Misunderstood
Contest Entry7 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
I enjoyed this poem and found it encouraging, it can be used for anyone at any time in their life for self motivation. I did not notice any errors, and congratulations.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this poem and found it encouraging, it can be used for anyone at any time in their life for self motivation. I did not notice any errors, and congratulations.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
Perseverance is key and your piece shows determination and self-belief, as do your notes. Success comes with setting realistic goals and working steadily towards them. Best wishes for your contest entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Perseverance is key and your piece shows determination and self-belief, as do your notes. Success comes with setting realistic goals and working steadily towards them. Best wishes for your contest entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad you found happiness in your life and gained some self esteem to do well and be successful, this is an indulgent write about your own journey, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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I am glad you found happiness in your life and gained some self esteem to do well and be successful, this is an indulgent write about your own journey, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Erica Ruth
Yes! This is a great example of a letter to your younger self. No matter how different, unique, good-looking, successful, or popular someone may be, at one time or another they have doubted their selves.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Yes! This is a great example of a letter to your younger self. No matter how different, unique, good-looking, successful, or popular someone may be, at one time or another they have doubted their selves.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to this contest. Although you were misunderstood, you are still smiling in the photo. It may be a fake smile, but you look happy. I am glad you have found your way and enjoy where you are now. By you using cursive print, I think the font size needs to be larger to ensure the readers can grasp every word. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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This is a good entry to this contest. Although you were misunderstood, you are still smiling in the photo. It may be a fake smile, but you look happy. I am glad you have found your way and enjoy where you are now. By you using cursive print, I think the font size needs to be larger to ensure the readers can grasp every word. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2022
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Thank you! I have made the font bigger. Does it read better now, and will the readers grasp every word? Please check! Thank you for your Help! God bless you!
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For sure they will see it clearly and grasp it now. you could even go one size down. It's a good entry because for me poetry needs to be honest.
Comment from lancellot
I'm going to be honest. This is choppy. I think it is free verse but it could be a smoother read. Your sentence structures aren't correct. You also should increase the font size. Oh, and this is Important: change the photo. Even though it is a younger you, we can still tell who you are, even without the hat.
notes:
Several years later you would
be satisfied,
you glory would come,
if you played the waiting game.
- this line begins in the future or present but then shifts at the end.
- also: you glory would come.
- your glory would come.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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I'm going to be honest. This is choppy. I think it is free verse but it could be a smoother read. Your sentence structures aren't correct. You also should increase the font size. Oh, and this is Important: change the photo. Even though it is a younger you, we can still tell who you are, even without the hat.
notes:
Several years later you would
be satisfied,
you glory would come,
if you played the waiting game.
- this line begins in the future or present but then shifts at the end.
- also: you glory would come.
- your glory would come.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you! But I disagree with you! You should be polite.
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I would ask, what did I say that was impolite, but I know you will not answer.
I tried. Good luck to you.
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Thank you for your help! You have been helpful. Happy writing!
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It is in the rules that the photo has to be in this contest. It is tated. Please read the rules of the contest. I hope you understand. It is great that you are helping me, my friend! It is the correct picture. Happy writing and good luck in your writing works!
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Okay, my friend! I have changed the font size. I fixed the mistakes. Is it better now for a five stars rating? Please check! Happy writing! You write awesome!
Comment from Frank Malley
"Little Me Misunderstood" is a poem that reassures some one who is uncertain that he or she will be able to succeed in life. The poem makes statements confidently about how well the individual addressed will finally thrive in life. It was only by reading the author's notes that I understood that this is a poem that looks back on his own life, as if he could offer himself these reassurances. The author doesn't mention how or why he is successful; he only states that he is. The big, unanswered question is: how'd you do that? At least some hints - was it hard work? Was it friendships? Learning? Love? Apparently this individual was going to be a successful human in the same way as a bicycle is a successful bike; if it can be what it is, it's complete.
I've reread the poem. It is hard tell from memory what has been changed - it still seems to me that your advice to your earlier self is simply to be confident.
Of course, it is impossible to change one's past. So actually, this advice has to be for yourself NOW, or to some younger, unconfident person you wish to assist. My advice to younger, uncertain people would be to make friends; to talk with them and develop support systems that can buoy you up in hard times; to find partnership, if you wish, someone with whom you can find love and closeness. How would a poem express this? I don't know how to tell you that other than to write one. It will be brief, because it's not my choice to do this at this moment; I am doing it to give you an example, because it's clear you desire to write good poetry. Here goes:
I tell the me I was: you must be strong/ To find within yourself a better song/ To search for parts of you that seek adventure;/ to put aside the fears and find instead/ An adventurous self/ who with love and friendships makes his course/ through life's tossing seas in a ship/ he has built with strength and love.
I don't know if this is useful to you. It's yours to use as you choose. The poem you've edited is still a four. Frank
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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"Little Me Misunderstood" is a poem that reassures some one who is uncertain that he or she will be able to succeed in life. The poem makes statements confidently about how well the individual addressed will finally thrive in life. It was only by reading the author's notes that I understood that this is a poem that looks back on his own life, as if he could offer himself these reassurances. The author doesn't mention how or why he is successful; he only states that he is. The big, unanswered question is: how'd you do that? At least some hints - was it hard work? Was it friendships? Learning? Love? Apparently this individual was going to be a successful human in the same way as a bicycle is a successful bike; if it can be what it is, it's complete.
I've reread the poem. It is hard tell from memory what has been changed - it still seems to me that your advice to your earlier self is simply to be confident.
Of course, it is impossible to change one's past. So actually, this advice has to be for yourself NOW, or to some younger, unconfident person you wish to assist. My advice to younger, uncertain people would be to make friends; to talk with them and develop support systems that can buoy you up in hard times; to find partnership, if you wish, someone with whom you can find love and closeness. How would a poem express this? I don't know how to tell you that other than to write one. It will be brief, because it's not my choice to do this at this moment; I am doing it to give you an example, because it's clear you desire to write good poetry. Here goes:
I tell the me I was: you must be strong/ To find within yourself a better song/ To search for parts of you that seek adventure;/ to put aside the fears and find instead/ An adventurous self/ who with love and friendships makes his course/ through life's tossing seas in a ship/ he has built with strength and love.
I don't know if this is useful to you. It's yours to use as you choose. The poem you've edited is still a four. Frank
Comment Written 05-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2022
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Thank you! I did what you told me to do. Read the author notes again. Is it good enough for a five stars rating? Please check!
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Thank you for your honesty in reviewing. I will try to improve my writing. Now I know what my post needs work on.
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I have fixed the mistakes. The font is much bigger Is it better now for a five stars rating? Please check!
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You need to read all the way down my last response before this one. Read past the poem I wrote as a quick example. Read more poets, from all over the history of the art. All the best. Frank
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Thank you for your advice. I will read poetry from other favorite poets. I will try to get better at poetry. I am a work in progress.
