to be in a group with good support and help. Sarah
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Thank you miajaffri for your kind words. I appreciate your support and help. The words came easy since being a grandparent is big part of who I am. Sarah
