The Return
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Comment from Begin Again
Of course, I must give you a six.... for the author, for the story, and for taking me out of my sense of doom for a moment. I simply love this story and how you carry us to a place we've never been but can feel as if we are there. It's awesome. On to the next chapter...
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Of course, I must give you a six.... for the author, for the story, and for taking me out of my sense of doom for a moment. I simply love this story and how you carry us to a place we've never been but can feel as if we are there. It's awesome. On to the next chapter...
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Goodness me, Carol, you have been reading a lot today! Thank you so very much for this lovely review, I loved what you said about it carrying you to a place you've never been to and feel as if you were... What greater compliment could you possibly give me? Thank you! Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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The story and YOU were exactly what I needed this morning. Thank you!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Another good chapter here. There's a nice progression through from the anguish, the lovely memory of the first meeting to the trepidation come the end part.
Determined to find out, he began to weave his way through the other guests. He had barely made it half-way across the room when she turned. Their eyes locked. His breath - the first part of this paragraph appears to not be in bold, or a slightly different font colour to the rest.
'Parhaps I should start where I've been told it all began. - Perhaps?
'Saying sorry, is simply not enough- not sure you need the comma after sorry.
Perhaps Miles could mention that this is my first vistit, - visit?
All the best
G
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Hi Sandra,
Another good chapter here. There's a nice progression through from the anguish, the lovely memory of the first meeting to the trepidation come the end part.
Determined to find out, he began to weave his way through the other guests. He had barely made it half-way across the room when she turned. Their eyes locked. His breath - the first part of this paragraph appears to not be in bold, or a slightly different font colour to the rest.
'Parhaps I should start where I've been told it all began. - Perhaps?
'Saying sorry, is simply not enough- not sure you need the comma after sorry.
Perhaps Miles could mention that this is my first vistit, - visit?
All the best
G
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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And another great review picking up my terrible spelling errors! I've made the corrections. Thanks so much for all of this, my friend. It's a shame I can't nominate you for every chapter!! I'm glad you liked this one. Warm hugs, my wonderful friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Sandra,
This is a great installment to your story. I especially noticed how with deftness you get into your character's heads--what they are thinking and feeling. Your story has wonderful devices, like Meg and Margot.
I really enjoyed reading it.
Congratulations on number 1 story. It is well-deserved.
Good luck with all your writing,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Sandra,
This is a great installment to your story. I especially noticed how with deftness you get into your character's heads--what they are thinking and feeling. Your story has wonderful devices, like Meg and Margot.
I really enjoyed reading it.
Congratulations on number 1 story. It is well-deserved.
Good luck with all your writing,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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I like getting into people's heads, especially my husbands! Lol. Actually, you can add so much more information doing it that way, it's a great little tool. I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story, Cindy. I'm quickly coming to the end now. 3 chapters I think will do it. Thanks again, my friend, you really are so encouraging. Warm hugs Sandra xxx
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You?re welcome, Sandra. 😊
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A very suspenseful chapter. I found myself thinking about Meg's past as Margot arrived at the Crawley's house. Bessie sure plays an invisible ghost well. You'd think that Margot wouldn't want to lose her friend's ideas and thoughts, as she portrays Meg throughout these chapters.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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A very suspenseful chapter. I found myself thinking about Meg's past as Margot arrived at the Crawley's house. Bessie sure plays an invisible ghost well. You'd think that Margot wouldn't want to lose her friend's ideas and thoughts, as she portrays Meg throughout these chapters.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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You're right, Rosemary. Margot has benefited a lot having Bessie with her. She will be there right up until all is well again. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter, my friend. Thank you! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great chapter, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. You gave
reader great info to carry the story. It seems as though the end
is getting closer. It'll be interesting to find out what happens
when Meg returns to her time. You did a great job showcasing
Miles' thoughts when he first saw Meg. I liked the font and the
way they read--very descriptive. The wedding of Miles' parents
played a huge role in the whole story. I liked how you brought
that up again. Meg's locket seemed to play a big role here, too--
maybe there's more in store about it. The way you led readers
to Meg wanting to visit the home was great. I believed there
will be many new clues uncovered in the process.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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This is a great chapter, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. You gave
reader great info to carry the story. It seems as though the end
is getting closer. It'll be interesting to find out what happens
when Meg returns to her time. You did a great job showcasing
Miles' thoughts when he first saw Meg. I liked the font and the
way they read--very descriptive. The wedding of Miles' parents
played a huge role in the whole story. I liked how you brought
that up again. Meg's locket seemed to play a big role here, too--
maybe there's more in store about it. The way you led readers
to Meg wanting to visit the home was great. I believed there
will be many new clues uncovered in the process.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Hi, Jan, sorry for taking so long to reply, we wanted to get out early to do our shopping as it is uncommonly hot here! I hate it!
