I Get Misty
Refreshing respite11 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-A good poem to go with it; I can see
why you won the contest. Congratulations!
-You create a good word picture of the scene.
-There is a pleasant mood as "azure waters flow."
-A good concluding line, too.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-A good poem to go with it; I can see
why you won the contest. Congratulations!
-You create a good word picture of the scene.
-There is a pleasant mood as "azure waters flow."
-A good concluding line, too.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the congratulations, and I appreciate your comments. Using gifs are fun.
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You are welcome on both counts. Gifs can be fun.
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Thanks!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, I Get Misty, has the proper formatting and captures this idyllic scene of seclusion and serenity next to the powerful and playful falls. Nice.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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This 5-7-5, I Get Misty, has the proper formatting and captures this idyllic scene of seclusion and serenity next to the powerful and playful falls. Nice.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your supportive comments and rating my poem.
Comment from karenina
Congratulations on the win! This image was mesmerizing... I recall the mist rising off Niagara Falls... Such a peaceful sensation!
Very nice write, Sandra!
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Congratulations on the win! This image was mesmerizing... I recall the mist rising off Niagara Falls... Such a peaceful sensation!
Very nice write, Sandra!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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It too reminded me of my visit to the Niagara Falls. Thanks for your comments of support.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Wow, what a great photo. And the movement only adds to its beauty. I like "mist tickles" I can just imagine what is happening with that phrase.
Great rhyme.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Wow, what a great photo. And the movement only adds to its beauty. I like "mist tickles" I can just imagine what is happening with that phrase.
Great rhyme.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your supportive comments and for rating my poem.
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You're welcome, great soothing poem.
Comment from miajaffri
Great picture for your poem. It's a place I would have wanted to be on this
very hot Sunday. I like that your poem flows freely as the azure waters
flow. I can also feel the mist tickling not only the shores but my face.
So, my senses are alert to the azure waters flowing, the rocky falls and
the mist tickling.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Great picture for your poem. It's a place I would have wanted to be on this
very hot Sunday. I like that your poem flows freely as the azure waters
flow. I can also feel the mist tickling not only the shores but my face.
So, my senses are alert to the azure waters flowing, the rocky falls and
the mist tickling.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your supportive comments and for rating my poem.
Comment from Tiara L Hawthorne
Fist I must say what a fabulous picture to complement the piece! Perfectly describes the setting with words. What a calming scene. Great work! I would frame it.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Fist I must say what a fabulous picture to complement the piece! Perfectly describes the setting with words. What a calming scene. Great work! I would frame it.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your supportive review.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Hello Mystery Writer, I counted several times to be sure, because I don't normally give fours, but your syllable count is off in two lines... you currently have a 5-8-6 and it needs to be a 5-7-5 for the contest. You can condense by removing some of the repeated words, like "the" or "water" since they take away from its power... For example, you have:
Azure waters flow
freely over the waterfall ~
the mist tickles the shores
Condensing/deleting repeated words could look something like this:
Azure waters flow
freely over rocky falls -
mist tickles the shore
Let me know if you correct the syllable count. I'll come back and bump up my rating. I love the idea behind this, and the third line about tickling mist is fantastic.
Hope this is helpful
Cheers,
Erika
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Hello Mystery Writer, I counted several times to be sure, because I don't normally give fours, but your syllable count is off in two lines... you currently have a 5-8-6 and it needs to be a 5-7-5 for the contest. You can condense by removing some of the repeated words, like "the" or "water" since they take away from its power... For example, you have:
Azure waters flow
freely over the waterfall ~
the mist tickles the shores
Condensing/deleting repeated words could look something like this:
Azure waters flow
freely over rocky falls -
mist tickles the shore
Let me know if you correct the syllable count. I'll come back and bump up my rating. I love the idea behind this, and the third line about tickling mist is fantastic.
Hope this is helpful
Cheers,
Erika
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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I like your condensing and not repeating the same words. I will use your suggestion. It also fixes the syllable count problem. Thank you, dear friend, for your help. The 4 I am fine with. Brevity poems are a style I am gradually getting better in. You are appreciated.
Comment from Faith Williams
I really like your poem--great use of imagery and personification. I like the line, 'the mist tickles the shores.' Great job, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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I really like your poem--great use of imagery and personification. I like the line, 'the mist tickles the shores.' Great job, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for your comments and rating.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a beautiful place with running water in the wide blue yonder. There is something refreshing watching water fall down the sides of a mountain or rock. It is so cooling in warm weather. The sound also relaxes the mind.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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This is a beautiful place with running water in the wide blue yonder. There is something refreshing watching water fall down the sides of a mountain or rock. It is so cooling in warm weather. The sound also relaxes the mind.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Carolyn, I agree with you on all accounts. Thanks for your support and exceptional rating.
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You are welcome. Have a great day.
Comment from Regina Elliott
A refreshing oasis kind of
poem to wake up to this
Sunday morning. The image
of the waterfall is enchanting
too. Thank you for penning it.
Blessings to you ~
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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A refreshing oasis kind of
poem to wake up to this
Sunday morning. The image
of the waterfall is enchanting
too. Thank you for penning it.
Blessings to you ~
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and rating it. Blessings to you too,
