Jessica's Story
A story about my granddaughter.39 total reviews
Comment from Regina Elliott
I wish I hadn't run out of
6 stars this past Wednesday.
This is a 6 star write. You've
written a sensitive and precious story about your
little granddaughter. My late
husband passed suddenly
from a pulmonary embolism
two years ago. After his
funeral I moved in with my
daughter and her family.
I have two grandchildren I
love to be around. Your
love for your family is
very touching. You've written
this so eloquently. Have a
serene weekend and many
blessings to you. ~
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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I wish I hadn't run out of
6 stars this past Wednesday.
This is a 6 star write. You've
written a sensitive and precious story about your
little granddaughter. My late
husband passed suddenly
from a pulmonary embolism
two years ago. After his
funeral I moved in with my
daughter and her family.
I have two grandchildren I
love to be around. Your
love for your family is
very touching. You've written
this so eloquently. Have a
serene weekend and many
blessings to you. ~
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate your support and help. Blessings to you also.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sarah Robin,
"The circle of love is complete." Wow!
It's a nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction: SPONTANEOUS out flow of pure emotions; CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme wording, depicting divine bond between Grandma and Jessica.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the story.
PERFECT in all respects!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Hello Sarah Robin,
"The circle of love is complete." Wow!
It's a nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction: SPONTANEOUS out flow of pure emotions; CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme wording, depicting divine bond between Grandma and Jessica.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the story.
PERFECT in all respects!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much RPSaxena for your kind words. I appreciate your support and help. I am just a novice writer and am still learning.
Sarah
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Sarah, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a very touching write Sarah and you touched my heart with your words. I also have beautiful Grandchildren and they also ask innocent questions, your story is endearing and welcome to Fanstory I can see your posts being popular with others, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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This is a very touching write Sarah and you touched my heart with your words. I also have beautiful Grandchildren and they also ask innocent questions, your story is endearing and welcome to Fanstory I can see your posts being popular with others, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate your kind words and I am happy to be in a group that support and help each other. I will be looking for some of your writings also.
Comment from joann r romei
This was a wonderful tribute to your granddaughter, I hope you get to see your family more often, perhaps your visits can be longer each time, lol, all the best.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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This was a wonderful tribute to your granddaughter, I hope you get to see your family more often, perhaps your visits can be longer each time, lol, all the best.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Joann for your kind words. I appreciate being in a group who support and help each other.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Don't used of it, six stars are gifted grudgingly, not because the writing doesn't deserve it, but that we're only allotted so few.
Your 'Jessica's Story' was very well written, error-free as far as I could tell. And you told it beautifully. The story flowed nicely and the dialogue was credible. Good work.
God bless you.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Don't used of it, six stars are gifted grudgingly, not because the writing doesn't deserve it, but that we're only allotted so few.
Your 'Jessica's Story' was very well written, error-free as far as I could tell. And you told it beautifully. The story flowed nicely and the dialogue was credible. Good work.
God bless you.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Wayne for your kind words. I am a novice at writing and appreciate any help you give me.
Comment from amahra
Your story is absolutely beautiful. I loved every minute of reading about this lovely granddaughter with the chocolate eyes. I loved the questions she asked and the special way grandmother handled things she may not understand about her dad living with her grandmother. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Your story is absolutely beautiful. I loved every minute of reading about this lovely granddaughter with the chocolate eyes. I loved the questions she asked and the special way grandmother handled things she may not understand about her dad living with her grandmother. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments. That is my first post and I am excited to be with writers who support and help you.
Comment from Tpa
Excellent story. Smooth writing with a gentle pace, showing love and compassion for each generation.
Welcome to Fan story and hope to read more of your work.
SUGGESTION: OMIT BROWN EYES
just go into chocolate.
wish you well.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Excellent story. Smooth writing with a gentle pace, showing love and compassion for each generation.
Welcome to Fan story and hope to read more of your work.
SUGGESTION: OMIT BROWN EYES
just go into chocolate.
wish you well.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you TPA. I truly appreciate your comments. This is my first piece. I still have a lot to learn!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your first milestone. I enjoyed reading. I do understand. Being a grandma is the best thing that's ever happened. I have seven grandchildren. The closest one lives 13 hours away.
I told her that I had two little brothers and I shared some funny stories of life with her now grown uncles. (omit 'that' & comma after 'brothers')
We both agreed that our hearts were big enough to love others. (omit 'that')
Jess asked.her dad if he had lived at my house when he was a little boy. (omit period after 'asked' and add a space)
My son and I have a conspiracy that he will not tell her that life wasn't as wonderful as she thinks. (omit the second 'that')
He knows that some day he will have grands and will be rewarded for his silence (omit 'that')
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Congratulations on your first milestone. I enjoyed reading. I do understand. Being a grandma is the best thing that's ever happened. I have seven grandchildren. The closest one lives 13 hours away.
I told her that I had two little brothers and I shared some funny stories of life with her now grown uncles. (omit 'that' & comma after 'brothers')
We both agreed that our hearts were big enough to love others. (omit 'that')
Jess asked.her dad if he had lived at my house when he was a little boy. (omit period after 'asked' and add a space)
My son and I have a conspiracy that he will not tell her that life wasn't as wonderful as she thinks. (omit the second 'that')
He knows that some day he will have grands and will be rewarded for his silence (omit 'that')
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Barbara for your comments. I appreciate all the help I can get. Again, thanks for the time you spent in helping me.
Comment from evilynne
Your story speaks volumes about your love for your granddaughter. You sound like a wonderful grandma! The piece is quite well written, but I don't have a six left at this time. Evi
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Your story speaks volumes about your love for your granddaughter. You sound like a wonderful grandma! The piece is quite well written, but I don't have a six left at this time. Evi
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Evi. I appreciate your comments. It is exciting for me to be with a group of writers who support and help you. Can't wait to read some of your work!
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely story, written with emotion and wisdom, particularly in understanding what lay behind her desire to live with you and remain as your special one. (You should perhaps adjust it to the category of Non-fiction, and Biographical.) Welcome to FS and congratulations on your first post - a very good start.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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A lovely story, written with emotion and wisdom, particularly in understanding what lay behind her desire to live with you and remain as your special one. (You should perhaps adjust it to the category of Non-fiction, and Biographical.) Welcome to FS and congratulations on your first post - a very good start.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you Wendy. I appreciate your comments. I am still learning the ropes! All help is welcome.