Thank you so very much for this lovely review, and the sixth beautiful star! You've made my day with your thoughtful comments, especially where you've mentioned Miles flash back. Thank you for always being so sweet. Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I know there is something I'm missing, some little something that is about to come into play right before my nose. But what? For the life of me, I just can't seem to pull it out. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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I know there is something I'm missing, some little something that is about to come into play right before my nose. But what? For the life of me, I just can't seem to pull it out. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Ric. All will become clear soon. I realised I'd not made one part very clear and I've edited it now. Oh for the life of the perfect author! Is there such a thing? Lol I'll be editing this at least a dozen more times when the book is finished, my favourite job ... NOT! Thanks my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I feel so bad for Miles. Having to tell Meg what his parents did must have been awful. He wouldn't know that Margot already knew a lot, and he might think she wouldn't want to marry him any more.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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I feel so bad for Miles. Having to tell Meg what his parents did must have been awful. He wouldn't know that Margot already knew a lot, and he might think she wouldn't want to marry him any more.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Cindy. Lots happening in the next part!! I'm getting closer to the end. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lancellot
Well, Miles continues to impress me. He really is a good man. I guess that may mean his parents were different when they were young, before jealousy crept in and ruined one heart after another. Very good idea. One of the deadly sins. Not the first time it has brought about ruin and a good story.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Well, Miles continues to impress me. He really is a good man. I guess that may mean his parents were different when they were young, before jealousy crept in and ruined one heart after another. Very good idea. One of the deadly sins. Not the first time it has brought about ruin and a good story.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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What a lovely review, Lancellot, thank you so much. Jealousy is an awful thing, and once bitten, it stays. As you say, it's not the first time it has ruined a relation. I'm so glad you are enjoying my story. There aren't many chapters to go. Thank you for the golden star, my friend, that is so nice of you, and I do appreciate them. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
We saw the play Hamilton a few years ago, and the major song and theme was "In the room where it happened." So, I'm expecting something big in the next chapter. Wouldn't surprise me if he didn't commit suicide, but was another victim. LOL
This is another marvelous chapter with very good character development
as we learn about Meg/Margot and Miles, their early relationship and love and concern for each other.
Now all eyes and ears will be tuned in to find out about that room.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hello Sandra,
We saw the play Hamilton a few years ago, and the major song and theme was "In the room where it happened." So, I'm expecting something big in the next chapter. Wouldn't surprise me if he didn't commit suicide, but was another victim. LOL
This is another marvelous chapter with very good character development
as we learn about Meg/Margot and Miles, their early relationship and love and concern for each other.
Now all eyes and ears will be tuned in to find out about that room.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Lol! That would be interesting, wouldn't it? What if it turned out that Gwendolyn had been there and poisoned Lord Crawley after having a torrid affair with him and then he'd dumped her! Lol!! You always put ideas into my head, Robert!
Thank you for another fabulous review, and the golden star. I always appreciate them. I don't know if I've ever told you, but sometimes you come out with something that completely changes where I was going ... Not this time, though!!! Humongous hugs, dear friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Shirley McLain
I know I've told you a million times, I do love this story. Are you planning on publishing it? At least an Amazon eBook. You always do such a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I know I've told you a million times, I do love this story. Are you planning on publishing it? At least an Amazon eBook. You always do such a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hi Shirley, thank you ever so much for the golden star, and your wonderful review. Yes, it will be published. I'll try to see if I can grab an agent, if not, I'll self-publish. I'm so glad you are enjoying it. Have a wonderful week my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
